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| Jikumo | May 30 2013, 08:19 AM Post #1 |
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((Note: I'm starting from scratch, I didn't really like the character when I made him.)) Character Name: Jikumo Yukui Nickname: Jikui Age: 16 Gender: Male Type: Meister Partnered? No Image: None for now Clothing and description: Jikumo stands at a height of 6' 0'', and he has a toned body. He has olive tone skin, and he has golden hair that shoots up wildly, with bangs that go just above his eyes. He has green eyes and a stern, yet soft look. His eyebrows are unkempt and he shaves his face to avoid facial hair. His skin is relatively clear, with a few light scars here and there from fights. He most times has a happy face, but when he's thinking his eyebrows furrow up a bit and he stares off into space. He has a few outfits, but his favorite casual clothes are a red t-shirt, black jeans, and black shoes with red highlights, and he always wears his favorite black hoodie, even when it's warm outside. He also has glasses, black rimmed. He has a necklace that he wears, which is sentimental to him, but he can't remember why, it's made of ruby that is carved into the shape of fire, with his name carved into it. Oh, and he has a mechanical arm in place of his right arm, which is the same length and size of his left arm. It has a dark gray, hard exterior, with a rounded shoulder and a slot under the wrist for a 6-inch combat knife. The metal goes all the way up to his shoulder and covers about 1/4 of his chest, but it's really only connected to his nerves at a little bit under the shoulder. When you open the inside, you can see a glowing gold device that looks similar to an infinity symbol, with a wire 1/4 the thickness of his arm that trails up and connects to a nerve in his spine, this is his soul amplifier, which allows him to resonate his soul through his mechanical arm the same way he would with his real one, but he has to be careful with it, because it can break easily. Soul's Appearance: Jikumo's soul is a golden sphere, with with spiky hair and glowing green eyes. Half of his soul is covered in a murky green-brown color. Let me explain, the golden soul is what his soul would have looked like, had he grown up normally, but since he was abandoned and grew up in a gang, his soul was covered in a murky green. Since his amnesia happened, his past experiences don't dictate his personality anymore, and he can be what he would have been, except that his evil personality, with all his memories are still there, just locked away, so his soul is only half-covered in it. History: Jikumo grew up in New Jersey, where he was abandoned by his parents, and taken in by one of the toughest gangs in the place. He was raised with them like he was one of the family, so naturally he was a trouble-maker, always stealing or doing other bad things. When he was 8, he was always told when the police caught him doing things like egging houses or stealing change from the homeless, "If only you were raised right, you wouldn't have turned out so bad. Maybe if I clonked ya in the head hard enough, you'd lose your illegal streak! Hahaha!" He always just gave them that criminal grin and looked away, "Yeah right, I am who I am. Nobody influences me!" He once stole a rare ruby gem that was in an open-air market by letting one of the other gang members attempt to steal fruit, while Jiku swiped the gem. He asked someone if they could inscribe his name on it, but no one would take it, except one old man, who carved his name beautifully in the ruby. Jikumo grinned at his new prize, and left with a quick thank you. He didn't get a good look at the old man's face, though. As he grew up, he felt especially close to the members of his gang, eventually becoming the leader for his ruthlessness and strength, but this made his life more complicated. For one thing, he hadn't had any glasses or way of correcting his sight, so he had to rely on his hearing until he finally When there was a full-blown shootout against their gang, Jiku lost his arm in a shotgun blast. The old man who once did a favor for him was able to fix it with a mechanical arm, and the old mechanic told him that he saw a great destiny ahead of him, and offered to allow Jiku to come by everyday to upgrade his arm with the best tech. Jikumo, being the sly fox that he is, accepted it, thinking he'd get a great deal for free. The day he lost his memory, was the day he started his legacy. He was walking to the old man's shop to get a new upgrade for the arm, something to fix the overheating by adding a cooling component, when he heard a strange voice in his head. "You are my champion, together, we can accomplish the destruction of the DWMA!!" He slipped, startled by the voice, and fell into the river below, but instead of being murky and dirty like it usually is, it seemed to shine that day. Almost as if, it was showing another place, other than here. The last thing he saw was the silhouette of a woman, who looked like she'd gone shopping at a Halloween costume store...then he blacked out. What happened while he was unconscious: A witch planned to use Jikumo as a pawn for experiments, with one goal in mind, taking out the DWMA for good. She erased his memories, so that he would be completely under her control, but before she could claim him as her's, the DWMA noticed the activity of a witch. They sent some meisters and their weapons to capture and destroy the witch, so she fled. The students took Jikumo back to the school, and let the nurse take care of him. Now Jikumo doesn't know anything about his life before DWMA. He woke up one day, in the medical area, and was told that he had a major case of amnesia. He was pretty surprised to find that he had a mechanical arm, and even more surprised when a man by the name of Dr. Stein had told him that the arm would have destroyed his body if he had not removed most of the components. The only reason he knew what his name was, was a necklace that had his name on it. He didn't know what else to do, so he ended up registering to become a meister, since he couldn't become a weapon himself, as far as he knew. It was awkward for him, being the one kid