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Salem Nakuto (done); Kero/Deka's son the weapon
Topic Started: Sep 15 2013, 09:14 AM (380 Views)
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Character Name: Salem Nakuto

Age: 18

Gender: Male

Type: Weapon

Partnered? No

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Clothing and description: Much like his father before him, Salem stands at 5'8 and has the build of a professional boxer. With a regular workout routine he has a heavy muscular upper torso, with a slim waist, and toned legs. His skin is a light color much like his mothers speckled with freckles, with the same thick blond hair. Only Cut short, with 2 stripes of purple dyed into it. One of the most interesting features of Salem though is his duel colored eyes. One being the same Blue as his mother, the other the orange of his father's. A set of 4 scars on the left side of his face, from a Kishin egg attack.

Salem’s wardrobe consists of a tight fitting med length sleeve dark yellow shirt, with a large sleek “S” designed into the front of it in solid black, the length of his torso. His jeans are a black denim and fit very well, but are cuffed at the bottom just above his steel toe boots. When he works out he usually wears a tight fitting black tank top, with loose fitting black and orange gym shorts, and black and white tennis shoes.

His weapon form is that of a Shoge. It is a double edged blade 11" long, with another 5" hooked blade attached at 90 degrees to it and a handle. This is attached to roughly 18 feet of black chain, which then ends in a large metal ring (Multi purpose ninja weapon). The weapon is very similar to his fathers whip scythe before him.

History: Most of Salem's life he felt like he need to carry everything on his shoulders, He lived with his twin brother James, and older sister Sky his entire life. His father was a weapon named Keroro (Kero) Nakuto, who in the heat of a battle was killed, protecting Salem’s mother when they were only 3 and 5. Salem's mother was Deka a super strong, but very quiet meister, who raised the three children for years. She had been through a lot in her life even though she couldn't remember her own past, it still haunted her. For several years she tried as hard as she could to raise the kids, telling them wonderful stories about their father. Deka would go out on missions for a few days at a time to keep up with rent and bills, she use to have a sitter for the kids. Sky had convinced her that she was old enough to watch over Salem and James, Deka had agreed to it even though Sky was 10, and the boys were just 8. Days passed but she didn't return. a week, and still no sign. 2 weeks, and the children were becoming seriously worried. 3 weeks, a month, and still no sign of their mother. Sky had feared the worst and when the land lord who had come around asking about their mother, Sky knew they couldn't stay there anymore.

After their mother had been gone for a month things became dark for the kids. They knew going to an orphanage would not be a good option, if someone was to adopt the chances of them all to be together would be very small, so they decided to go against it. Sky took it upon herself to make sure they all had a place to stay, a lot of the time they were lucky to find room in a shelter, but when the bunks were taken she would do what she could to make sure they have a place to sleep. Salem took it upon himself to feed himself and his siblings. This some times lead Salem to an unfortunate chain of events. Fighting others to keep what he had, and running away from the police just to make sure his brother ans sister could eat. That was mostly how Salem learned to fight. a few years passed like this, with them running around from shelter to shelter, or cardboard box in an ally. Salem would go out and find something to eat, fight his way around, and pretend like nothing is wrong when he returns.

Salem came into his weapon ability when he was around 9. He was running from a group of street thugs he had pick pocketed, and he got caught. Salem was cornered when he had realized he had to jump from the ledge of a higher street. He had seen an escape. He reached to grab for a pole that ended up just out of his reach, and in that instant his arm changed and the hook of the blade caught the pole and he was able to swing across escaping the thugs. When he got back to James and Sky that night with the food he bought with the money, he showed them his new ability. His siblings found it amazing, acted like he was a hero. Salem felt it was up to him to protect his siblings after that, seeing as nether one had any real ability to fight, or defend themselves at least that he ever noticed.

From the age of 10 Salem always pushed himself to get stronger and make sure they had a at least half way decent life. he would work out and build his stamina every chance he got, by running and lifting. He encountered a problem with keeping his stamina up. 5 years passed and they were still moving around a lot, but things seemed a little easier. One day an older gentleman had encountered Salem while he was jogging carrying what looked to be a small statue on his back. Salem looked tired, and was panting. The Old man stopped him and asked what he was doing, and invited Salem in to talk and take a break. They went into his studio, and Salem told him about himself, and his siblings. Soon the old man invited Salem and his siblings to move in with him, and the old man took Salem under his wing. The old man, who's name turned out to be Balboa, taught Salem boxing. Balboa showed him how to make sure he keeps up his stamina by eating plenty. His apatite seemed almost limitless, but the more he ate it seemed like the longer he felt he could go.

