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[Academy Student] Yaken Inugan [Genso]; Insert short caption here or leave blank
Topic Started: Jul 19 2013, 03:16 AM (623 Views)
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Name: Yaken Inugan

Age: 13

Gender: Male

Height: 5'10”

Weight: 180 lbs

Appearance: Shaggy, short black hair, gray eyes, and a fairly pale complexion. His body is done in straight line and right angles, though the effect his diminished by the fact that he is on the cusp of puberty. Wears square glasses, a black t-shirt and baggy dark blue jeans covered by a loose fitting black jacket with hood stamped with the kanji for his family name in scarlet on the back and trimmed in white dog fur.

Rank: Academy Student

Village: Gensogakure

Language: Gensii

Special Inventory: Deku

Inventory: A dozen 30' spools of ninja wire [AWG gauge 16: .05” diameter, 1” x 1” x .5” coiled up, stored on clips inside his jean's pockets]

Element: Lightning

Fighting Type: Ninjutsu

Character Traits: Knowledge Trait [Fishing], Animal Handling [Dogs], Puppeteer, Intimidating, Booze Resistance, Super Smell I

Points Gained: 3
Total Points: 7
Unspeant Points: 0

Character Stats: (Academy Students start with 150 points)
Strength: 20
Spirit: 30
Willpower: 30
Speed: 10
Perception: 50
Endurance: 20
Resistance: 20

Points Gained: 30
Total Points: 180
Unspeant Points: 0

Jutsu:
Basics:
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D-Rank:
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C-Rank:
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Jutsu Slots Gained: 0D, 0C, 0B, 0A, 0S [How many you have gained through the RP]
Total Slot Amount: 3D, 1C, 0B, 0A, 0S [Your total amount of slots]
Jutsu Slots Empty: 0D, 0C, 0B, 0A, 0S [How many empty slots you have]

Growth Log:
10 Stat Points - Alpha Promotion
1 Trait Point - Alpha Promotion
20 Stat Points - Beta Promotion
2 Trait Points - Beta Promotion




Background:
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Previous RPC Profile: N/A
Edited by Inugan, Sep 8 2013, 02:52 PM.
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Apoc
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Just to let you know. We are running a promo for alpha that allows you to start at Chuunin. You don't have to but it is available. You are also given one extra trait point as well as 10 extra stat points as a thank you for helping us during alpha. You can find this and other events in our event section.

Also, can you add an extra line in between the paragraphs in your background.
Edited by Apoc, Jul 19 2013, 04:51 AM.
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Inugan
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I'm good with starting out as an Academy Student. Someone has to, right? Thanks for the heads up though.
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Please link to Deku.

You can have that much wire since it is your only item besides your puppet. However, you need to stat where your spools of wire are on your person. And, on a personal note, I am curious on why an AS needs 50 feet of wire.

I added your stats, and they total 120. So, you need to lower your stats by total of 10 points.

Your background is a little long, which is great in my opinion. However, you do need to know that while you state your RPC has heightened senses, you won't be able to RP them until you take those traits. As long as you are okay with this, there is no reason to edit those out. As for Shoukage, while I think that sounds better than Mirakage, we have not officially changed the title names of the kages. If we do, then we will let you know. Until then, please use Mirakage. And, thank you for the suggestions on the kage names. We may use one or more of them depending on how the rest of the staff feels about the names.

Beyond those things, I don't mind you starting at Academy Student. The starting at Chuunin is optional and is available for people who start in alpha to test things. Since you want to start at Academy Student, please PM me that Academy Student test when you are done with it and your thoughts of it. I designed to have Academy Students search most of the forum for rules as well as other things. If you do not like it, then let me know when you submit your answers and other feedback on it.

Post to let us know when you have updated your application here.
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I haven't spotted any issues other then what has already been pointed out by Apoc so once that's addressed you'll have my stamp.

Additionally you puppet was accepted so here is some code to help in linking it.

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[URL=http://jinseirp.com/topic/8989376/1/]Deku[/URL]
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Oops. I went and got an answer on the kage thing then never actually changed anything. Thanks for letting me keep that in there, I wanted him to have that in his history but lumping 50 points into perception at AS would have made him a little top heavy.

Just for clarification, am I sent to Gakushu no Sato to learn to become a shinobi, or does each village have its own Academy and each Student goes there to take the test, kinda like how the Genin Exam is in a fixed location with all the villages entering?

