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Berfer's Cracked Stuff; Why not?
Topic Started: Nov 8 2013, 08:57 PM (145 Views)
Khan

This is my first time and I have only minor experience in writing professionally. Hopefully this doesn't suck too much. Feedback of all kinds is welcome.

La Rochefoucauld is the "completed" demo one. Also the intro.
Cynic Article Plan
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Intimidating Sounds Article
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Evil Laughs
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Part III: Really Sneaky Sneaky

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Kd-3KMFHFx0

Blind Boy and The Illusive Boy ended up on a snowy mountain in the middle of a blizzard. Blind Boy got up fine and shuffled around a bit, but The Illusive Boy began puking a little before pouring whiskey on his own head and then getting up.

"Good old alcohol never fails!" The Illusive Boy cheered.

"It's colder than a snowman's ass here!" Blind Boy said, spitting out a phlegm that froze into a spear before it landed. "Where do we go, Illusive?"

The Illusive Boy, no longer having his chair with him, tried to use his other hand to shield his eyes from the blizzard. There looked to be a small bluff a few meter away that could house the base, but other than that they saw nothing.

There, let's go this way!" Illusive said grabbing Blind Boy by the shirt collar, and tugging him towards the bluff. "I can hardly see anything out here!"

"How do you think I feel?!" Blind Boy replied, hands on hips. "It's two times worse for me!"

"Yeah, but you're used to it!" Illusive said. "Here, how about you lead the way then! You're better at this blind thing than I am!"

"Oakily-dokily!" Blind Boy said, grabbing Illusive by the hair and dragging him in the complete opposite direction from the bluff.

Illusive just tried to light a cigar, and miraculously, it didn't go out. He began to blow choo-choo trains with the smoke that could barely be seen in the icy torrent. Illusive couldn't really see where Blind Boy was taking him, but he the white noise and constantly shifting snow gave him a time to think. Oh, how Illusive loved doing nothing passively and thinking. He thought about how The Legion might be able to bottle the cold here and make reverse-molotovs, he thought about how his cigar was violating the laws of physics and decided he didn't care, and most of all he thought about how it was really cold, but they got all the warmth they needed from a smile and a can-do attitude.

That was when Blind Boy ran into a rock and began beating it senselessly with his stick, which caused the ground to fall from underneath them, revealing a staircase that led down into a dark metallic tunnel.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9d3qCPcMgH4

"See, I told you you were good at this blind stuff, Blindy! Now let's go!" Illusive said, grabbing his companion by the shirt collar.

"I am the Earth's master! Hahahaha!" Blind Boy replied, beating the walls with his stick like he did with the rock, causing nothing to happen.
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