After a few nights in the safety of the new home Salem started having bad nightmares, and he started to wake up in the middle of the night in a cold sweat. He didn't tell his siblings, but Balboa noticed when he started looking more and more tired. The old man introduced Salem to coffee. and Salem soon developed his taste for it, he used this to counter the lack of sleep he started having. Balboa had started to almost become a father to the 3 siblings. they started with old man Balboa for 2 years, in that time he introduced Sky to a tailor who took her in to teach her. They were living a normal life for the first time in their lives.

As always life had its snags, old man Balboa eventually passed away from a heart attack in his sleep. The siblings were alone again, their hearts torn asunder from the loss of another loved one.Salem did as he did best but instead of stealing he found small jobs where he could, Sky continued her work with the tailor. After the old man passed, Salem tried to find work where ever he could, while his sister took up work in a seamstress's shop. Recovering form the loss of another loved one was difficult for them all, but Salem did his best to keep the spirits of his siblings up.

Eventually Salem's abilities as a weapon were discovered by a student who had picked a fight with the James while James was out with his boyfriend. Salem, who was on his way out to a job had jumped in and took the kid down to protect his brother. The student told a another student and he told a teacher, who informed a higher up. They looked into Salem and found out about of his father and mother.It only took a few weeks for a Representative of the school find him, and at the age of 17 invite Salem to be a student at Shibusin. Though his sister and brother both turned down the opportunity to take on a more normal life. Now Salem, James, and Sky all live in the old man's old home and are provided with an allowance by the school, while Sky also brings in some cash to help.

Salem began to go to school, this was when he started to be more like his father. He became more of a show off, he was loud and brash. He decided from then on to be more open about how he felt, Except if he felt it would hurt or worry his siblings. The school made him realize he could be stronger, and this made him excited. A year later he is 18, and now he strives to become a death scythe, and be stronger than anyone has ever been before, to help his family.

Personality: Salem is a very competitive character. Much like his father Kero, Salem has a very strong and loud personality. He wants to always be the best. This Causes him to push himself beyond his normal limits. Seeing as such, Salem is known for always trying to pick a fight with some one who he thinks is stronger than he is. He never really felt like he needed any formal education, and never put any emphasis on book learning. After his parents death he felt he needed to defend his older sister and his soft spoken twin. He will do what ever it takes to make sure they are ok.

All this being said Salem is a nice guy, a bit rough around the edges, and a little pushy. He sticks by his friends. When he meets someone he will always tell them what he thinks, and doesn't hide how he feels about things. Getting a good challenge makes him happy, and makes him want to push himself to overcome it. His anger though can get the best of him, when he feels he, or some one he cares about is being mocked, or threatened he can flip out in a rage. He has never really been the jealous type, and has usually found things that don't catch his attention right away boring and annoying. He is also very impatient and is unlikely to find being quiet productive. If he is not in class, or on a mission chances are Salem is at the gym working out.

When it comes to kishin eggs and witches and all other "Evil" things Salem can't blame them for what they do. He believes that everyone is molded by their upbringing and surroundings. A lot of it is negative and he can understand what that is like from his own experiences. He ended up more lucky than others. If he wads in the kishin or withes position he would probably have done the same...

Abilities:

Technique Name:Partial Weapon
Effects/Description:When desired Salem is able to have an 6 Ft form of his weapon (chain, handle and blade.) change with his left arm from the elbow down. his forearm extends, and becomes the chain, his hand becomes the blade. the left portion of his arm is a foot long (shoulder to biceps) the chain is 4' 5" and the handle with the blade takes the rest of the length.

Technique Name: Full Weapon form
Effects/Description: In a sudden change he becomes a full length Shoge, a double edged silver blade 11" long, with another 5" hooked blade attached at 90 degrees to it and a black and white katana designed handle (5"). This is attached to roughly 18 feet of black chain, which then ends in a large metal ring, 4" diameter. (total of 19 feet 8 inches)

Technique Name: Second weapon Form Defense
Effects/Description: Just like his other weapon form Salem can quickly shift into a full armor sleeve. It adjusts to the wearer. Armor plating covers all the way from the shoulder down to the knuckles. At the end of the knuckles are 2 small prongs of a taser. The taser holds 3 charges a day. These charges use up Salem's own energy, each use makes him more tired out of his weapon form. After all three charges are used up Salem can no longer hold the defensive weapon form and ether reverts to human or Shoge form.

Combat Style: Salem is a straight up Boxer/Brawler. He uses his strength in whatever way he can to get in a heavy punch, usually taking a less evasive stance and more defensive, willing to take hit that he is sure he can take in order to get in his own hard blows. When worse comes to worse he will pull out his partial weapon, and use the chain to catch incoming attacks, and throw his enemy off, then use the blade like a knife and strike where he thinks the most damage will help.