Last question, this is the start of the history of this place, so the villages are separate entities and we're not all hunky dory one world army let's go get us that juubi mode, right? Interactions with foreign ninja are supposed to be tense, and we can't just go galloping into their villages for a play date? I plan on being the nationalistic type anyway, but I just want to double check.
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Mew
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The second one :3 Each village teaches its own and you are sent to Gakushu no Sato in order to take the test and graduate.

Exactly, you got it right. Everyone is on edge, no ones too trusting. If you waltzed into another village you would be watched like a hawk by everyone and probably would be asked what business you had being there. And if they thought you were up to something, they might even attack you. You can't ever be too careful you know.

Also... everything looks good guy! SO APPROVAL 1!
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Is the it supposed to be different fonts on the profile? It's the standard from from D rank jutsus and down :P
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Mew
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It seems his font tags cut it off in the middle of his application x3
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Well this was fast. I know I told you until the staff have finalized our decision on which Kage name (current VS. suggested) to use the current name for the kage title. However, we just recently finalized a vote and three of the four suggestions made it to the now official titles. Once again, thanks for the suggestions. This includes the suggestion of Shoukage, which was unanimous decision to change from Mirakage.

So, you may go ahead and switch the kage title in your background back to Shoukage. Sorry if this is an inconvenience for you. However, I would once again thank you for those suggestions.
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Inugan
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Yay I helped! Thanks for setting up this RP, I'm really interested to see how the points system pans out.
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Well since you have not changed anything beyond that one word since the last approval (and I talked with Mew who says it still stands) there is no reason to not approve of your character. All I ask for you is to PM that test and some feedback of it when you are done taking it since you are now officially...

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Edited by Apoc, Jul 21 2013, 09:08 PM.
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Inugan
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Okie dokie, I think I'm back up to speed.
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Magicite
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A dozen 50' spools of AWG gauge 16 wire [.05” diameter, 5” x 5” x 2” coiled up, stored on clips inside his jean's pockets]
Can you just put wire or ninja wire. This is a modern term and I have no idea what 16 wire is without having to look it up and study it. You're also just and Academy student. Having a total of 600 feet of wire seems far to excessive.
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Here is my reasoning on the wire. The wires are there for the puppet. He uses the wires to manipulate it, and he needs to use ten wires at a time to do so. That's why I gave him a dozen, just to have some extra. That being said, the length of the wires equal the range of his puppet, and 50 feet isn't really that far. To give a visual, a two lane road is about twenty feet wide without sidewalks.

As a side note, even if the wire wasn't for puppeteering my RPC still wouldn't really have 600 feet of wire. If the wire was used for a trap or something he'd still need to use an entire spool since he can't cut it to size. If for some reason I used it for an attack the range of the wires would still only be 50, and with them fully extended they do little more than tickle. With how fine the wire is he might be able to hurt somebody, maybe leave a welt or something, but it's still not going to be an effective weapon.

Gauge is just a way of measuring thickness, that's why I also included the dimensions. I moved the gauge part to make that clearer.
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Wire manipulation would not be able to properly manipulate a puppet. While it could on TNF it can't really do so much here as it can't lift more weight then say a shuriken without the jutsu having an upgrade. It's kinda why we allow AS to have a C rank jutsu, to allow them to be able to use puppetry at the start. I just thought I would drop that here. The jutsu allows you to manipulate the wire like a puppet, but manipulating other things with it is another story entirely.
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I always just imagined that the wires were used to manipulate gears inside the puppet. Wires aren't actually lifting anything, just being used for controls. But if this doesn't fly with the mods I'll change it.

As a side note, AS can't really use Kugutsu no Jutsu. Being a C Rank it's going to take half the chakra of an AS to use it for 1 post, which isn't very helpful since the idea is to have the puppet stand in for you in combat. If you aren't going to let Souharigane work with puppets I'd suggest putting in a different D-Rank jutsu for AS to use puppets with.
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The wires would have to be able to get into the puppet and lift the puppet, which they wouldn't be able to do. Yes Kugutsu is expensive for a AS but we may have a compromise for that. Please be patient padawan for an update :)
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Inugan
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Okay, fixed.
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I apologize for the wait. We still waiting on people to make comments in the mod section.
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