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Michael "Mike" Ichitsuyo; Half Demon Meister
Topic Started: Jan 15 2014, 11:55 AM (852 Views)
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Character Name: Michael "Mike" Ichitsuyo

Age: 14

Gender: Male

Type: Half Demon Meister

Partnered? No

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Clothing and description: Many people at his hometown, Tokyo described Michael as a handsome boy. The teenaged girls there in their own opinion have said he's cute or dreamy. This outlook on him is enhanced by his good nature. The boy stands at a height of 5 feet and 7 inches and weighs 148 pounds. His body is quite toned from the training his father have him. The muscles on his body can hardly be seen with his clothes, however. The shade of his skin is a cream white. His hair is a bright shade of brown standing up in a spiky, flame head-style. A small portion of his hair hangs in the back of his neck, which is are shown by two locks. His hair may be spiky, but it's really soft to touch. Three bangs hand down in front of his forehead and in between his eyes. The last part of his appearance is eye color, which is emerald green. When in his demon form, Michael's scleroses become black and his eye color turns bright red. His pupils also become slits. His teeth also become razor-sharp .

Michael's clothing is very interesting. It's also quite easy to describe. He wears a long-sleeve shirt that is a light shade of light-red. Worn over this shirt is a purplish black coat with short sleeves. The sleeves themselves reach halfway to his elbows. On the lower half of his body, he wears baggy shorts that are the same purplish black as his short-sleeve coat. The cuffs are folded and they reach up to his knees. On his feet, he wears a pair of smooth boots. They are a dark shade of crimson red. The part where he inserts his feet into them has cuffs. Also they reach up to his ankles.

Michael's demon half's outfit consists of a similar style, but with different colors. He wears the same long-sleeve shirt and short-sleeve coat, like Michael. The difference is that his shirt is a brighter shade of red and his coat is regular black. His shorts are also the same shade of black as his coat, along with his boots having the same shade of red as his shirt.

History: Michael was born in Tokyo, Japan into a loving family. His name was given to him from his mother. Through her studies in other cultures from books, she discovered the angel known as Saint Michael. This is where she got her son's name, because it felt like a little angel had entered her world. He seemed to radiated a strong light as she held him as an infant. Due to their great wealth, they lived in a mansion. It's big enough for a family of 8 members. It was bought when Michael's mother and father got married and decided to settle down in a nice big place. The mansion also had a nice field of grass where the kids can play or relax. In size, It's pretty much considered a miniature castle. The family that lives in this wonderful mansion within Tokyo is the Ichitsuyo Family. They are a family of powerful meisters and weapons. It was started 700 years ago, a 100 years after the sealing of the Original Kishin, Asura. The weapons of the family have powerful elemental abilities passed down to their children, ranging from any kind such as wind, fire, earth, water, lightning, etc. The members that are meisters have powerful souls, which are larger than the souls of average meisters. Because of their powerful souls, the meisters possess strong soul wavelengths. There is also have something else darker that lies in their bloodline. The Ichitsuyo Family has demon blood passed down through the generations. The parents with demon blood has a high possibility that their children will be born half demon. In fact, there are many half-demon family members. More than human family members. When a half-demon family member is born, their demon blood remains dormant until it awakens from the ages 11 to 17. The family member's demon blood can also have a late awakening when they are pass the age of 17. Each half-demon family member has a demon form unique to them, but with similar features to each other depending on their parents' demon forms.

There are family members who have mastered their demon halves and those who haven't. Family members who have mastered their demon half can transform freely into their demon form. They also have have access to abilities they hadn't before their complete mastery. Those who haven't mastered their demon halves yet can only awaken them through extreme anger. Because of this, they only use this power when they really have to, but they must be careful of how much power they can use. If a family member who hasn't mastered their demon half uses too much power than they can handle, they risk losing their reason to their own anger and end up becoming a raging beast. While in this state, they are wild and vicious. They could possibly attack anyone or anything that came near them whether they were friend or foe. A family member's demon half is the part of them that's demon. However, despite being part of their other respective halves, they act as separate entities. This means they have their own personalities. They can either differ or be similar to the family member's own personality. The great rage that influences a family member comes from the demon blood that runs through their veins. This means that their demon halves have nothing to do with the influence, except their power is indirectly loaned.

For a family member to master their demon half, they would have to try and connect with the demon in them. This meant they would have to enter their soul world and undergo training for abilities they will get when using their demon power someday. For an advancement in their training, the said family member is recommended to be aided by an adult or elder who knows of the process of mastering one's demon half. With the process of mastering their demon half, the family member can still lose control of their power with enough anger. It takes time for a family member to fully master their demon half, but the more they train the more in tune they become with their inner demon.

