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[Legendary] Corrupt Veil [Lady Veil]
Topic Started: Dec 11 2013, 07:34 PM (534 Views)
IzzetDragon
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Item Name: Corrupt Veil

Item Type: Legendary

Dimensions: Fits to wearer

Weight: Negligible

Appearance: A light yet oddly dark purple, silk like material, made up of tiny chain links to each piece leaving the area behind it hard to see. Its practically see through being very thin, made to cover from the nose down to the chin. It seems to gleam with a dark aura as the ancient patterns adorn its surface that seem to emanate a dark power.

Specialties: Once worn even for a second, she became something more than what she was. Wearing this ancient artifact has removed the very meaning of age from her body so that she's no longer affected by the passing of time. She can barely even be called human anymore, almost a demon, and those with the knowledge or experience of otherworldly forces will be able to tell this. None of this requires chakra nor concentration its just a passive and permanent change in her.

While worn she can now direct any of her puppets with mental commands. To activate this she must pay an amount of chakra equivalent to the puppet's rank and maintain them with a rank below for their upkeep. While she keeps them active, corpse puppets gain slight sentience but are still subject to control, they're considered alive. Their mind is considered alive so they can think and talk for themselves but only if allowed to by their mistress, and that includes their memories.

The Veil's power runs deep through the minds that are connected to it. She can experience what is given to her in a whole new meaning. Reanimated dead being controlled by the Veil are able to relay what they experience back to their mistress such as things they see or discover while doing her bidding. Unfortunately the Veil does the same, causing her to hear voices and it will take a great deal of concentration to work through it all. After experiencing this for a long time it will become natural and easily ignored.

She can only perform puppet related combat techniques while controlling even one puppet. Their minds are controlled by her which means any information they know can only be spoken of if she knows it too, information can only be stolen not shared. She can control any kind of puppet around her not currently being controlled, if someone leaves their puppet unattended she can control it. Physical contact must be made first in order for control to be possible. To send them off she must know where they are going which can be relayed through the link but they must remain within the same area or max of 100 meters. Its the same with everything else.

Locked: While worn she has greater mastery over her own mind, greatly extending her power over Spirit by 100% making her a true master of it. She can use this much power to immensely increase her skills and even be capable of still knowing her surroundings. This costs an S-Ranks amount to use and an A-Ranks amount to maintain. After prolonged use of this much mental control she will feel sluggish and exhausted both mentally and physically when she stops using her puppets, so some time for rest is advised but not required.

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Owner: Lady Veil
Edited by IzzetDragon, Dec 26 2013, 07:28 PM.
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Questions/concerns! :D

This slight sentience, does it allow you to gleam memories or information from them in any way? I'm not worried about ANBU because they disipate into flames when they die, but information in general. Can you force that info out of them?

Since the body is dead, do they feel pain? Asking because you know, sentient. All sentient creatures can also be targets for Genjutsu so you should probally note that somewhere.

Is this concentration increase only effecting how many puppets at once you can control or is it an overall concentration increase period? I couldnt tell from your wording.

Since your issuing mental commands, I would like you to need to touch the puppet first to inject a chakra link please, if you want to use this on any puppet/corpse you do not personally own. You don't really have a targeting mechanism so we need some kind of balancer for that. Some way for you to have a legit reason you are controlling it with your mind to replace strings as the medium for your chakra. Something, if you have other ideas go ahead and say those instead.

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Gleam information out you mean like ask them a question that they could answer? If so nope, well I could but I'd have to know the answer to make them answer with that one, so simply no. But it could be stolen with techniques, unless you hate that then no.

No, they may have a living mind but as pain starts out with physical damage they'd have to feel that actual damage. And I don't believe their minds would be capable of the complexity of Genjutsu effects.

Where was that again? If you mean the second sealed effect I'd have to say it only increases the number controlled, you're wondering if it increases my Chakra?

Foreign puppets must be touched first, that I can do that was actually a point I forgot. XP
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Oh so wait, they dont have actual memories? They only know what you know? If so then I'm totally fine with that. And yeah, that information was my only concern. So if thats gone all my concerns are gone too. Can you make a note of that somewhere? I would compare this to the jutsu 'Peer Review' in that case then. Sentience of puppets/corpses without memories is B rank.

No pain? Coolio, works for me.

Chakra Control handles how many jutsu you can control. I was woundering if it was focused exclusivly to puppets or if it encorperated jutsu as a whole. But I have my answer, puppets only so you say xD Which works for me.

Can you please touch all puppets/corpses before you can use them like that (control with mind)? That way we have a legitamate reason as to why they are moving without strings. You need to have your chakra make contact with them somehow in someway. Without the contact in some way or another, its just happening like magic.

