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Topic Started: Sep 24 2017, 06:20 AM (112 Views)
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Thequartzcaptain
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Sep 24 2017, 06:20 AM
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海贼王新世界
Account Name: Thequartzcaptain
海贼王新世界
Name: Ozymadius Fae Nickname: Spark Age: 25 Gender: Male Race: Human Height: 6'3 Weight: 221 Faction: Pirate Crew: N/A Reputation: N/A Profession: Musician Fame: N/A Vessel: Night sky ((Ichi rank)) Hometown: Karaoke Island Physical Description: Ozymadius is a very handsome man. He has somewhat tanned skin from hanging out at the beach so much and long white hair. Across his face is a scar that goes from one part of his cheek, across his nose, and to the other side of his cheek. Other than that large scar on his face he has no impurities on his face. To go along with his white hair he has white eyebrows. He also has eyes as blue as the sky that would attract any woman to him. Unlike most people ozy is a very strong person, but has a more lean cut body since he is taller than most. His white hair is long enough to go down a bit passed his shoulder blades. Clothing: Despite being a beach boy ozymadius likes to dress nice so wherever he goes he is wearing a black suit with a white tie. To go along with it he has black and white dressy shoes. Accessories: N/A Extra: On his back is a tattoo of a demon Picture: Spoiler: click to toggle
Personality Since his childhood ozy was a very outgoing person. Although as he grew as a person he started to become very blunt, straight forward, polite, and at the same time disciplined. Around woman and children he is a very sweet and caring person. He can understand a lot of things that may be going on in their lives and would do just about anything to make the person happy again. With men he is the life of the party! He likes to joke around, drink, party, and just in general have fun with his friends. In most situations he is the optimist who tries to make the best out of moments. Although he likes to have fun he isn't the best at fully planning things.
When brought upon people who anger him ozy doesn't show mercy. He will fight them if needed, beat them, and then try to break or discipline them. Either that or if they are pirates he would do the thing they hate the most and turn them into the navy. When he is bored he just brings out a ukelele and sings for everyone or just for himself.
History Spoiler: click to toggle When he was born ozymadius had been the happiest baby someone could see. By the age of five he had been a singer and a practitioner in martial arts. As he grew up he had learned how to play several instruments and learned a couple of martial arts from the people who could show him a thing or two. When he was sixteen he had been playing music and singing on the streets to make money. It was a hobby that he had, but it got him a lot of money since he was good at it! Around his twenties he had started liking the idea of slight of hand and of course he immediately started to practice this.
When he had hit the age of twenty he had become in debt to people who think he cheated them in a game of cards when in reality he had just been good. Well he was counting cards, but he wasn't cheating as bad. Since this debt he had to get in many fights with people while still cheating others from their money. From the fights he had learned several aspects of fighting that he wouldn't have learned before. This was to use the enviornment to your advantage and that in a fight there are no rules.
When he was twenty one he had learned about pirates and devil fruits from a sailor who had come to the island to learn about the islands. The man told him a lot of things about the sea and rumours of other islands. He even taught him how to sail! When he was twenty five he decided that he wanted to sail the sea and learn about the world. When the time came he had packed his stuff, stole a boat that had not been used in a while, and set sail to whatever island he may come across.
Weaponry & Equipment
Weapon Name: N/A Weapon Class: N/A Description: N/A Perks (Points): N/A Price: N/A
Stats 32 Strength: 7 Speed: 10 Stamina: 9 Accuracy: 6 Fortune: 8
Distributive Points Earned: 0/0 Beli Earned: 5,000,000/5,000,000 Bounty Beli Earned: 0/0 (For Bounty Hunters and those claiming Marine Bounties)
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Purchases
Traits Fated (3 Traits) - When the character earns a trait point, they gain 1.5 trait points instead of the traditional 1. Fated acts as a banking system. These traits are usable whenever the taker sees fit. X does not have to be a whole number, and due to the nature of fated can be X or X.5 traits.
Devil Fruit Name: N/A Devil Fruit Type: N/A Devil Fruit Ability: N/A
Techniques: N/A
Technique Name - Rank 4 Type: N/A Range: N/A Stats: 16
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I'm a viking and I am staying at your house. How did you expect me to not raid your panty drawer? That's what vikings do! - Magnus Holt
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Mr. Prince
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Sep 24 2017, 04:37 PM
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Is this a WIP or is this your application you wish to submit? If it is under construction please note it with a WIP tag in your title.
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"Whenever you bow your heads, raise them high again. For you are the Power Rangers."