Michael's mother, Mia Ichitsuyo, is a Meister and was a student of the DWMA. She graduated with high grades and great combat skills. She's also one of the family members of the Ichitsuyo family that is all human. She was a regular talented Meister attending the academy before meeting his father. After becoming partner, she ended up falling for him and getting married. Michael's Father, Oiichi Ichitsuyo, is an elemental weapon of wind. To be specific he's a wind scythe. Michael inherited his mother's meister blood, but inherited something else from his father. His father was also half-demon which means he inherited his demon blood. His father has fully mastered his demon half years ago.

Michael at the age of 10 asked his parents about his demon blood and when will it awaken. His father told him that half demon family members usually all awoken naturally or by emotions, mostly anger. He also told him it happens to a family member between the ages of 11 and 17. Sometimes there are late awakenings pass the ages of 17. This meant that Michael had to wait until he was 11 and counting. After one year has passed, Michael's demon blood had awoken. It happened a week after his 11th birthday. When Michael was outside in the backyard of the family mansion and laying down in the shade of a tree, he started to hear demonic growls in his head. Then, a surge of dark power came coursing through his body. It was very intense as Michael had to hold his head with his left hand to focus. He walked back into his home and told his mother and father what happened outside. They were both expecting this as they knew the day would come when it's deduced that Michael is half demon. Being one of the meisters in the family and his mother, Mia taught her son hand-to-hand combat before he entered the DWMA. His father was the one to teach him on how to master his demon blood. He has trained him for 3 years. As a result, Michael so far can transform to the point where his eye and teeth change. He requires more training to transform further without losing his reason. The reason for this is because he has difficulty find the demon within him. Sessions were divided into certain amounts of time, so Michael could get the same amount of training from both his parents. Michael's father was also the head of the family. It mean the had difficulty making time for his son. Every time he was a little late, Michael understood that it was because of his duties to uphold the legacy of the Ichitsuyo Family.

As a young boy, Michael was raised well by his parents. He grew up with the ideas of doing good, being strong, the knowledge of weapons and meisters. He also grew up knowing of the DWMA and it's purpose to maintain peace. With these ideas in mind, Michael grew up into a strong and righteous young man. Before attending the academy, Michael was a student at a junior high school in Tokyo. He was one of the cool kids and got along with many of the student. Some even looked up to him as a idle. Whether this is due to his family's reputation or him just being Michael, his popularity was impressive. Basically, Michael's family is greatly known throughout Japan, so it's no surprise that the students idolize him. The boy found it cool that he was a celebrity of some sort. Still, there were punks looking to start a fight with Michael. They were jealous of his popularity and decided to challenge him. This ended with them easily defeated. It wasn't so difficult for Michael due to his training with his father. Like any other laid-back 14 year-old boy, Michael often slept through class. He hardly ever paid attention to the teacher. It was because to him that it wasn't as interesting as the DWMA. He felt like he wasn't at home here, even how well his life is going, despite his sleeping in class. With the lack of effort he puts into schoolwork involving using his intellect rather that his physical ability, he got barely got Cs.

Michael's relationship with his family in general is strong in bond and vast in love. He loves his parents greatly and is willing to give them a hand now and then, especially his mother. He's also willing to spend time with them, bonding over certain activities. At times, his mother and him go out to certain scenic routes. They will often talk about what's on their mind and have some lunch. When bonding with his father, they do more physical activity such as sports. Oiichi was the one to teach Michael basketball, in fact. Michael also has siblings, which he has a close bond when growing up. Specifically, he has three older brothers, one younger sister, and one younger brother. This meant he has 5 siblings. Luckily, none of their relationships were strained and never treated each other poorly. They were always looking after one another and looking to cheerful their younger siblings up.

Michael has always dreamed of going to the academy and becoming a powerful Meister. His dream is to become a legend among meisters, like Stein was the most powerful Meister to ever graduate. Also like any other young Meister, Michael aspires to make a Death Scythe. Oiichi and Mia decided it was time to move back to Death City, but this time with the family. They packed their things and moved to another mansion, stationed in there. Michael was then, enrolled into the academy as a freshman and starts his first day tomorrow. Now his journey begins to become a great Meister.

Personality: Michael is a kind and caring person. He cares greatly for his friends and loves his family. If there is anyone in trouble, especially them, he'll help. Whether it's a small problem or someone in dire need, Michael will not hesitant to provide assistance. He is quite confident in himself and his abilities. He is flattered at times when someone compliments him on his technique. This shows he has some pride in his skill. He can at times, be laid-back and carefree. He will often enjoy the best of life whether by himself or with friends and family. Michael looks on the bright side of situations, never losing hope and always keeps going. This perseverance can also rub off on others to help strengthen their confidence. He is protective of his friends and family, often standing up for them when they are in danger or threatened. He's also protective of innocent people when they are in danger as well or are being bullied. When his friends and/or family are in danger, he'll defend them no matter what. He will even suffer injuries. No matter what happens to him, he'll make sure to protect those close to him. He will even risk his life for an innocent bystander he doesn't even know. This shows that Michael is a very selfless person, often thinking of the well-being of others instead of his. The boy also likes to get stronger. He'll train to increase his mastery and the strength of his abilities. Michael tries his best to become as strong or stronger than the other students as he is determine to become the strongest. It doesn't matter how old he is, he'll get strong.

