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| Which Eternal Lie; Time travel fic | |
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| Verity | November 28, 2007, 10:00 pm Post #136 |
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Poor Mary. I was thinking maybe she would like things better with this new laird and not want to come back to Kirk. Now I really really really hope that Kirk comes in and finds her before it's too late. |
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| Battery | November 29, 2007, 4:44 am Post #137 |
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Uuuh, Kirk, hurry up! Wow, this story gets more and more exciting I loved that Mary still thinks of Kirk I can't wait to read more!
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| Shayi | November 29, 2007, 8:23 am Post #138 |
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Ahhhh hell no! He can't do that. Well, admittedly, I know that he can do that - but dammit he shouldn't. And of course Kirk is going to find her - she can't doubt that. It's almost like a fairy tale - and in those, true love conquers all
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| Lucifer's Angel | November 29, 2007, 10:21 am Post #139 |
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Here's a short chapter for you guys this morning BTW, the Black Watch was the police force of the Highlands, they were set up to stop dealing in stolen cattle, but they also functioned as sort of a police force, and were set up by the Crown.Chapter 37 Conor, Kirk and Lars rode to the fort near Inverness. The guards moved aside, letting them in. "Master Mackenzie, what brings you here?", asked the commander, speaking with a Yorkshire English accent. The men dismounted, as Conor faced him. "Commander Howard, one of my kinswomen has been kidnapped. My father's ward, Lady Mary Drummond, was kidnapped while her and her maid were gathering heather. The maid was knocked unconscious and was left in a heath", he said grimly. "This is very bad news indeed. Did the maid get a description?", he asked. "They were wearing the Black Watch uniform and black cloaks, riding brown horses. She also said one of them had an Irish accent, and the other guy had a funny accent, not Scottish or English or Irish", said Kirk. Commander Howard raised an eyebrow. "I doubt the kidnappers were part of our regiment. Impersonating His Majesty's soldiers is a capital offense. Mayhaps they were brigands who wanted a pretty girl. Our men do not stoop to that level. Besides, all my men are either Englishmen or Scots, there are no Irishmen or foreigners here", he said. "Yeah, I think you're right. What are you gonna do?", asked Lars. "You are not Scots either, nor are you English. Where are you from?", he asked. "We're from the colonies. I'm Kirk Hammett, and this is Lars Ulrich. We are retainers" he said. "My father hired them, they work in the castle", explained Conor. "I see, And what is the description of the Lady Drummond?", he asked. "She is tall and slender, with golden hair and blue eyes. She was wearing a brown dress and an apron", said Conor. "Well, I shall try. A pretty girl with golden hair would be difficult to hide, especially if she is with an Irishman and a foreigner. We shall try the best we can, and those two scoundrels will hang from the highest gallows, for impersonating His Majesty's soldiers, and for kidnapping an innocent girl. Good day, gentlemen", he said. |
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| Verity | November 29, 2007, 11:16 am Post #140 |
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I hope that they do find her. It's so fun thinking that Metallica is from the colonies. They are doing very well disguising the fact that they are from a different time. I just hope they find Mary in time, and can't wait to see what's going to happen. |
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| Lucifer's Angel | November 29, 2007, 9:05 pm Post #141 |
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Here's another chapter for you guys Chapter 38 The trio departed the castle the next morning. Mary was numb with grief, her face showing no emotion. I am going far away from my lands, from my family. I shall never see Kirk again, she thought, tears stinging her dry eyes. "We shall arrive at Skye this evening. The women on Skey would make the trip worthwhile", chuckled Daniel. "Yes, and I cannot wait to see Jennet again. Hopefully, her father will be pleased by the coin I bring", said Jens. The trio arrived at the town of Mallaig around noon. Instead of taking the obvious route to Skye via the Kyle of Lochlash, Daniel had opted to take the roundabout route via Mallaig, which would leave them in the southern part of the island. A ferry was tied to the dock, bobbing on the water. It was a gray, damp day, the thick clouds almost obscuring the sea. A fine mist enveloped them, the chill seeping through their bones. "Ho, are ye passengers?", asked the captain. Daniel dismounted, tossing several coins to the captain. "Aye, we are headed to Skye. When does it leave?", he asked. "It leaves within the hour", he replied, biting the coin. They boarded the ship, along with the horses. Mary stared back at the mainland, her heart heavy. She quickly glanced about, realizing there was no way to escape. Jens came over to her, offering her an apple, before taking one for himself. "Iver MacDonald is not a bad man, he is very gentle. He will not harm you, you are too much of a lady to harm", he said gently. "Jens, I was being courted by a man named Kirk. I love him, I want him", she sobbed. Jens held her, as she cried. "I did not know that, Lady Drummond. I myself am courting a girl named Jennet, she lives on Skye. With this coin, I will be able to offer her father a dowry, so we can wed", he replied. "Jens, are ye wasting time again? I shall tell Jennet everything, and then ye shall