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| Which Eternal Lie; Time travel fic | |
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| Shayi | November 21, 2007, 11:00 am Post #106 |
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What a lovely innocent girl James has himself there - I'm sure that she'll enjoy the night ahead of her! I did like the balance between her innocence and questions - and Lars' rather lewd statements - very nicely done! Seems as though they're all getting their ends away right enough! |
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| Lucifer's Angel | November 21, 2007, 11:02 am Post #107 |
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I'm feeling extremely generous, and I hope you like this chapter Chapter 28 Jeanie's eyes widened in surprise, as he deepened the kiss. His tongue gently moved between her lips, seeking out her own tongue. She moaned softly against his lips, stroking his blond hair. They continued to kiss, soft moans echoing in the room. James reluctantly broke the kiss, winking at her. "You've never been kissed like that before, eh darlin'? Trust me, it gets better", he said, kissing her again. While they kissed, his hand moved under her nightgown, cupping her breast. She gasped at the sensation, feeling warm all of a sudden. Wordlessly, James broke the kiss and removed her nightgown. She lay back on the bed, trembling under his gaze. "You look gorgeous, darlin'. I just wanna fuck you good and hard, but I'll be patient", he chuckled, his hand on her breast. Jeanie gasped when he kissed her nipple, before sucking it into his mouth. She grasped his hair, as he licked and sucked her nipple. "You taste so sweet", he murmured, moving to her other breast. "Ooh, James", she moaned softly, feeling the heat pool in her belly. Oh dear, this is wonderful. Can it get any better?, she wondered. "Oh yes it does, darlin'. Just you wait", he chuckled, parting her legs. She blushed furiously, as he got up and quickly removed his own clothes. Her eyes widened, as he grinned knowingly at her. "You like the view, darlin'? I like the view on my end too", he joked, joining her on the bed. James kissed her again, his hand moving between her legs. "Fuck, you're wet", he whispered against her lips, gently stroking her. Jeanie closed her eyes and moaned, breathing heavily. She could feel his fingers on her, touching her intimately. She gasped when he inserted a finger into her, slowly moving in and out of her body. James smiled down at her, watching as she reacted to his touch. She squrimed against his finger, her cheeks flushed and eyes closed, soft moans escaping her lips. He inserted another finger, as her eyes widened in amazement. "Just enjoy, darlin'. I'm gonna loosen you up", he murmured, moving his fingers in and out of her body. She moaned, feeling a coil of heat tightening in her belly. James moved his fingers inside her, until he felt the fragile barrier. Hmm, she's a virgin. I gotta be careful with her, he thought, finding her love button with his thumb. The coil of heat tightened even more, a throbbing sensation growing between her legs. A blinding white light flashed appeared between her eyes, as she came. "Oh James!", she gasped, the sensation overwhelming. James grinned down at her, removing his fingers from her body. "You liked that, Jeanie? You think you came good, but that's nothing", he murmured, kissing her lips, moving on top of her. He broke the kiss, looking into her eyes. James parted her thighs, slowly entering her body. She gasped at his entrance, her hands gripping his shoulders. "It'll hurt at first, but then it'll go away", he whispered, thrusting deep into her body. She cried out at the sudden pain, as he lay still, letting her body adjust. James kissed her again, as he began to thrust into her body. Jeanie could feel the pain recede, replaced by something better. Their moans of lovemaking echoed in the room, the firelight glowing on their bodies. James continued to thrust into her body, relishing the tightness around him. She wrapped her legs around his waist, as he thrust harder and faster into her body. She gripped his shoulders tightly, contracting around him. "Ooh James, oh yes", she panted, feeilng close to her peak. James tried to grin. "I know, darlin'", he grunted, feeling close to his own climax. They came together, their cries of ecstacy echoing in the room. They lay together for a few minutes, sweaty and exhausted. "That was wonderful, James", she murmured. He winked at her, before withdrawing from her body. "I know. Jeanie, we got all night. By the time, I get enough of you, you won't be able to walk", he chuckled, a gleam in his eyes. "Aye, I am really looking forward to that", she giggled. |
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| Verity | November 21, 2007, 11:11 am Post #108 |
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The Story Girl