Michael is a person who chooses brute force rather than a strategy. The reason being he is not much of a strategist. This leaves him at a disadvantage when in battle of wits. He is also at odds in other situations dealing with certain trivia. Michael is not one of the smartest students and so he gets grades that are of passing rate, rarely getting "A"s. Despite not being as smart as the other students, Michael's physical skill and prowess is more than enough to make up from this weaknesses. He can also improvise when coming up with an idea of his own. Michael is a creative individual and can think of the most unexpected answers to questions at times. His creativity is effective in through off an opponent, making him unpredictable.

Michael can be brave and courageous in the face of many dangers. When facing extreme odds, he will stand his ground no matter what. It doesn't matter what evil stands before him, he will not run away. He will stand and fight for his friends, family, and innocent lives. Whether it be a Kishin egg, Witch, or even a demon, Michael will face them with great courage in his heart. This bravery of his does not waver, even under the most intimidating of opponents. Instead, their presences prompts him to engage in combat. Michael can also be serious in battle or when the situation calls for it. Michael also has a love for battle, like his father and brothers. He likes to fight powerful opponents and is always up for a challenge. He will, however, not fight a girl as he believes it to be wrong. Unless the girl is evil then, Michael can fighter without holding back. When he is about to began a battle, he usually says his favorite phrase, "Time To Fight" at the start. Michael will also, smirk sometimes when he meets a powerful opponent, when the battle becomes exciting, or at the start of a battle.

Michael has a hot-temper, meaning he's easily angered. He can endure insults well, but if they are about his family, friends, or skill, he'll explode. It can also be his friends acting like jerks as well as when they are fighting. If they happen to argue, Michael will get them to stop by yelling at them to stop and remind them of what's important. When angered, Michael can be aggressive and violent. He can also get a furious look in his eye. Mostly, he's aggressive with the guys, since he will never hurt a girl or woman. Michael is a chivalrous boy and treats a woman with respect. He is also loyal and would never betray a friend. His vicious temper was inherited from his father, but the man only get's aggressive with his adult friends. Michael can also be stubborn when it comes to his own opinions or doing what is right. He will do it himself, if the situation calls for it. When he has his mind set on doing the right thing, he will not take "no" for an answer.

Michael's demon half has a personality is more focused and determined compared his human half. He does have similar personality traits. Like Michael, his demon half is kind and caring. He also cares for the people his human half cares for. He can be protective of others as well. Another common trait is his unwavering courage. Unlike Michael, his demon half is more serious contrast to the boys laid-back attitude, He's always focused on the attack at hand. When the task is complete, he is then able to relax. Michael's demon half is also more intelligent than him. This means he's also strategic and can think of certain tactics to defeat an opponent. Unlike Michael, his demon half is more level-headed, not losing his temper so easily. He is more calm and collected, never letting insults get to him.

Abilities:

Technique Name: Demon Wavelength - Rage Type
Effects/Description: The Demon Wavelength is a rare and dark type of wavelength common to the Ichitsuyo family members with demon blood. The color of this wavelength is black and red. It's unique in which it doesn't emit a madness pull, like a Madness Wavelength from other individuals that harbor madness such as Kishins or Witches. The Demon Wavelength is a wavelength quite opposite to the Anti-Demon Wavelength, having dark characteristics akin to it's destructive nature. Still, it has some similarities in regards to the user's protection. Whereas the Anti-Demon Wavelength repels madness, the Demon Wavelength controls both madness and darkness. It empowers the user with these forces, enhancing their abilities and attributes. However, the Demon Wavelength only provides a resistance to insanity, but leaves the user vulnerable to rage. This means that they only have a partial resistance, considering rage also has madness in it as well, hence an Ichitsuyo family member losing their reason to anger. The amount of madness Michael can stand is 60%. This wavelength only affects the user mentally, leaving their partner safe from the mental affect.

The Rage Type is very destructive against opponent while in battle. It's abilities and characteristics are based on anger. The destructive power the Rage Type has is dark and demonic. It can even give chills as if a dark presence is among others. It differs from other wavelengths being that it's not human. This wavelength comes from the part of a family member's soul that is there demon half no matter what type.