that didn't know anything about himself. He didn't know if he was a criminal, or a prince! He hasn't found a weapon partner yet, but he's eager to find one. After a few months of being in the DWMA, he has had time to adjust to the life style. He knows what kishin eggs are, and all he can wonder about them is, was he like that before? He didn't hate them, he felt sorry for them, at least sometimes. The DWMA hasn't told him about his past, maybe they didn't know, or maybe they were trying to protect him from something. He had no idea. Personality: Jikumo is usually a fun-loving guy, and he likes to meet new people. But recently he began feeling like he's empty, like he's missing something in his life. He likes to read a lot, and spends most of his free time reading either fantasy or science books. He also loves to fool around and makes jokes, but he doesn't go too far with them. He's respectable and even a little feared by people that don't know him, since he's got such a rugged appearance. He's not great when dealing with anger, he actually tends to get in fights a lot, but he cools down quickly enough. When it comes to if he's crushing, however, he'll be completely unfocused when his crush is around. Overall, he's a loyal kid, he'll listen to advice if he's given it, and he'll take into consideration other's feelings and what will happen before he acts. He does have some feelings, "triggers" he likes to call them, that go off when a certain event happens. When a shotgun goes off, he instinctively clutches his right arm, as if it is about to fall off. Also, when he sees someone being abandoned, it sparks a rage inside him so bad, he needs to cool off by being alone for a long while. He doesn't know why these things happen, like feeling the instinct to take something he wants or attack someone he dislikes, but he thinks it has something to do with his past. Abilities: Technique Name: Mechanical Arm Effects/Description: Jikumo's arm, despite having it's main offensive components removed for safety, is still an effective weapon by itself. It can makes lifting heavy objects easier, about up to 200 lbs. It even has a hidden blade that is half a foot long, and extends from the bottom of the wrist. It can be upgraded, allowing for a lot of customization and flexibility. Technique Name: Infinity Mod Effects/Description: This module allows him to use his soul wavelength through his mechanical arm exactly like his regular one. Technique Name: Flexible Soul Effects/Description: Jikumo's soul is very flexible, allowing him to partner with someone easily. Even though he can't naturally control it yet, it acts like a passive ability, giving him higher resistance to soul wavelength attacks, and stronger resonance with a partner. Technique Name: Speed Effects/Description: Jikumo's speed is almost unnatural. He can run at speeds up to 20 mph maximum, for about 10 minutes. His mechanical arm can swing punches a bit faster than his normal arm, but his left arm isn't useless, it can go about as fast. He doesn't get tired easily, and can run for about an hour without taking a break to catch his breath, not at his top speed though, he has to run at 10 mph to sustain his stamina. Combat Style: Jikumo has a hybrid defensive/offensive strategy, defending himself until he sees an opportunity to strike, then he hits hard. When he can't see his opponent, he relies on hearing, as his partial sight resulted in a heightened listening ability. He is patient, and usually waits for his opponent to make the first move, so he can easily counterattack and learn the style of the enemy. He is quick-footed, and can usually dodge most slower attacks, provided he doesn't trip, or is stuck in place. He likes a fair fight, so he doesn't sneak up behind someone, and he's prepared for someone to do it to him. His mechanical arm increases his striking power for only his right hand, and it helps him defend himself when he doesn't have a weapon, as well. He's very handy with the knife in his arm, he seemed to have the natural instinct for it, and he's trained with it during his months at the academy. He doesn't know how to fight with weapons, so he'll need to learn how to use one if he's partnered, but he's not completely useless when he's going hand-to-hand. He uses a hybrid kick-boxing style, where he aims for the weak points in a body. Miscellaneous Information: Jikumo is near-sighted, meaning that if he loses his glasses, he wouldn't be able to see anything but a blur of colors unless they were a couple feet in front of him, and even then they're still blurry. He can use both of his arms to equal effectiveness, since while he was recovering from losing his right arm he had to do most things with his left. Strengths:
Weaknesses:
Roleplay Sample: Jikumo walked through the streets of Death City, without a pupil partner, and in the most dangerous part of the city. "What the heck am I thinking? I guess I could fight off any Kishin with my fists...but still, it's dangerous." He liked to be alone, though, since he didn't get along with others. He didn't know why, but he felt so awkward and weird around others. He was always thinking to himself, he always thought he didn't belong in this place, but he had no idea how he'd gotten there. He heard a screech from behind him, and a man with blades sticking from his arms and back come out from the shadows. "Hhhhhhhello there! You look lost...allow me to...heheh...ssshhhow you the way." His voice sounded like steel scraping on a blackboard. Jikumo made a sour face, "Jeez, stop talking, you're making my ears bleed..." He got into his stance, while the Kishin growled and jumped straight at him, clawing randomly at his body. Jiku kept himself moving, dodging some and catching some on his arm, "You're starting to get on my nerves...take this!" He saw an opening and swung with his mechanical arm, breaking the Kishin's jaw and sending him flying into a wall. He then ran up to it and snapped it's neck, "There, now you're finished. What should I do with this Kishin egg, now?" He picked it up and turned it in his fingers as he walked through the streets once more, heading back to the school. Tats edit [1/14/14]Mod thread Edited by Tatsuken, Jan 15 2014, 12:56 AM.
