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Car Guy; Weapon and Mechanic
Topic Started: Feb 24 2013, 11:09 PM (231 Views)
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[Charles Fredrickson] [Weapon]

Name: Charles "Car Guy" Fredrickson

Age: 17

Type: Weapon

Partnered: Nope!

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Description: Charles is fairly tall and big. He has a small amount of pudge, because of his atrocious eating habits. He keeps his hair down a little below his ears. His hair is dark and kind of scraggly. He has some semblance of muscle (rusted bolts don't turn themselves). Most of his weight and his strength is in his lower body. His shoulders are very broad. They Measure a good foot and a half from shoulder to shoulder. He has about a five ten wingspan. And is about five eleven in height. He weighs around 220 lbs. his face is fairly round. He has fairly narrow brown eyes. His nose is medium length and rounded slightly. He has large angular eyebrows. His mouth is almost always in a relaxed smirk. He tends to wear all black so stains don't show. He likes cargo pants, and keeps a pair of welder's gloves in the lower pocket. He wears a thin hoodie around the shop, and tee shirts the rest of the time. He leads with his right shoulder when he walks.

He has two weapon forms. The first is a pre Geneva Convention Trench Knife. The blade is about eight inches. The handle is hard dark wood (Oak Maybe could be some sort of stain). The hand guard has the rounded bumps running along it which are perfect for breaking noses and jaws. The blade’s shape makes wounds caused by it almost impossible to repair by non magical means. Because it not only stabs but it also tears.

The second one is a push dagger. This weapon has a three to four inches long about two and a half inches wide. The blade goes between the middle and ring fingers on the dominant hand. There is a small black plastic piece perpendicular to the blade for holding. That extends to both sides with the blade in the middle.

History: Charles was born into a lower middle class family in Detroit. He has no siblings. He excelled in school most of his talents lying in the areas of science and math. His parents were always very supportive of him. Especially his dreams of becoming a mechanical engineer. His dad cashed in a favor and got Charles a job at a mechanics shop. Unfortunately the patrons were not exactly model citizens (cough street gangsters cough). This is where he first started seeing souls. At first they were only from bodies of individuals killed during gang fights and transported in the trunks of the cars brought in though after a while he thought he saw the gang members eating them when they thought he wasn’t looking. He just assumed they were hallucinations. Several months later he accidently discovered his ability to change into weapons. There was a police raid on the shop where he worked. In a panic he accidently activated his power, and changed into the push dagger. Unfortunately he fell into the bucket of oil he had just finished changing. After several hours he changed back. He was disgusting and covered in oil, but he wasn't in jail. He spent several weeks experimenting with different things to see what activated the transformation. He eventually figured out that visualizing the weapon worked. He then attempted to change into other weapons after hours of finding weapons and attempting to change into them he found that he could also change into a trench knife. He took great care to keep this particular ability a secret. He had no knowledge of Shibusen. One day he was visited by a couple of gang members. These particular gangsters had taken up eating souls. While he was changing their oil two Shibusen students came for the gangsters when the fight broke out Charles changed to hide one of the students saw his transformation and recruited him despite his passive aggressive insults him bringing him to Shibusen. He now works as a mechanic fixing the vehicles used by students and staff, and occasionally goes on missions. He attends a few classes on combat and soul related subjects but gets out of the other ones due to his high school education. He has told his parents that he was offered a job elsewhere and they still are in the dark about his connections with Shibusen.

Personality: Charles tends heavily towards the melodramatic. He tends to completely blow things out of proportion. He is an excellent story teller if one is not too worried about accuracy. He is by no means a fighter but understands the human machine fairly well. He tends towards maths over humanities. He is more than willing to make his position on an issue completely clear. He finds the eating of souls disgusting and only does so under extreme duress. He refers to souls as floating dead people goo, and maintains that eating them cannot be sanitary. He tends to avoid other people. His unfortunate occupation makes it quite difficult for him to trust others. He is very awkward in social situations, and has trouble making friends. He can get very abrasive. He has trouble with people who don’t have as much knowledge as him. He easily gets exasperated with people in charge if they don’t make sense to him. He tends to be very passive aggressive to those he doesn’t like and has trouble trying to not act like whatever the people he does like want him to be. In addition to mechanics he enjoys entering senseless arguments over the internet just to be right and mocking conspiracy theorists.

Fighting style: The trench knife has a very specific place in combat. Most of the time the user will be able to et off one effective strike that does a lot of damage and then they have to back off. This weapon causes a lot of damage per hit but is best used in conjunction with another weapon. The push dagger has pretty much only one use and that is assassinations it is easily hidden brought out used and hidden again. It is great for attacking an enemy who is unaware of the threat posed by you cause they often won’t see the knife till it has cut them it is terrible for almost anything else.

Abilities: He can transform. Also he is a very skilled and efficient mechanic.

Technique Name: Push Dagger
Effects/Description: The Push Dagger is a stealth weapon. It is very easy to hide and very easy to pull out. The strikes go to venerable kill shots. Like the temples, base of the skull neck, or other near the skin major blood vessels.

Technique Name: Trench Knife
Effects/Description: The Trench Knife is a WW1 invention for melee combat in the trenches. The knife is especially designed to puncture bone and light armor making head strikes much more effective. The hand guard works like brass knuckles. Breaking bones and possible getting in a kill. The shape of the blade was very beneficial it caused wounds that cannot be healed by nonmagical treatments.

Misc. Info: Charles talks to himself a lot. Good at math.