Michael activates this wavelength when he awakens his demon half's power through his rage. It works as an enhancement for his body, making him faster, stronger, and more deadly. His strength reaches the point he can lift 300 pounds and the moment. His speed has risen to the point of running faster than an athlete. The current increase in power he gets allows him to hold his own against a Kishin Egg. However, he still has difficulty in the battle. This increase in power will only help him so much against a Witch. It will have more difficulty fighting them than a Kishin Egg. The power of Michael's Demon Wavelength increases as he becomes angrier. Still, he has to watch the amount of his anger as he power can rage out of control. Reaching this point, he will start losing his reason and eventually attack anything and anyone out of rage. The Demon Wavelength can also disrupt the user's own Soul Wavelength when in a struggle over their anger. While in this struggle it becomes difficult for the user to match wavelengths with their partner, since their rage throws them out of sync with them. The dark characteristics are ignored in terms of resonance as Michael's personality is dominant. It is due to the reign of his attitude that it's difficult to match wavelength with his partner when he is starting to lose his reason. This also means that the dark characteristics don't affect the weapon.

The destructive potential of the Rage Type is quite astonishing. Currently, the level of power and control Michael has over the Rage type is that it increases his strength and speed to a level high enough to keep one step of a Kishin Egg and be able to avoid most attacks from a Witch. They can also increase the damage inflicted by his punches and kicks, having them deliver larger impacts. They are strong enough to break through light armor and dent heavy armor.

Michael has discovered this wavelength, because his demon blood has awoken. It is due to the fact of the Demon Wavelength coming from the demon part of an Ichitsuyo Family member's soul. The demon wavelength can be exhausting after extensive use, however.

Technique Name: High-Speed Healing and Regeneration
Effects/Description: A passive ability for an Ichitsuyo Family member with demon blood. Since Michael is half demon, his wounds heal faster than humans. They heal so fast that others can see them closing up, like an immortal's. Steam will usually show around Michael's wounds when they are healing. His healing ability is not to be confused with a actual immortal. This ability is active in bot his human and demon form. Michael and his family are also not of the Immortal clan, meaning they're not immortals, but powerful mortals. A particular size of the wound matters. They will all heal at different amounts of time. Aside from the basic ability to heal cuts and bruises, the High-Speed Healing and Regeneration can also heal broken bones faster. This regeneration sometime contributes to the healing of deeper cuts or gashes.

Despite this miraculous ability to heal one's self, it does not replenish expended energy. This means, Michael has to regain his strength by normal means of rest. This also means that it won't guarantee he will continue his current battle with an opponent or that will be able to execute attacks. Depending on the size of injury, it takes certain amounts of time for his wounds to heal. For small wounds such as cuts, stabs, and bruises, it takes 4 posts. Multiple wounds of this kind will take longer to heal, up to a maximum of 6 posts. For larger wounds such as deeper cuts, larger bruises, broken bones, and harsh burns it takes 8 post. It would take much longer to heal multiple wounds of these kind. It will take up to 10 posts. The time it takes for a large wound is basically twice as long for Michael. There is also has a weak spot for his regenerative abilities, his heart and brain. If one of this spots are damaged beyond repair, then he really will die without personal aid.

Technique Name: Demon Half Transformation
Effects/Description: Through his training with his demon blood since the age of 11, Michael has tapped into the ability to transform into his demon half. This rise in power combined with his Demon Wavelength makes him a deadly force. However, so far Michael has only reach the stage of the transformation where his eye and teeth change. In this state, he is exceptionally fast and incredibly strong. He can lift 300 pounds and run faster than an athlete. One punch can crack rock as hard as stone.

He can hold his own against a Kishin egg, but still have difficulty. He will also has more difficulty fighting a Witch, even with his extra boost in power. While fighting with a weapon partner, he still has trouble fighting a Witch, but has a lower possibility of getting serious injuries. When fighting a Kishin egg with a partner, he still has trouble at times and can get hurt. However, the increase in speed and strength gives him a slight advantage as he can evade the Kishin egg's attacks and deliver damage slightly more potent than regular blows. As powerful as he his when in this state, there is a danger for exceeding his current stage. If he were to change any further, he would risk losing his mind and becoming a raging beast, destroying everyone and everything in sight. He needs more training with his demon blood to change further into his full demon form.

While Michael is in control of his demon half's power, the resonance with him and his weapon is stable with no problems. His wavelength remains the same, but much stronger. However, if he loses control of his anger along with his power, his wavelength could fluctuate and result in higher difficulty for the weapon to keep their wavelengths matched. His rage changes his wavelength to a different one quite foreign to his partner to resonate with.

There are limits to Michael demonic transformation. Currently, he can only stay in this state for a total of 5 posts. After that time has been reach, he will automatically revert back to his human form. To transform again, he would have to wait a good 6 posts to change again. As mention before with the tiring effect on his Demon Wavelength, Michael will have to wait a certain amount of time to recuperate his strength. This will take 2 post to get in normal condition again. During that time, Michael will be exhaust and have difficulty dodging even a Kishin Egg's attacks.

Combat Style: Michael's fighting style involves fighting at a close range. When fighting unarmed, he uses an array of punches and kicks. When fighting with a weapon, he combines punches and kicks along with their strikes, but mostly it involves strikes from his weapon. Due to the training his had taken from his father, Michael has above average strength, allowing him to deliver more damage than a regular punch and kick. He's also durable, making him more resistant to blunt damage than regular meisters. Michael can be evasive as well to an enemy attacks. However, he's not so fast that he can dodge attacks moving at high speeds. Michael exact strength is that he can lift a total of 130 pounds. This makes his quite strong for a boy his age. His speed is adequate, being near the level of an athletic runner, but still not high enough to dodge high-speed attack, such as bullets made of Soul Wavelength.