Having learned most of his fighting from the streets, cheap shots and fasts hits. He tries to get in close to his opponent as to not give them an advantage over him, and keeps his arms in right like a boxer. He is willing to take a few hit for the big hits. He has a hard right hook, and its one of his go to attacks that he uses to soften up opponents. once he has them off guard he like to finish with hay-makers. because hay-makers are cool, and he is able to put even more strength into the blow.

Salem is good with handling thugs and the average goons. With a kishen egg he relies more on his partial transformation to finish the job his boxing blows started. He could single handed ( quite literally) take out a kishin, though not without effort, and probably not without some cuts and bruises. he prefers to fight one on one, but growing up he didn't have the choice and fighting multiple people he has a less straight on and more wide open response, but he has almost just as easy a time against a group as he does one on one against a goon (it just takes a little longer). Using his partial transformation to trip people and pull them into one another. He is more willing to use cheap blows when fighting a group.

When being used as a weapon there are a lot of different ways Salem can be used. A shoge is a multi-purpose ninja weapon. the long chain is used to grab and snare an opponent, then use the knife end to finish them off. It can also be used to attack an opponent from afar, ether using the heavy ring on the end, or throwing the blade end like a dagger, then using the chain to return the end to the user. Another useful use is to assist in climbing, using it to grapple onto a high ledge, and climb up, or using the blade like a piton and assist in climbing. The many ways of using the Shoge makes it a very useful, and efferent weapon.

While in his weapon form He takes on a roll more like a boxing coach, much like how old man balboa was for him. From his times with the old man coaching him in the ring, Salem looks for weak points in a close melee fight and reads his opponent's moves. He is a natural in melee combat, and is able to spot openings and incoming attacks from a close in fight. He is naturally defensive of those he is close with, and is also very loud, he does what ever he is able to, to ensure the safety of his partner yelling out when he sees an incoming attack, and telling them when he sees an opening to strike.

While he is skilled in melee combat he has never encountered a ranged combatant. He has no idea how to spot an incoming attacks, or properly defend against them.

Miscellaneous Information:Salem is a chimera, which is why he has 2 different eye colors. That being said Salem and his twin should have been triplets, which Salem feels might be the reason he has a weapon form but not his brother. He lives with his sister and twin brother in the house of an older man who took them all in.

He can't drink tea, or decaf coffee without becoming violently ill. Much like his mother had, Salem has sleeping problems stemmed from experiences his own past living on the streets. When on a mission Salem is known to call his brother if he ever needs any info, or research done.

Most if not all weapons have a room. A place they go to when they are being used as a weapon. Salem's soul room is less a room and more an arena. A boxing ring with a full empty arena. It is a place he feels comfortable, and holds significance in his soul. Representing the only man he knew as a father figure growing up. His second weapon form is inherited from his father, who also had a second defensive form.

Strengths:

  • strong
  • very useful weapon form
  • Strong determination
  • skilled close end fighter


Weaknesses:

  • Brash head first personality.
  • not too bright
  • trouble sleeping.
  • Has to eat a lot to keep up strength and stamina
  • Tea and decaf coffee makes him violently ill.
  • very uncomfortable with being quiet.
  • while skilled in melee combat, has little to no ranged combat skill.


Roleplay Sample:  Two different colored pupils. That is always the first thing Salem notices in the mirror. It is the first thing that he sees that separates him from both of his siblings. The second thing he sees is that he is the only one of them with abilities like their parents. Sure his brother was book smart, and his sister was always good with people. But he was the one with the strength, and the weapon ability. He rubbed his eyes with one hand and leaned away from the mirror. He was looking too deep into things again. “Ugh, SO bored...” he looked around the bathroom and thought for a moment.
“YO James, I'm bored!” he yelled Walking out to the living room. Where his brother sat reading a book from the library called 'Intra Chaos'. He flinched when he heard his brother yell.

“W-what do you expect me to do Salem?”

“Entertain me” Salem said jumping over the back of the couch and landing next to his brother. James looked at him with a confused look. “How do you expect me to entertain you, every time I try to tell you about something interesting that I have read recently, or something I found, you always seem to doze off when I try and explain it all to you in detail.”

But as James spoke, as he had mentioned, Salem kinda just zoned out staring off into his own little world...