Strengths:


  • very good mechanic
  • Weapons both very effective in their niche of combat
  • Carries around welders gloves which are flame retardant and weigh a couple of pounds adding to damage caused by strikes
  • Good knowledge of the mechanics of the body's systems


Weaknesses:


  • Terrible fighter
  • Push Dagger nearly useless except for assassinations
  • Trench Knife is unusable except in close, close quarters
  • Scaredy cat
  • Legal issues with both weapon forms (Push dagger is not street legal in many countries and the trench knife violates the geneva conventions)


Sample: Two guys in their late teens walked down the street conversing in quiet voices. Charles the taller of the two states “in the next ally I’ll change into a trench knife.” “okay” came the hushed reply. The two boys turned a sharp right. There was a bright flash and Charles changed into a trench knife. “ahh shit” yelled the blonde boy. “what is it now?” came the nonplussed reply. “I think you blinded me!” the blond yelled. *nope” stated the weapon “your pupils are still dilating you’re fine”. The other boy gripped the knife angrily extending the point in front of his chest. “What the fuck are you doing!” shouted the demon weapon. “What do you mean?” asked the blonde meister. The weapon began sputtering in exasperation and muttering angrily. There was a loud screech as a monstrous looking nurse with skeletal limbs and syringes for fingers dove at the boys. The meister jumped from the line of fire and attempted to thrust with the knife. “okay dumb shit you clearly have no clue what you’re doing with a knife.” Charles said through gritted teeth. “Well then what should I do!” cried the blonde boy. Charles scanned the alley looking for something that could be helpful when he spied a length of pipe on the ground near a dumpster. “Grab that pipe and distract it I’ll be right back” commanded Charles as he returned to human form and tore out of the alley. He muttered frantically to himself while searching for a car that wouldn’t have an alarm. He finally finds a mid nineties Chevy. Charles kicks out the driver’s side window and opened the door. He then hopped behind the wheel to pop the hood. He pulled a small screwdriver from his pocket and located the fuse box. He then quickly pried it open and forced the circuit closed the car made that wonderful rumbling noise. The weapon whooped with joy as he jumped behind the wheel and tore off down the road. He made a sharp handbrake turn into the alley honking to warn the meister. Seeing that the other boy was safe Charles gassed it slamming the horrible beastlike nurse into a brick wall with a sound between bubble wrap being stepped on and boots being pulled from mud. The Kishin egg’s body disappeared leaving behind its soul. Charles hopped from the car and declared “No way in hell am I eating that.”
Edited by Bitterhoof, May 20 2013, 09:51 PM.
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Hey there, Hoof! I'm Lammy, and I'll be your character moderator. First of all, welcome to the site! It looks like you've done a pretty good job fleshing your character out, but as a moderator, I'll do my best to help you polish Charles up to the best he can be.
Let's get started then, shall we?

Description: In Charles' second Weapon form description, a blade that causes wounds that cannot be healed through non-magical means sounds like more of an ability to me...could you perhaps alter this a bit? Perhaps later you can gain this ability, but with two Weapon forms, you'll have to wait.

History: I'm a big fan of bullet points.

  • Talk a bit more about his family. Brothers? Sisters?
  • At what age did he get this job? Did he receive any education first?
  • Just how exactly did he start seeing souls? Would these gangsters eat them from the confines of their garage, or perhaps Charles caught a glimpse of them snacking when they thought no one was looking? Go into a bit more depth here!
  • Also, what I'd recommend is talking a bit about the gangsters themselves. Are they part of some sort of crime syndicate, or your run-of-the-mill hoodlum?
  • How exactly did Charles stumble across his other Weapon form?
  • How do his parents respond to him being a Weapon? Do they ever find out? What about being "kidnapped" by the Shibusen students?
  • Perhaps go into a bit of depth regarding these students? What made them decide to kidnap Charles rather than simply ask him to enroll?
  • About how long has Charles been "enrolled" at Shibusen? Does he even attend class, or does he simply work as a mechanic?
  • How did he learn how to fix up cars, as well as the human body? Also, explain the origin of his math skills.


Personality: Great job here! But what sort of hobbies does Charles have, other than fixing up cars? Does he even have any?
Also, it's good to talk about some general likes and dislikes, as well as things that really make the character tick. Maybe Charles has an extreme disposition towards cabbages because of a visit to a farm at a young age; whatever the case, talk about it here!

Combat Style: I would talk about this section, but it appears you've forgotten to include it! Be sure to fix this; Combat Style is very important. It helps would-be Meisters decide whether or not you'd make a good partner based on what fighting styles you believe go well with your character's Weapon form, etc.

Abilities: Being a mechanic isn't necessarily an ability, unless he is insanely good at it. In which case, we would consider it an ability. However, rather than stating that you are able to transform into the following Weapon forms, simply state this in each ability.

Strengths and Weaknesses:

In regards to strengths...
Why is carrying a welder's glove considered a strength?

In regards to weaknesses...
What sort of legal issues might there be?

Roleplay Sample: Give the rules another look-over and I'm sure you'll realize what this is missing~

But other than that, I think we're all done with round 1 of modding! Be sure to tell me when you're all done so we can begin round 2!
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Hey, Bitter! Just a few more things and I think we'll be done.


  • I'm not really sure a high school education would exemplify him from classes like soul studies, etc. Include these subjects as well.
  • Could you fix your images? They don't seem to be working.
  • Currently, your history implies that Charles can transform into any weapon he sees; could you perhaps clarify that he only has two Weapon forms?
  • There's not really any mention of how Charles became acquainted with the inner workings of the human body, so be sure to explain!
  • Because of Charles' excellent mechanic prowess, the other mods have informed me that you should include this in the abilities section as a technique. But don't worry, it won't count against you.


As a reminder, next time, rather than simply posting your profile a second time, you can edit your original post! This can be done by clicking the "Edit" button located at the bottom of the post.

Until next time, this is Lammy, signing off~
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Sorry for the long wait there, Bitter!
But I am glad to announce that your character is officially accepted!
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