Michael is not much of a strategist as he mostly uses brute force in battle. Since he's a powerful attacker, he sometimes tries to overwhelm his enemies. He often rushes head-on into a fight against an opponent, hardly thinking of what strategy to take. He will then, engage in close-quarters combat. He mostly goes with the flow of the situation. Michael is a creative individual and his creativity provides much of an advantage. Despite not being so tactical, he can come up with interesting and unexpected ideas to turn the tide of battle in his favor.

When in the middle of a battle, Michael remains focused and alert to his opponent. He is ready for any attack they decided to execute. Michael is mostly the one to begin the battle with the first strike. However, if his enemy would like to start first, he will oblige. He basically rushes at the opponent and prepares to land a blow. If the attack fails to make contact or is blocked, he retaliates with a second hit. While on the offensive, Michael goes with his instinct and delivers blows as well as countering his opponent. When on the defensive, basically guarding against an enemy's attack. Michael will either try to guard or evade the attack. When guarding, he uses his body when unarmed or his weapon when partnered. If the attack is to much for his weapon, he'll take the blow instead. Michael also will take any blow to defend his friend, even if it does leave him close to death.

Being skilled in hand-to-hand combat, Michael can easily beat a thug to a pulp. He fairs well against a gang too, being able to knock them all out in record time. For powerful and/or inhuman opponent, it's a real challenge for him to defeat. Against a Kishin egg, he is still able to fend for himself, but needs a weapon to deliver a killing blow. Fighting a witch is more difficult. They are experienced magic users as well as being the 100th soul to collect. Michael, obviously, will not far well against theses opponents.

Michael's demon half fights more seriously. When training with Michael in his soul world, he remains alert for any attack his human half might launch. It's similar to how Michael fights, even rushing head first into a battle, but he attacks more aggressively. Being his demon half, it's natural for him to use excessive force. When on the defensive, he either defends or dodges an opponents attack.

Miscellaneous Information:

Fears: Losing Those Close to Him - Michael fears losing the people close to him

Strengths:
  • For this section try to summarise your character's combat advantages ^_^ (eg: Really fast- can turn invisible - has super sniper skills)
  • Michael is very resistant to madness, due to his demon blood and Demon Wavelength.
  • He has above average strength, making his punches and kicks stronger than regular ones along with any other melee attacks, which includes strikes from his weapon partner.
  • His body is resistant to blunt attacks, making him able to endure more damage than the average Meister.
  • Heals faster than humans when wounded due to his him being half demon.

Weaknesses:
  • For this section try to summarise your character's combat disadvantages ^_^ (eg: Can't hit anything red - Really dumb at strategy - gets tired after a few attacks)
  • Michael is not good at strategy and is at a disadvantage with intelligence, forcing him to rely on just brute force.
  • He's easily angered, which can put him in danger of unleashing too much power of his demon half and risk losing his reason.
  • He's at a disadvantage fighting a person who uses only long-ranged attacks. They prevent him from landing close-range attacks to his opponent.
  • He is not resistant to piercing or slash attacks and takes the same amount of damage as any other Meister.

Roleplay Sample:

Within the class of Crescent Moon, students sat in their seats quietly as the teacher took attendance. He was carefully going through the names of the students present within the classroom. He is trying to be sure not to miss one. In one of the seats that laid at the back of the class, Michael Ichitsuyo sat peacefully. He was leaning back on the front of another desk behind him, which served as a wall. Both his hands rested behind his head and his feet remained on the floor as he looked up towards the room's ceiling. It was an easy case to tell that Michael was bored.

'Man, when is this class gonna start and end already, I'm so bored.' He thought as his gaze changed to the front of the classroom. It was focused on the teacher as he was going through the students' names. He was wondering when he will find a weapon to wield. After all, a Meister can't put up much of a fight without their weapon partner, but Michael can handle himself well. Even without a weapon, he is still a formidable foe to fight against. Despite this certain strength, the boy still aspires to make a Death Scythe. Another thought relating to his future partner suddenly came to him.

'Hmm, I wonder if my weapon will be a boy or girl.' He thought. It really doesn't matter that much to him on his partners gender, but thinks it would be interesting to have a girl as his partner. Having a guy as his weapon is approving as well. He really doesn't mind all that much. He did wonder, if they would end up being good friends. He also wondered, if he weapon would considered him a great master. If that was the case, he would consider his weapon a great pupil. He thoughts were diverted as the teacher announced the starting of class. Michael leaned up straight and laid both his hands from behind his head on the desk. He was hoping the class would start sooner or later.