Captain Marvelous  |
| Strength: 316(211+105) | Accuracy: 103 | | Speed: 256 (205+51) | Stamina: 340(204+136) | | Fortune: 253 | Location :Pressure Isle |
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Junez Laxus Caliuco  |
| Strength: 173(130+43) | Accuracy: 171 (137+34) | | Speed: 200 (150+50) | Stamina: 156(125+31) | | Fortune: 175 | Location : Pressure Isle |
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Azuel  | | Azuel phantom |
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| Name : Azuel Ocean | Beli :96,450,000  | | Faction : Pirate | Reputation : 15,000,000 | | Crew : Electric Lion Pirates | | Crew Position : First Mate | | Fame : 0 | | Vessel : |
| Strength: 316(211+105) | Accuracy: 103 | | Speed: 256 (205+51) | Stamina: 340(204+136) | | Fortune: 253 | Location :Dawn Island |
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Sylar "Sleight" Peace •Marine rank: Ensign • DP Earned: 235• Beli: 168,350,000 • Location: RellechillUnclaimed Rewards MarvelousTrade thread. Changing hands again10 DP, 6,000,000 http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30508481/1/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30517617/1/http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30519011/1/#newAzuelhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/11125396/1/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/11129077/1/ http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30330516/3/ 10 DP, 7,000,000 Beli http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30423423/1/#new 7DP & 4,000,000 http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30456054/1/#new 5 DP & 2,500,000 http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30513559/1/#newSylarhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30388763/2/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30344540/2/http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30455738/1/#newSaving the tourists http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30511214/1/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30513559/1/#new TheMostBadassHenshin
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Thequartzcaptain
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Sep 24 2017, 10:45 PM
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it is a character app
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I'm a viking and I am staying at your house. How did you expect me to not raid your panty drawer? That's what vikings do! - Magnus Holt
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Mr. Prince
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Sep 25 2017, 11:24 AM
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- Thequartzcaptain
- Sep 24 2017, 10:45 PM
it is a character app Ok then a couple of things need to be adjusted before I can give an approval.
3 paragraphs is the minimum of acceptable history You don't have any techniques which is fine but you still must list your technique points/technique points available and your max technique rank. See the character creation template for reference Your clothing section could probably use a little beefing up as well.
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"Whenever you bow your heads, raise them high again. For you are the Power Rangers."
Captain Marvelous  |
| Strength: 316(211+105) | Accuracy: 103 | | Speed: 256 (205+51) | Stamina: 340(204+136) | | Fortune: 253 | Location :Pressure Isle |
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Junez Laxus Caliuco  |
| Strength: 173(130+43) | Accuracy: 171 (137+34) | | Speed: 200 (150+50) | Stamina: 156(125+31) | | Fortune: 175 | Location : Pressure Isle |
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Azuel  | | Azuel phantom |
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| Name : Azuel Ocean | Beli :96,450,000  | | Faction : Pirate | Reputation : 15,000,000 | | Crew : Electric Lion Pirates | | Crew Position : First Mate | | Fame : 0 | | Vessel : |
| Strength: 316(211+105) | Accuracy: 103 | | Speed: 256 (205+51) | Stamina: 340(204+136) | | Fortune: 253 | Location :Dawn Island |
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Sylar "Sleight" Peace •Marine rank: Ensign • DP Earned: 235• Beli: 168,350,000 • Location: RellechillUnclaimed Rewards MarvelousTrade thread. Changing hands again10 DP, 6,000,000 http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30508481/1/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30517617/1/http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30519011/1/#newAzuelhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/11125396/1/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/11129077/1/ http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30330516/3/ 10 DP, 7,000,000 Beli http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30423423/1/#new 7DP & 4,000,000 http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30456054/1/#new 5 DP & 2,500,000 http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30513559/1/#newSylarhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30388763/2/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30344540/2/http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30455738/1/#newSaving the tourists http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30511214/1/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30513559/1/#new TheMostBadassHenshin
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Sep 25 2017, 03:37 PM
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Your picture just leads to pinterest itself, if you can link me the actual picture I can assist in placing it into your app.
Your stats add up to 34 not 32. Please remove two stat points..
Your fated if you are using all 3 traits in it will have 3 Traits labeled and not X Traits.
And as pops has said we would like some more history, and I would love a little bit more personality. Without the picture as well I'm having a hard time imagining what your character actually looks like.