have no wife", muttered Daniel. He grabbed Mary, scowling down at her. "Do not try to sweet-talk him, Lady Drummond. If I was not guaranteed the coin, I would have ravaged you and dumped your body in the sea. So do not try anything. I need the coin", he said, releasing her. Mary shivered with fear. I am afraid of Daniel, he is evil. But Jens is so sweet, how come he works for such a bad person?, she wondered. Daniel stood on the other side of the boat, smoking his pipe. Once we deliver the wench, I shall have a lot of coin. Then me and Jens shall split up, he shall stay with Jennet and I shall go back to the mainland. There must be a place for us, he thought, puffing on his pipe. He sighed, retrieving a brown leather pouch from under his cloak. Inside the pouch were a lock of curly brown hair tied with a red ribbon, a small dagger, a golden Celtic Cross pendant, a Claddagh ring with a crowned ruby heart between two hands, and a miniature portrait of a little girl. The little girl looked to be about four or five years old, with the same flaming red hair and green eyes as him, an impish smile on her face. Oh Annaly, I shall obtain enough coin for the both of us. I shall bring you to the mainland, where I can buy some land and build a house for us, he thought, closing his eyes. He took another puff off the pipe, the memories flooding back. Maura in the clutches of the mob, hiding in the keep, their flight to Galway City, and then landing in Scotland. It's only me and you, Annaly. I shall get her, and we'll live together in peace, he vowed silently. |
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| Verity | November 29, 2007, 10:40 pm Post #142 |
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A cliffhanger! You must write more! I kind of feel sorry for everyone in this chapter. I feel terrible for Mary, and Kirk. I feel sorry for Jens. He doesn't seem all too bad, and I can't wait to find out what's up with Daniel. Good stuff!
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| Battery | November 30, 2007, 7:35 am Post #143 |
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I also hope they will find Mary. And I can see Daniel has some secrets, that puts some depth on this character . But his still an ass treating Mary like that great chapters
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| Lucifer's Angel | November 30, 2007, 10:35 am Post #144 |
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Chapter 39 The ship docked at Armadale, in the southwest of the island. They quickly disembarked, and left the village. "First, we stop at the Matheson's homestead. Tomorrow, we head for the castle, it is in the mountains", said Jens, a dreamy look on her face. "Yes, and I cannot wait to see Annaly again", sighed Daniel, a slight smile on his lips. Mary was caught off-guard. Who is Annaly? Is she his sweetheart?, she wondered. The town quickly gave way to farmland and heath. The peaks of the Cuillin mountains loomed ahead, the jagged purple peaks almost grazing the sky. The horses labored under their burden for several hours. "We are almost there, then we shall rest", said Jens, seeing the anxious look on her face. Several minutes later, they stopped at a small farmstead nestled at the foot of the mountais. It consisted of a small wooden house, a barn and several sheds. Chickens, geeze, pigs and goats wandered about, their cries filling the air. A young woman and a little girl came rushing out of the house, running towards them. The woman had light brown curly hair and soft brown eyes, while the little girl had flaming red hair and brilliant green eyes. The woman embraced Jens, while the girl ran into Daniel's arms. Mary noticed that the girl and Daniel looked almost identical. She must be his kin, she mused. "Jens, father is in town. Did you bring coin? The priest is in town", said the woman. "Yes Jennet. If your fther gives permission, we shall be wed within the week", he said, kissing her gently. "Papa, are you going to stay? It has been so long", said the little girl. Daniel smiled at her, ruffling her hair. "I have to do a favor for the MacDonald. Then I shall have coin, and you shall come with me, Annaly", he said, smiling at his daughter. Annaly finally noticed Mary, her eyes wide. "Papa, who's the pretty lady?", she asked. Daniel flushed guiltily. "Annaly, this is the Lady Mary Drummond, the intended of the MacDonald's son. We are here to deliver her to her bethrothed", he said. Annaly's green eyes widened in delight. "Oh, how wonderful. You are a real lady", she murmured in awe. Mary smiled gently at the girl. "Yes, I am a lady, but not a goddess. Please call me Mary", she replied graciously. Just then, a man arrived at the farm. He was short and stout, graying brown hair framing a round face. His brown eyes took them in, raising an eyebrow. "Ah, Master Holmgren. Do ye have coin for the dowry?", he asked. Jens handed him most of the coins in the bag. He bit a piece, satisfied it was real gold. "Ye shall wed me daughter. And good day to you, Master Connolly", he said. "Good day, Master Matheson. We have one final errand to run, and then I shall take Annaly to the mainland with me", he said. "Good, ye shall spend the night", he said. |
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| Shayi | November 30, 2007, 11:03 am Post #145 |
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Aha and so we begin to get to know what's going on I love all of this intrigue and the plot twisting and turning Awesome stuff. I love Jens, nice chap really, just a little uh misguided. And Daniel, it's good to see that there is more than one side to his character - he is not just an asshole, he too has a history and things in his past that must be dealt with. I'm looking forward to the next chapter (Although since I won't have a computer over the weekend I won't get it til monday but nevertheless... I want to know what's goin' on in this!)