'Ah finally, class is starting. So, what are we gonna learn today' He thought, listening on the teacher's explanation on what Kishin eggs are.
Edited by mjt016, Feb 7 2014, 01:57 AM.
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Hello mjt, I'm Tatsuken and I shall be your moderator for this character profile. What you have so far is superb, I feel like I have grasped what it means to be an Ichitsuyo and what your character is about. However, there are some rough edges to fix.

History: So far it is a great explanation of what the Ichitsuyo family is like, where Mike's powers and skills come from, but at the same time, we don't really learn too much about Mike either. So here's some questions to consider:


  • Maybe it was just worded weirdly but it seems like Mike's mom was part of the family to begin with, like a cousin or sister. Could you please put some more information to help clarify if this is true or not?
  • What kind of ideas was he raised with?
  • What was school like for Mike before going to Shibusen?
  • What was his relationship with his parents like? How about the rest of his family in general?
  • Does he have siblings?
  • Has he transformed into his demon form before?
  • Has he just begun schooling in Shibusen or has he been there for a period of time already? (just to clarify)


Just some basic things to start with I guess cause how you answer these may actually spawn more questions. Think of the history this way, it should justify your character's existence and not just his skills.

Personality: You mention the demon half having a personality at some point, maybe describe it a bit?

Abilities:I like how well the abilities are described so far, so most of these mods will be general balancing and clarification.

First off, Soul Perception: minor thing, Soul Perception is actually not common. In the whole series of Soul Eater we see only 5 people use it Stein, Maka, Tsubaki, BJ, and Ox. Everyone else gets by without using it in most cases. Which is fine cause in most cases Shinigami already labelled people to kill. Next thing, how does Mike perceive souls? For the 5 people listed they have different ways. Maka and Stein can see souls. When resonating with Black*Star Tsubaki seems to be able to hear souls. BJ has his whole lie detector thing, which seem to involve physical contact and/or listening in addition to seeing the souls, and Ox, the craziest one of them all, styled his hair that way to use them as a radar/antenna, focused solely on Kim's soul, so he could know when she's nearby. How far can Mike perceive souls right now? How does he activate it? Or is it always just on? Any other interesting things he can do with it and/or limitations to it?

Demon Wavelength-Rage Type: Great description of the wavelength so far, though power levels are vague and no idea how Mike uses it, plus it seems to reference skills Mike doesn't have. Another minor thing, the Anti-demon wavelength doesn't destroy darkness, just madness, rather it purifies.

You said there are other types, could you give examples of other types and how they differ from the Rage type? What kind of destructive power does it have? How does it differ from other wavelengths in this regard? What is/What do you mean by Anger and Bloodlust Distortions? Describe Mike's skill and ability with his wavelength please.

Does his regenerative ability have any actual drawbacks or limitations?

Can Mike Transform?

Combat style: To help us judge his strength, how does he do one on one with say the average thug? how about against a gang of thugs? maybe one on one with a kishin egg.

Strengths/Weaknesses: If the demon blood and demon wavelength doesn't generate madness and instead repels it, how would he become mad due to the wavelength?
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Hello mjt, I’m currently sick so I’ll just be focusing on one or two sections of your profile this round.

Abilities:

Soul Perception: What do souls look like to him through soul perception? For example, we’ve got members who see these souls like auras rather than the actual soul, one can see them like a heartbeat monitor display, and someone else is about to add synthesia to theirs. In addition can his soul perception pierce witch protect?

Demon Wavelength: Ok good, now that I know a little more about the types, it doesn’t seem like they have a specific theme. What kinds of limitations exist for the types of demon wavelength? Could someone have like a Rubber type demon wavelength? Or maybe a fisher type demon wavelength?

The whole concept destroying thing doesn’t make too much sense to me, could he attack and destroy insanity and no one can ever be insane again? Would it work on other concepts like love and courage?

I’m still not clear on the destructive potential of the demon wavelength. Can it barely cut/melt butter? Or could a mere soul menace with the wavelength level an entire city? If it’s more of a scale depending on how much control one has with the demon wavelength, what is the least amount of damage one can do with it and what is the most damage one can do with the wavelength alone?

If only Ichitsuyo family members can have this soul wavelength, why would someone else be able to use Bloodlust distortion? What exactly does it do? Why would it injure the user? What exactly is it? Similar questions for Anger distortions. As it is right now, it just sounds like you’re giving fancy names for someone being really angry or wanting to kill someone really badly.

What does the demon wavelength do to madness and darkness? There’s a word missing. The description following it just sounds like a normal madness self-resonation.

Please put the ability in a spoiler tag if mike can’t use it yet.

High Speed Healing and Regeneration: Is the Ichitsuyo family part of the Immortal clan? Are there any special attacks he has to be wary of to avoid semi-permanent or even completely permanent damage (i.e. Free’s tail never grows back after Maka uses Witch Hunter on it)? If Mike isn’t part of the Immortal clan what kind of drawback will make him more careful instead of being a meat shield?