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Like I said they may be sentient but their minds are subject to her power, their minds are controlled. Ugh I hate describing the human mind its never easy, no matter what you do if it involves the brain its never easy. The memories are there but locked away with their old life only they know them, they can be stolen but only with things similar to Mind Pierce and such but I haven't thought of any information gathering abilities...yet. *evil grin of plotting*

Yes

Oh yeah no this give concentration to controlling puppets alone

Well if I unseal them from their scroll, all mine are kept in scrolls, isn't that contact or do you want actual contact. If you want it then okay. Magic magic magic.
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Good luck bub, those are Black Opps jutsu there xD (It's kinda the only thing black opps have, those mind/memory techs) You would need to go on a mission to steal the villages jutsu scrolls. Doable, but probally an S rank event. So I would save those ideas until your MN is strong enough or gets enough evil friends on her side.

So long as the person the body belongs to is not alive in that head of theirs then your right in that Genjutsu would not effect them. I would still like that note however that they only know what you know -nods- It still kinda reads like they are just simply alive themselves.

Actual contact would be awesome.
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Getting friends, easy, she's hot! LOL

Like I stated their mind is alive but can only do what she allows, she can't allow them to know something she wouldn't know. "You know that the Kage's real name is Jibb" she could only do that if she knows his name is Jibb and so on. Let me just add it and all's good.

Already added with the rest of the notes in last paragraph
Edited by IzzetDragon, Dec 11 2013, 10:02 PM.
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On more thing!
Does your RPC already own a method of which he/she manipulates corpses?
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She's got the D and C for puppets and she has the MN for corpses, yes
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Last question, which part of the legendary is locked until Jounin? o-o
You need to apply for the whole thing all at once and have that ability(s) marked.
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Oh that's the second one, I guess I only mentioned it in the permission thread...my bad I'll note that in, again sorry I'm scatter brain tonight doing all sorts of things...probably too much caffeine

Done!
Edited by IzzetDragon, Dec 13 2013, 01:11 AM.
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Excellent, but a suggestion for you sir. Why not isntead of a 100% increase to just your concentraiton ability (Which would let you manipulate only 8 puppets at max stats and 16 if you had max stats and 100% boost to that), just make that a 100% boost to the Spirit stat as a whole. As that would eat up a whole S rank, which your locked ability would have.

I'm suggesting this because your legendary looks on the tad side underpowered for your last ability.
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Well...hm...I don't know...I didn't think of that, *headdesk*

Alright changed from Concentration to Spirit, just so we're clear this has increased everything with Spirit
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Indeed. The only thing I can think of now are costs for the boosts, since you didnt have a cost listed before.

Add your cost and this should be good to go really.
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I actually only listed a side effect *face palm* what sort of cost for a Spirit boost would make sense a chakra cost or what? I'm guessing chakra though I'd have to say that makes me guess an amount

What sort of cost would you believe to be fair? Best I figure is C but I'm not that good with this sort of balancing XD
Edited by IzzetDragon, Dec 13 2013, 02:27 AM.
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Boosts in legendarys typically cost the same amount of chakra that they would normally costs as jutsu. Since this is a 100% boost, I would assume it would cost 1 S rank with A rank upkeep. -noms cookie- Since normal S rank boosts are only 80% your kinda getting 20% free for just being legendary. S ranks are S ranks though.
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That's a lot of chakra for it...esh...that will make it hard to use most of them if I lose so much especially with this first ability, practically that's what 1/3 of my chakra at Jounin?

This is why I'm bad at this part, THAT'S why I said only Concentration NOW I remember. What would changing this back to only Concentration for puppet control do? Post 12 you said it wouldn't be fully S but what else could this be an A-Ranks amount?


Separate question.....have we touched into indestructible items yet? I have another idea for something else but I'm not seeing it
Edited by IzzetDragon, Dec 13 2013, 08:25 PM.
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It's still a boost bud :/ A 100% boost, I don't think the cost would change too much no. It's why I was trying to help you gain a bit more bang for your buck.

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True it really won't make a difference. How many S-Ranks are in a Jounin? Its like what a third? Taking away that much leaves me with less to maintain the "army" which is why I had the issue before
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-noms cookie- Mmmm that is a problem. But, eventually you would rank up and that problem would be eliminated. Kinda sucks for you at Jounin but not so much at EJ. -shrugs- You have an S rank slot to play with for your locked ability, and a 100% boost will take all of that. Again, normally, an S rank boost jutsu would only give 80% and STILL cost an S rank of chakra. You get an extra 20% for the same costs just because its a legendary. Having this cost any less wouldn't necessarily be fair. Even if it was a specific boost.

I dunno what to tell you here. I don't have solutions for lack of chakra other then me telling you to take chakra traits to get more or for you to save it for your ace in the hole. S ranks are supposed to be your game enders, something a 100% boost to spirit would diffidently be. That kind of boost is down right scary. @_@
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