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Tats edit [8/11/14] Second Weapon form
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Hey Koffy, welcome back to 42(r). I have decided it was probably best for me to just try and find as much of the profile that needs more polishing and write it out instead of just reading chunks of it and giving you suggestions over the cbox, so here we go.
Appearance: May I have more details about his athletic build, for example the way a basketball player is build is often times built differently than a football player or a runner cause there is emphasis on different muscles and what is required of different athletic activities. It is implied that it’s more of a boxer’s build, but I would like a bit more description on how Salem is built. Even among athletes in the same sport there are different body builds. For example, you could have a raw power boxer who is just super muscular or maybe a speedy boxer who isn’t as muscular but is extremely fast. Does he have any other unique features?

Is this the only clothing Salem wears? Does he have alternate clothing? Or does he have particular preferences when it comes to clothing?

You mention the shirt is yellow but not so much how someone could tell there’s a S on the shirt, is the outline of the S a different color? Made of glitter or bejeweled? Or is the S a solid color?

You mention the color of the chain, what about the blade? Does the shoge have a hilt? What is the full length of the weapon including chain, hilt, and blade?

History: I’m not sure how I want to mod this, it kind of looks like a bunch of things were left out, but it’s written in a way that doesn’t feel like a lot of my questions will particularly affect Salem. At the very least I would like to see how Salem learned about his ability to transform and about their time with the old man. I mean c’mon at least give the guy a name XD. You also don’t mention how exactly they pulled through the loss of someone that seems to be important to them. Actually I could probably say the same with the disappearance with Deka, when and how did they notice she just disappear?

It’s probably important to mention when Salem, James, and Sky joined Shibusen as well.

I will probably consult another mod about this later for more opinions.

Personality: This section is also a bit short, so a couple of things to consider. What makes him angry/sad/happy? How does he express these emotions? Don’t be afraid to mention any other emotions that you can think of. How about Salem’s opinion on kishin eggs and witches?

Abilities: Too strong and no drawback. You told me you wanted to make Salem only about half as strong as Deka, what you ended up doing is making him 4 times as strong and made Deka about 400,000-1,200,000 times as strong as she was before (assuming by stop you mean lift, considering there are other factors you neglected such as speed of the objects and inertia). You also didn’t give him any drawback to his strength whereas Deka did have a drawback to her strength.

The full and partial transformation is lacking details. I don’t remember if you told me if you put them in, but I do recall telling you what I didn’t understand about these abilities. So I’ll just write them down so they’re easier for you to refer back to and so there are no hard feelings I’ll just dump all of my questions in here instead of asking bits and pieces, so most of the questions will be ones that I have not asked yet.

First off, does the 8ft of the partial include the actual shoge? Or is it only the chain? Or maybe it’s the chain and the ring? How much of the arm is transformed into this partial?

You’re missing details for the full form. It’s actually more important to have the full weapon description in this section than in the appearance section since most people look in the abilities section first or second when considering partners.

Combat style: It really feels extremely bare. Let’s talk about movement, how good is Salem’s foot work? How fast is he? May I have more details on how he uses his partial transformation?

Then let’s try figure out where he is skill/strength wise. How well can he deal with the average thug? How about 1 on 1 with the average kishin egg? Or maybe fighting against a group of thugs?

Misc info: that isn’t the only way to get heterochromatic eyes, you should probably just rephrase it to clarify that his reason for having two different colored eyes is that he is a chimera and then a bit about human chimerism rather than throwing in a fallacy. This is more of a grammar thing, but the fact that he lives with his siblings doesn’t really fit the same paragraph as “Salem is a chimera”.

Strengths/Weaknesses: the fact that he’s easily distracted was never mentioned anywhere else in the profile except the roleplay sample. Salem’s not being bright sounds like a personality thing, which is missing from his personality.

Overall: This is a strong start and I don’t think it’ll be that long before this profile is polished and ready for action.

But, here are just a few things to mention for the entire profile.
You should put extra spaces between paragraphs and remain consistent. It actually makes the profile easier to read.
Give the paragraph a read through, while there aren’t a lot of misspellings per say, there are a lot of misused words and capitalizations. For example, you mention a shoge being a multi-porpoise ninja weapon, but ninjas never used dolphins as weapons much less multiples of them at once.
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I do think I covered everything you wanted lol
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just a couple more things, in Salem's history, why did a shibusen student pick a fight with James?

For the ability section i think 8 ft is too long for only up to the elbow, maybe take away 2-3 feet from the chain.

combat style, you didn't really clarify if Salem could beat an average kishin egg in a 1v1 or with an average group of thugs, or would he have problems with either of them, while what you have is good and i would like for you to keep it that way. i do understand that there may be situational things that give the group or kishin egg an advantage in different scenarios, but think of it this way. Could Salem, by himself, beat Jack the Ripper (first kishin egg we ever see in the series)? or how about that group of thugs in Italy that Soul and Maka came across?
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I have done as you asked Master Tats. *Bows and presents profile*
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