It is still not clear to me if Mike can transform or not. If he can please add it to the ability section, if an ability isn’t in this section then your character can’t use it in RP.

Combat Style: Does Mike's demon half fight any differently?

Please post in this thread when you finish your edits so i can see it in the active topics later.
Edited by Tatsuken, Jan 21 2014, 02:01 AM.
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Alright Mjt, for the most part you seem almost done.

History: For most part it is fine, but it's still not clear if Mike's mom was always part of the Ichitsuyo family or was married in. It currently sounds like she's blood related to her husband since you say that the Ichitsuyo family does have completely human members as well as human members with demon blood.

Why did classmate view him as idle when he seems to have been rather hardworking while in Japan?

Why would Mike need to talk to his parents about awakening his demon side if it already awoke when he was 11? The placement of the sentence saying his demon blood awoke when he was 11 is also a bit awkward, but not a big issue.

Abilities: Your character is currently very powerful, much too powerful for a starting character, so we might need to discuss this in person. Soul Eater actually has a lower power level than most shounen anime/manga, especially early on.

Overall, this is a great profile character wise and for the most part it just seems to have combat balancing issues, and I feel like at this point we need to focus on them since the ability section is now contradicting parts of his other sections.

I would also like to ask you to please read the Rules and Guidelines thread.
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Hey there mjt, ZX here. I'll be taking over a bit here since Tatsu isn't feeling to well. Well, all else aside, let's get right into it shall we?

Clothes & Desc
First of all may I just say, great job on the appearance section of this. You obviously put a lot of thought into describing exactly how his hairstyle and body type look, and it really shows through. However, when we get down to the clothes section I feel like there's a pretty major oversight that needs to be addressed. Namely, you say that he wears shorts, which is fine. But you also say they reach past his ankles, and I'm pretty sure at that point you're pretty much just talking about pants, not shorts. Could you please clarify this little mix up for me? ^^

Another side note about his clothes is that you say his demon form doesn't affect his clothes, and then in the same sentence you talk about how his clothes are affected by his demon form. Please correct this to clarify that his demon form does in fact affect his clothes.

History
In the fifth paragraph, you have the following sentence, "Michael's demon blood awoken when he turned 11 years-old." However, you had just established previously that by age 14, his demon blood had not awakened. From the context, I assume this sentence is meant to refer to Michael's father, but some clarification would be nice. Also, shortly afterward you mention that his father is an autonomous weapon and taught Michael hand-to-hand combat skills, but you also mention that his mother was the father's meister. While it is not impossible for an auto-weapon to have a meister, I do have to question why it's necessary when Michael could just as easily have learned hand-to-hand combat from his mother, the meister. You also still include her teaching him soul perception even though it's been removed from his abilities. If you could clear these things up a bit that would be wonderful.

Also, just out of curiosity, why is he named Michael if he was born into a Japanese family. Both his father and mother are Japanese, and have Japanese names, so it seems a little out of place for him to have an American name. I'd like to see some mention of this made somewhere in his history.

Personality
I feel like the second paragraph here looks a bit out of place in his personality. It seems to be talking more about his fighting style, and you have other paragraphs talking about his hot-headedness and such, so having this paragraph here feels awkward.

Abilities

Demon Wavelength - Rage Type
Um... wow, okay. So if I'm understanding this right, Michael's wavelength itself has the power to cut through steel, level city blocks, and kill immortals. I hope I don't need to explain why this is insanely overpowered, especially for a starting character. It can also... destroy concepts? I don't really understand what that means, or in what way it could be used? Are you saying he could actually reach into someone's soul and destroy their fighting spirit, for example? In addition, while it is implied that all of this is only true while he is transformed into his demon form, it's never explicitly stated. In short, I'd really like to know more about what Mike can actually do right now, rather than what kinds of powers you want him to learn in the future. We believe in character growth on this forum, which means that a character starts out relatively weak, but can grow much stronger through the use of training threads. It's simply unreasonable that a starting level character can do things like blow up a whole city block with just his wavelength. Also, you mention here that he has awakened his demon blood, but I don't see where this happened anywhere in his history. Please add it.

High-Speed Healing and Regeneration
This is also a bit unreasonable. Compared to our resident Immortals, Sigil and Charm, Mike heals at an insanely rapid rate, and can even regrow limbs in only two posts when it costs an Immortal character 10 years off their total lifespan to perform similar acts of regeneration. And yet you specifically mention that his healing factor is not on par with an immortals. His healing powers need to be toned down significantly. It is also unclear if these regenerative powers work while he's in human form, or only while in his demon form. Please specify what difference there is, if any.