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Now everyone in the band has gotten lucky. The thing that I love the most about this story besides from the fact that trasporting the band into the past is a brilliant idea, is the balance of modern slang verses old fashioned terms, and the bits of humor sprinkled in the rather serious and dramatic scenes. Like this part They continued to kiss, soft moans echoing in the room. James reluctantly broke the kiss, winking at her. "You've never been kissed like that before, eh darlin'? Trust me, it gets better", he said, kissing her again. James's funny little comments is a very nice, balancing, touch to a very hot and dramatic scene. |
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| Battery | November 21, 2007, 12:05 pm Post #109 |
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Some Kind Of Monster
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Wow, I missed a lot! First, I loved the wedding ceremony and the part with Led Zeppelin :horns2 And I'm also really impressed how you can balance really moody bits with humor. I liked the Jeanie preparations to her wedding night. I totally loved James comments, my two favourite are: 'James took her into his arms, blue eyes twinkling with mischief. He leaned down and kissed her lips, as she moaned softly. He broke the kiss, winking at her. "Later, darlin'", he chuckled.' and this made me laugh so hard: 'He winked at her, before withdrawing from her body. "I know. Jeanie, we got all night. By the time, I get enough of you, you won't be able to walk", he chuckled, a gleam in his eyes.' brilliant!And I must say, You are REALLY good at writing love scenes Absolutely great!! |
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| Lucifer's Angel | November 22, 2007, 11:03 am Post #110 |
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Chapter 29 Lars took Violet by the hand, grinning at her. He led her upstairs to his and James' room. He knocked on the door, grinning even wider when he saw it was empty. "Great, James is with Jeanie. I don't want anyone to interrupt us, we need our privacy", he chuckled. "Lars, you are an eager one, but I do not mind", she giggled, wrapping her arms around his neck. "I know", he whispered, leaning over and capturing her lips with his. Her lips parted under his, as she moaned softly. Her fingers tangled in his hair, as he pushed her against the wall, his mouth plundering hers. Violet felt her heart pounding in anticipation. The kiss deepened, growing ever more frantic, tongues dueling. They finally broke apart, breathless. "You like that, Violet? It gets better", he chuckled, leading her over to the bed. She blushed, as he removed his shirt, joining her on the bed. Lars looked into her eyes, before kissing her again. While they kissed, he unbuttoned her dress, exposing her dress. She moaned softly, then gasped when she felt his mouth on her breast. Violet grasped his hair, as he continued to lick and suck on her breast. "Oooh Lars", she whimpered, feeling the heat pool in her body. He chuckled against her flesh, sliding the dress down her legs. Violet felt the cool air on her naked body and shivered. "I'm not gonna hurt you, and just wanna fuck you senseless", he murmured, releasing her breast. Lars stood up and quickly removed his kilt, before rejoining her on the bed. He took her into his arms, gently kissing her lips, his hand on her thigh. His lips left hers and traced tiny kisses over her face, down her throat and on her breasts. Violet was lost in sensation, her vision hazy, breathing uneven. Lars moved his hand between her thighs, gently parting them. She gasped when he touched her intimately, the heat building in her belly. "You've been a naughty girl, Violet", he murmured, inserting a finger into her depths. She closed her eyes and moaned, moving against his finger. He chuckled, inserting another finger, as she squirmed under him. "Ooh, Lars, yes", she gasped, trying to get him deeper into her body. She moaned loudly, when she felt his lips on her, replacing his fingers. Violet clutched at his hair, keeping him between her legs. "Oooh yes, Ooh", she gasped softly, feeling his lips and tongue on her. Lars chuckled against her flesh, causing her to moan loudly. He continued his exploration of her most intimate spot, her gasps and moans of pleasure music to his ears. "Oh Lars, oh yes!", she gasped loudly, coming against his lips. He emerged from between her legs, licking his lips. "Violet, that was but an appetizer for the main course", he said, kissing her legs. While they kissed, he parted her legs and thrust into her body, as she cried out. "Shit, I should've known", he muttered, starting to withdraw from her body. Violet grasped his shoulders, a determined look in her eyes. "Do not even think about it, Lars", she said. He chuckled, moving deeper into her body. "Of course, whatever the lady wants", he replied gallantly, kissing her lips. As he kissed her, Lars started to thrust into her body. At first, he went slowly, not wanting to hurt her. "Lars, can you go faster?", she panted, wrapping her legs around his waist. "Anything for you, Violet", he groaned, thrusting faster and deeper into her body. She gasped at the sensation, fingers gripping his shoulders tightly. "Ooh Lars, oh yes, Ohhh!", she moaned, coming hard. He thrust one last time into her body, releasing into her warmth. He took her into his arms, cradling her head against his chest. "That was wonderful, Lars", she panted. He smiled at her. "Yeah, I know. We got all night, let's get some rest, so we can do it some more", he chuckled, blowing out the candles. |