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Jikumo Yukui Amnesiac Meister Color= Gold Weapon Partner: Aesperus Entreri | |
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| Lammy | May 31 2013, 12:04 AM Post #2 |
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Hey there, Jikumo! I'm Lammy, your character moderator. This is a good start for a character, but here at 42, we like to push our RPers to make their characters the very best they can be! With that said, I believe there are some improvements that we could make to your character, and I, as a moderator, exist to help you with just that! So here are some things that should be improved upon... Clothing and description: My general advice is to simply expand upon this section. Go into a bit more detail! Just how does one define a "hawk-like" face, and, what else does he wear besides his signature trench coat outfit? Surely his closet isn't just filled with multiple pairs of the same outfit...or is it? Tell us! History: I love using bullet points.
Personality: As I mentioned in History, you should be sure to tie in personality traits to key parts of a character's backstory. For example, why exactly does he enjoy reading so much, or tend not to show his emotional side? Does he ever show this emotional side? And when he does, how does his personality shift? Or has the death of his best friend crippled him from feeling any emotion? Abilities Soul Perception: As much of a pain it can be to write up a summary, linking a page from the wiki simply won't do. Describe in-depth how the ability works: How strong is the Soul Perception? Strong enough to see through a Witch's Soul Protect? How far can Jikumo see Souls? Is it limited to only a few yards in front of him, or does it span many miles ahead? Hawk Glare: This could also use a bit of a longer summary...simply stating that glare is enough to "throw someone off" is a bit too vague. Expand upon it! How often can the ability be used, and how strong is it? Is there any cool-down (1, 2 posts?) for this ability after using it? Combat Style: Don't forget to include which weapons Jikumo is skilled with (or prefers) here, as it will greatly help others when deciding whether or not they wish to partner with your character! Strengths and Weaknesses: Perhaps I could use a bit of clarification, but these seem to contradict each other. In Strengths, you say that he is never reckless, but in Weaknesses, you say that he can be so. With that said, I will bring the first round of modding to a close. We'll see how you go from there, Jikumo! And good luck! Be sure to PM me when you've made the revisions. Edited by Lammy, May 31 2013, 12:06 AM.
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| Jikumo | Jul 8 2013, 02:47 PM Post #3 |
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Jikumo Yukui Amnesiac Meister Color= Gold Weapon Partner: Aesperus Entreri | |
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| Raikai | Jul 13 2013, 03:26 AM Post #4 |
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Does the bus run through here?
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Hey Jikumo! I'll be picking up your character now. This is another good start, like Lammy said we here like to push RPers to be the very best, (like no one ever was). That said let us begin. Clothing and description: This is a pretty good start, I've got a clear picture in my head of what Jikumo looks like. I dare yoy to go the extra mile though. Tell me more about him in specifics. Particularly I'd like to know about his face, Beau has a great guide on this in the character request forum, but this is perfectly sufficent excluding one thing I'd like to see clarified. Jikumo's right arm is fully replaced from the shoulder joint or from where. This isn't big but for the sake of bing able to insure consistancy. History: I'm interested in how young he was in the first paragraph, and a few other things. Why did the police let him off light, particularly since the vibe seems to be that he was a repeat offender. Was it that he was so young, or were his crimes so petty they weren't even neccesarily crimes? Also, how did he pull off the ruby heist? That seems like it would be something well guarded for being so rare, or as it just on display in some gallery by the carver and he pulled a five-finger discount and ran? Overall this is sufficiant but if you'd like to expand and flesh out a bit I'd be glad to see it. Personality: Much the same here. What you've goot is by all means fine and there's no glaring issues but it's a little rough around the edges. If you're up to it I'd be glad to see a little polishing and expansion here. Misc. Info: These are both more personal notes. I'm curious as to whether Jikui is nearsighted or farsighted and how badly so since losing his glasses can heavily impact his fighting ability. I'm also curious which hand he favors. I ask only because I'm reminded of Fullmetal Alchemist where Ed favors his flesh and blood hand for tasks like writing, but when it comes to fights he understandably favors his hard metal hand. Overall, this is a very interesting character. I'm excited to see it polished and in use. |
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| Jikumo | Jul 13 2013, 04:16 AM Post #5 |
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I'm...I'm sorry, I don't know how to describe a face structure at all, it'd end up really stupid and lengthy, nobody would want to even read it, honestly. Otherwise, I fixed it. |
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Jikumo Yukui Amnesiac Meister Color= Gold Weapon Partner: Aesperus Entreri | |
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| Raikai | Jul 13 2013, 09:43 PM Post #6 |
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Does the bus run through here?
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Well I'm not gonna hold you up with that. I challenge you to try and figure it out for the future though ![]() That said I think this profile is ready to be Accepted |
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