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| Verity | November 30, 2007, 11:26 am Post #146 |
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I am really enjoying all of the updates! I can't wait to find out what's going to happen with this Annaly kid, Mary, and Daniel. I also really liked how Annaly called Mary a real lady. That was a nice touch. I was like that too as a little girl whenever someone who was pretty was around.
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| Battery | November 30, 2007, 6:13 pm Post #147 |
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I love your descriptions of landscape, places and people Annaly seems to be very sweet girl. I also can wait to see how the things will go for all of them
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| Lucifer's Angel | November 30, 2007, 9:04 pm Post #148 |
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Here's another chapter for you ladies Chapter 40 The next morning, Daniel, Jens and Mary arrived at the MacDonald's castle. It was nestled deep in the mountains in a valley, the peaks of the Cuillins surrounding it. The castle itself was rather small, but elegant. It was made of gleaming white stone, four towers looming above the main house. It was surrounded by several cottages, the people working in the fields. They rode up to the front gates. Several guards in bold red and green MacDonald tartan halted them. "Who ye be?", asked one of them. "We are hear to deliver the laird's son's bride", replied Daniel. "Aye, we have been expecting ye", he said, stepping aside to let them in. The steward came before them, as they bowed deeply. "Master Connolly, Master Holmgren, follow me. Lady Drummond, one of the women shall escort you to your chambers", he said. A pleasant-faced, middle aged woman came over, bowing. "How do ye do, Lady Drummond? Follow me", she said, leading her upstairs. Meanwhile, Daniel and Jens were led the the laird's chambers. The steward knocked on the door, as the guards let them in. The laird was seated at a table, a goblet of wine in his hand. Next to him sat his son and heir, Iver. The laird was a bluff, hearty man, his dark hair turning gray in the temples. He was still fit and muscular, his blue eyes sharp and keen. His son was tall and slender, his dark hair brushing the color of his shirt, framing a thin, almost feminine face. His eyes were soft and gentle, a pale shade of blue. "Master Connolly, Master Holmgren, ye have found me son's bride?", he asked, pouring wine for Jens and milk for Daniel. Daniel accepted his goblet, smiling thankfully at him. "Aye, yer Lordship. I am sure she will make Iver happy", he replied. The laird nodded, handing both of them a large sack of coins. "For yer service, gentlemen. Ye shall stay the night, it is the least I can do", he replied. "Thank you, sir. My fiance's father will be glad to know he does not have a poor son-in-law", chuckled Jens. "Aye, I agree, Master Holmgren", said the laird, his blue eyes twinkling. "And I finally have enough coin to take my daughter to the mainland. I want to buy some land, build a house, settle down", sighed Daniel. "Aye, that is good, Master Connolly. Ye are a brave man and have done your duty well. Iver, be good to your bride. She is a beauty, but nervous. If ye hurt her, I shall beat you black and blue. Remember, you need an heir, preferable a son", he admonished. Iver sighed. "I know, Father", he mumbled. |
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| Verity | December 1, 2007, 2:09 am Post #149 |
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I hope this Iver guy doesn't hurt Mary in any way. She's been through enough shit. I hope that Daniel can go and build his house and have a peaceful existence with his daughter. I love your descrptions in this. They are fantastic.
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| Battery | December 1, 2007, 10:33 am Post #150 |
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Kirk where are youuu? The laird and his son sound quite nice and civilized but they kidnapped Mary and took her away from Kirk! Uuuh, I can't wait to read more!
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I was thinking maybe she would like things better with this new laird and not want to come back to Kirk.



I loved that Mary still thinks of Kirk

. But his still an ass treating Mary like that

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