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| Shayi | November 22, 2007, 11:13 am Post #111 |
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Oooh 'eck, this band is insatiable The scene between James and Jeannie was very tenderly written very sensitive which seemed fitting. With Lars - well he comes off as having somewhat of a 'bedroom ego' which exactly fits with his character! Excellently done stuff! |
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| lolo | November 22, 2007, 11:38 am Post #112 |
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that were some steamy chapters and shayi is right, james' scene is far more gently and sensitive than Lars'. But I liked em both... the guys are pretty popular with the ladies
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| Verity | November 22, 2007, 6:52 pm Post #113 |
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The appetizer for the main course thing made me chuckle. Lars is funny. Yay! They've all got laid. They were able to bag a chick. Go Metallica!!! I just wonder if they will stay in the past forever. James will have to tell his new wife at some point that he's from a different time. I'm loving this soap opera!!!
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| Battery | November 23, 2007, 3:23 am Post #114 |
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"Of course, whatever the lady wants" - loved the line So, none of Tallica boys will leave James' wedding unsatisfied Another very well written chapter And I also wonder if they still even remember about going back :wacko: I think they like where they are
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| Lucifer's Angel | November 23, 2007, 11:21 am Post #115 |
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Chapter 30 Several Weeks Later "Morag, ye look poorly. Are you all right?", asked Jeanie, concerned. "Aye, I feel a might peaked, that is all, Jeanie. I hope it is what I think it is", she said, her eyes gleaming. "Morag, then you must wed Cliff. Or else the child will be born a bastard", admonished Jeanie. "What if the bairn dies and we are wedded? He shall desert me for a fertile woman. No, I shall wed him after the bairn is born", said Morag. "Morag, you okay? You look like crap", said Cliff, embracing her. "Cliff, I think I am having your bairn", she said excitedly. His eyes widened in shock, a delighted grin on his face. "That's great. I can't believe it. I'm gonna be a dad!", he shouted, jumping up and down. "Aye, and I am going to be carrying the wee bugger in me belly. All ye did was lie with me, Cliff", said Morag, rolling her eyes. "Wow, I never thought I'd be a dad. I mean, where I'm from people have kids when they're older. But it's cool anyway, I wanna teach 'em to hunt and fish and play music and everything", he said eagerly. "But what if it is a girl?", she asked cheekily. "Same thing. I don't want a little prissy daughter, I want a daughter who kicks ass", he replied. "Cliff, then she will not find a husband. Ye want her to be an old maid?", she retorted. "Hell no, but I don't want any guys sniffing around her either", he grumbled. Jeanie smiled at the couple, then left the house, walking to the graveyard. She walked amongst the graves until she found the newest one. She bent down, gently tracing the inscription: Meg McKenna 1701-1742 Beloved wife, mother, aunt Rest with the angels A tear fell from her eye, a sad smile on her face. "Man, James is a very good man, you were right. Liam loves him like a father, and Morag is carrying Cliff's bairn. And I think I am carrying James' bairn as well", she whispered, getting up. "Hello, Mistress Hetfield. James is hunting with the boys, they are preparing for the stag hunt. Do ye need to speak with him?", asked Alasdair. "Yes, I have very good news. It is urgent", she said, stiffling a giggle. Alasdair looked at her, his eyes quickly taking in her slightly rounded belly. "Aye, ye are carrying his bairn. James shall be pleased to hear this", he chuckled. Just then, James led the young boys back to the keep. Jeanie's heart quickened at the sight of her husband. James wore a leather shirt, his dark green kilt revealing his muscular legs. His hair had lightened from exposure to the sun, blue eyes peering out from his tanned face. He smiled when he saw his wife. "Jeanie, great to see you", he said, embracing her. "James, I have got great news. I think I am carrying your child", she said, blue eyes glowing with happiness. James was speechless. What, she's pregnant? Damn. I hope I don't fuck this up, he thought. "That's great, Jeanie. But there's stuff I gotta tell you about my family. But I will be the best damn father I can be to this kid, I'm not going to fuck this up", he vowed. |