Demon Half Transformation
Again, his history makes no mention of him gaining this ability, and in fact outright states that he does not have it yet. This must be included in his history in order to be used as an ability. I also feel that this is just too overpowered an ability for a starting character. As a starting character he can easily kill a kishin egg and can overpower a witch by just getting a little ticked off? There need to be clear limits set on his strength and speed, both before and after the transformation, and they cannot be this unreasonably powerful. I highly recommend you take a look at some other profiles of accepted characters to get an idea of what kind of power level is acceptable for a starting character.

Strengths & Weaknesses
As far as I can see, Mike is all strength and hardly any weakness. In fact, two of his weaknesses can actually be construed as strengths. You claim his lack of tactical thinking is a liability, but his demon half is highly tactical, meaning this is no longer an issue if he simply allows his demon half to take over. Similarly, you imply that him being prone to anger, and thus unleashing his demon side is a weakness, and yet when he does so he grows immensely powerful, with little or no risk to himself.

Overview
In short, this is a very interesting and clearly well envisioned character. I can tell you've put a lot of thought and effort into developing Mike's abilities, backstory, and everything. But he's just too strong for the power level of a starting character in our Soul Eater based setting. There are also a lot of details between his history and abilities that are too unclear, making it difficult to tell when or even if he has awakened his demon blood, how much control he has over it, and so forth. I really think it would help you to look at some of our already accepted characters and get an idea of the kinds of things we allow here before taking a second look at your character and deciding how to best balance him to fit into our setting.
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Alright, I believe I have a much clearer picture of his history now, thank you for that. There are still a few things I'd like to look at though.

Clothes & Desc
This section is mostly fine now, but there's still the matter of his mysterious shorts. Typically shorts don't extend beyond the knee, but you have them covering 3/4ths of his calves, again at which point we're talking about pants. I know I keep harping on this, but clarity of description is important to give us a clear idea of what Mike looks like. We have a lot of great artists on this site that like to draw OCs, but it's much harder for them to do so without a clear image in their mind of what a character looks like, and conflicting descriptions like this make it hard on them.

Abilities
Okay, we're getting there. What I'd like for you to do know is go through his abilities and take out any mention of future powers you want him to have later, and leave in only what he can actually do right now. Feel free to save everything else somewhere else for reference of course, but all we want to see in his profile are the actual abilities he can currently use. Everything else you can add back in later through training threads over time, but as it is his actual abilities are so lost in all the descriptions of his family's powers or his future powers that it's very difficult to tell what Mike can actually do himself. Other than that, there are some specific things I'd like to see added as well.

Demon Wavelength - Rage Type
You mention here that his wavelength passively boosts his attack strength, as well as the power of any demon weapon he wields. First of all, I don't really think an ability like this is reasonable, particularly for someone with as many other powerful skills as Mike has. Secondly, I don't really understand how it's meant to work. If anything, having a demonic or "dark" wavelength should make it more difficult for him to resonate with a weapon partner, not boost their effectiveness. Thirdly, any time you're going to say that an ability boosts something, be it his attacking strength or speed or what have you, you need to give us some idea how significant the boost is, as well as some kind of baseline from which it is being boosted. Again, looking at some previously approved characters might give you an idea for how this sort of thing might work. In short, please look over this ability and remove any references to powers that Mike does not currently have access to, and then take what's left over and clarify exactly how the powers he does have work.

High-Speed Healing and Regeneration
Alright, this is looking a little bit more reasonable. However, I would like to know a little more about what you're considering a "small" or "large" wound. What is the upper limit of these two categories? Additionally, you mention he can mend broken bones faster. Is that considered a "large" wound? Or is it in a category unto itself? In which case it needs to have an established amount of time as well.

Demon Half Transformation
Much like with the Demon Wavelength ability, what I'd like to see here is more concrete details about how much of a boost Mike's demon form grants him. Saying things like "he can hold his own against a kishin egg" is all well and good, but it doesn't tell me about how hard he hits or how fast he runs in this form. You also don't mention anything about how long it take for him to enter this form, how long he can stay in it safely without giving in to his demon half, or what effects this transformation might have on his weapon partner. I can only imagine that if the person I was resonating with suddenly transformed into a half-demon form, our resonance might be thrown for a bit of a loop.

Overview
At this point, the only thing really holding Mike back from being approved is his abilities section, which is still too nebulous and undefined to be a useful reference for his abilities. The majority of his Demon Wavelength ability is actually about his family as a whole, not Mike personally, when it should just be telling me exactly what it does for Michael. His Demon Transformation says that it boosts his strength and speed, but gives no indication of how much it increases by or how long he can maintain it. The bottom line is, I need to know exactly what Michael can do right now, without all the extraneous detail about his family's powers or his future powers. And remember, if you want to discuss ways you could help balance your character, the cbox is always full of people who would be more than happy to help out.
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I've made edits, I've organized the paragraph in his Demon Wavelength, so you can better see what Michael can do with it. I've also tried to delete any references of what future abilities he might get. I've added more specific details on his regenerative ability and demon half transformation. Is there anything else I'm not see or need to add. Let me know and all get on it.
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