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[Accepted]Brenden F. Magnus
Topic Started: Aug 7 2014, 04:50 PM (86 Views)
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Identification
Name: Brenden F. Magnus
Nickname: 'Crimson Reaper'
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Height: 6' 3"
Weight: 160 Lbs
Age: 20
Hometown: Iron Holow, North Blue
Faction: Revolutionary
Reputation: Disgruntled Citizen
Crew: TBA
Vessel: TBA
Profession: Blacksmith / Fighter


Physical Description
Brenden has a well-shaped body. He's quite muscular despite his age and has basic assets of a mage. His body helps him in the lines of speed and stamina, but mainly strength. He tends to look less though than his body shows with clothes on, making people think strangely of him. His face on the other hand contradicts his body, it seems rather gentle and he's smiling for a great deal of the day. His eyes are tainted with a crimson-red colour and are quite large compared to others.

He's got a rather rough pair of lips due to being beaten up alot in the past, they seem hardened. Brenden's hair isn't all too fancy. It's all fuzzy and spread across the top of his head, or rather as they say 'bed-hair'. His hair's got a smooth crimson-red colour and most of it is kept up by the headband he wears all the time. His nose is balanced. It's not too wide, not too long or short, not too big. His neck isn't short yet not exactly long. It has a normal length for his age but you can see that it's a little muscled up and the veins being thicker around his neck. His shoulders are rather skinny but then again in a muscular way. They are in balance with his arms and look natural.


Clothing&Accessories
Mostly wears a T-Shirt with black pants and a mantle with a colour combination of Red and Blue flames across it, No fancy shoes or anything. Wears a pocket watch made out of Gold around his neck. He switches T-shirts once a week but never seems to switch pants. He has 2 katanas, his reserve katana on his back and the Fiery-Red katana strapped to his belt, in an expensive sheeth covered with a gold tip and a few golden lines. His shoes are made from low-quality leather and have a black colour.

Golden Pocket Watch from his Father.
Extra: Extra: Large scar on his back, cross-slash scar on his chest.

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Personality

Brenden is a young man and such he acts. Although he comes over quite cocky and aggressive he has reasons to be. He doesn't really have any friends meaning he feels like a loner. He becomes aggressive when unjust things happen near him, he'd immediately take action. He is the kind of person that helps the innocent with all his might. Besides such moments, he can be gentle and nice with women, also with men if those wouldn't be too arrogant. He hates people that are arrogant and has a grudge against the Marines.

He sighs every morning, simply because he awaits the day that he'll get into a Pirate Crew or perhaps Make one. That is his goal so far that he chose. He heard of Bounty Hunters before and has slight fright towards them for the future. They might come after him, after all. Then there's mercenaries, He doesn't seem to care about them and doesn't mind them. He likes gentle and polite persons, loves meat and fruits and also likes women. When he gets the chance he'll start a conversation with any he finds! He kinda hates men, due to most having arrogance is why he would teach them a lesson, or those that ruin his chances with a lady. He also hates persons that interfere with some matters and those who are a burden.

He has grown a lot thanks to the people he's met, and the few fights he's been through. He thinks before he attacks most of the times, but when he sees someone strong he becomes thrilled and gains an adrenaline rush. Now he aims to set free the world with power he had not obtained before but wields now, however. He seeks to free people from the imprisonment of the marines!


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Stats 261
Strength: 85 (68 + 17)
Speed: 60 (48 + 12)
Stamina: 66
Accuracy: 50
Fortune: 65

Distributive Points Earned: 0/200
Beli Earned: 37,800,000/105,000,000

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Traits


Devil Fruit Name: Kachi Kachi No Mi (Rock Hard Fruit) [T4]
Devil Fruit Type: Paramecia
Devil Fruit Ability: This devil fruit grants the consumer the ability to harden their body as well as increase their body temperature at will.

Techniques: (168 / 260) (Max Rank 32)

Techniques
Edited by That One Guy, Aug 9 2014, 09:03 AM.
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Finished.
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29,800,000/100,000,000 <--should be 29,300,000 +5,000,000 to both sides for the starting DP/beli as well. so 34,300,000/105,000,000

For your Flame Blade Art techniques, why does he have stat boosts there? they don't seem necessary/no real reason for a stat boost to be in those techniques.

Some of your crimson techniques will need to be separated into another branch, since techniques trees are supposed to be one technique getting stronger, will comment on this when i have a bit more time.


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Envy Sans Souci (Queen Bee) - Pirate - #C68E17

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Fixed that. Firstly I counted it as a harvest, hence I didn't add the starting beli on top.

Second, I applied the free 5 mil for weapons as well so my beli changed a tad.

I copied my techs off of an older version directly so there were some errors here and there. Patched up all the branching and removed the stat boosts on the flame techs.

It's now Burst --> Impact (enhanced variaton)--> Impact Burst (Combination)

Lance separated as a single since it's the only leg-based tech in there.

Cross Faith (Cross-strike) --> Falling Dragon (Double claw-strike) --> Barrage (Two-handed barrage)

In case the last one makes less sense, you can see it as 'Single Motion' --> 'Double Motion (Impact + strike) --> 'Multiple Motions' (continuous strikes)

I believe this branching makes more sense.
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Hmm everything seems fine...

This character has been accepted and will be relocated to its proper sub-forum. A moderator will re-post your character in the archives shortly.


Ivan Volkov - Thief - #0B4C5F
Envy Sans Souci (Queen Bee) - Pirate - #C68E17

Sven Voltaic - Pirate Captain- #8A0829
Medusa- Fighter - #FF4000

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