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| Verity | November 23, 2007, 12:25 pm Post #116 |
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This as turned into one hell of a soap opera. Actually, it's better than most soap operas. Soap operas aren't this good. Holy shit. Now I really wonder what the boys are going to do. James's reaction was priceless. I wonder if they do go back will they take their new families with them. Good work! |
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| Battery | November 23, 2007, 5:38 pm Post #117 |
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"James wore a leather shirt, his dark green kilt revealing his muscular legs. His hair had lightened from exposure to the sun, blue eyes peering out from his tanned face."............ *SMACK!* ok, back to reality Wow Cliff and James will be daddys I can't wait to read next chapter |
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| Lucifer's Angel | November 24, 2007, 11:49 am Post #118 |
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Chapter 31 Kirk sighed, draining his glass of whiskey. He'd just heard that Cliff and James were going to be fathers, and this depressed him. Of course, he was happy for his friends, but it made him realize what he was missing. Even Lars has got Violet, they're so happy together. Me and Mary meet in secret, and I don't even have the guts to ask the laird permission to court her, I'm such a wuss, he scowled. "Kirk, are ye all right?", asked Rory, concerned for his friend. He sighed. "James and Cliff are going to be fathers, and here I am, sneaking around to see Mary like some teenager. Even Lars has got himself a girlfriend", he sighed. "Why do you not ask the laird permission to court her? He is not a tyrant, and he may consent", replied Rory. "Yeah, but I'm just a musician and she's his ward. I'm not rich or a laird, just some guy works in the castle", he replied sadly. "Kirk, ye are a wonderful guitar player and composer. And Mary is sweet on yer. The laird is not a bad man, nor is he a cruel man. I shall vouch for you. But if he does give permission, ye will have to court her properly and ye cannot take her virtue. You must wait until the wedding night", he warned. "I know that. We haven't been doing anything like that. Mostly we just talk, and I show her how to play songs on the guitar. She's really good at playing the guitar. Right now, I'm teaching her to play Stairway to Heaven", he said. "Good to know that. Tomorrow, we got before the laird and make our case. But be careful, do not compromise her", said Rory. That night, Kirk lay in bed, waiting for the signal. In the dim light, he could see Cliff's empty bed, neatly made. He's with Morag. I can't believe he's fucking a pregnant chick, he chuckled. When he heard the signal, he quickly left the room, careful not to make a sound. He reached Mary's chamber, entering the room and closing the door behind him. Mary stood in the center of the room, the candlelight glowing on her. She wore a sheer white shift, her long blond hair loose and flowing. She smiled at him, blue eyes twinkling with delight. Kirk walked over to her, kissing her lips. She returned the kiss, leading her over to the bed. Their kiss deepened, moans echoing in the room. They finally broke apart, as Kirk took her hand in his. "Mary, I was talking with Rory, and he had a great idea. He says I should speak to the laird, to ask permission to court you. What do you think?", he asked eagerly. Her eyes widened in surprise. "Kirk, are you sure? What if he does not give permission?", she asked worriedly. "That'll suck. But if he says yes, we can be a real couple like James and Jeanie and Cliff and Morag and Lars and Violet. That'll be wonderful!", he enthused. "All right, but you must be careful. Be respectful, and look your best. Maybe I can be with you", she suggested. "Great idea, Mary", he said, kissing her again. |
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| Shayi | November 24, 2007, 12:45 pm Post #119 |
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I'm glad that Kirk's got up the courage to go and ask the Laird's permission. Like they say - if you don't ask then you don't get! And I hope that he does get permission. Another nice touch was the fact that he's teaching her Stairway to Heaven - for sure that made me chuckle
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| Battery | November 24, 2007, 3:06 pm Post #120 |
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It's good Kirk decided to ask laird for permission to officially be with Mary ... I wonder what the laird will say...
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brilliant!
The scene between James and Jeannie was very tenderly written very sensitive which seemed fitting. With Lars - well he comes off as having somewhat of a 'bedroom ego' which exactly fits with his character! 

8:38 PM Jul 10