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Links To Augustine Bon'Clyde and The Elitists
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Fresh
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Sep 26 2017, 01:37 PM
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- Sep 25 2017, 03:37 PM
Your picture just leads to pinterest itself, if you can link me the actual picture I can assist in placing it into your app.
Your stats add up to 34 not 32. Please remove two stat points..
Your fated if you are using all 3 traits in it will have 3 Traits labeled and not X Traits.
And as pops has said we would like some more history, and I would love a little bit more personality. Without the picture as well I'm having a hard time imagining what your character actually looks like. Reposting your App is discouraged please edit the original...
Also reposting your app does not fix the issues stated below. Please edit them accordingly.
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Mr. Prince
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Oct 1 2017, 02:29 PM
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I see you have made some adjustments that we suggested. If you believe your app is currently ready to be approved I must inform you that it is still not. It you require any further assistance please reach out to a member of staff. If you are aware of what you must correct on this app already then disregard
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"Whenever you bow your heads, raise them high again. For you are the Power Rangers."
Captain Marvelous  |
| Strength: 316(211+105) | Accuracy: 103 | | Speed: 256 (205+51) | Stamina: 340(204+136) | | Fortune: 253 | Location :Pressure Isle |
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Junez Laxus Caliuco  |
| Strength: 173(130+43) | Accuracy: 171 (137+34) | | Speed: 200 (150+50) | Stamina: 156(125+31) | | Fortune: 175 | Location : Pressure Isle |
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Azuel  | | Azuel phantom |
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| Name : Azuel Ocean | Beli :96,450,000  | | Faction : Pirate | Reputation : 15,000,000 | | Crew : Electric Lion Pirates | | Crew Position : First Mate | | Fame : 0 | | Vessel : |
| Strength: 316(211+105) | Accuracy: 103 | | Speed: 256 (205+51) | Stamina: 340(204+136) | | Fortune: 253 | Location :Dawn Island |
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Sylar "Sleight" Peace •Marine rank: Ensign • DP Earned: 235• Beli: 168,350,000 • Location: RellechillUnclaimed Rewards MarvelousTrade thread. Changing hands again10 DP, 6,000,000 http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30508481/1/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30517617/1/http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30519011/1/#newAzuelhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/11125396/1/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/11129077/1/ http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30330516/3/ 10 DP, 7,000,000 Beli http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30423423/1/#new 7DP & 4,000,000 http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30456054/1/#new 5 DP & 2,500,000 http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30513559/1/#newSylarhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30388763/2/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30344540/2/http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30455738/1/#newSaving the tourists http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30511214/1/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30513559/1/#new TheMostBadassHenshin
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Oct 1 2017, 02:52 PM
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Just a bit more personality if you could then I'm okayish on 1/2ing
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Mr. Prince
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Oct 17 2017, 12:06 AM
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This will be moved to inactive in 1 week
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"Whenever you bow your heads, raise them high again. For you are the Power Rangers."
Captain Marvelous  |
| Strength: 316(211+105) | Accuracy: 103 | | Speed: 256 (205+51) | Stamina: 340(204+136) | | Fortune: 253 | Location :Pressure Isle |
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Junez Laxus Caliuco  |
| Strength: 173(130+43) | Accuracy: 171 (137+34) | | Speed: 200 (150+50) | Stamina: 156(125+31) | | Fortune: 175 | Location : Pressure Isle |
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Azuel  | | Azuel phantom |
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| Name : Azuel Ocean | Beli :96,450,000  | | Faction : Pirate | Reputation : 15,000,000 | | Crew : Electric Lion Pirates | | Crew Position : First Mate | | Fame : 0 | | Vessel : |
| Strength: 316(211+105) | Accuracy: 103 | | Speed: 256 (205+51) | Stamina: 340(204+136) | | Fortune: 253 | Location :Dawn Island |
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Sylar "Sleight" Peace •Marine rank: Ensign • DP Earned: 235• Beli: 168,350,000 • Location: RellechillUnclaimed Rewards MarvelousTrade thread. Changing hands again10 DP, 6,000,000 http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30508481/1/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30517617/1/http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30519011/1/#newAzuelhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/11125396/1/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/11129077/1/ http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30330516/3/ 10 DP, 7,000,000 Beli http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30423423/1/#new 7DP & 4,000,000 http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30456054/1/#new 5 DP & 2,500,000 http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30513559/1/#newSylarhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30388763/2/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30344540/2/http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30455738/1/#newSaving the tourists http://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30511214/1/#newhttp://w11.zetaboards.com/OnePieceNewWorld/topic/30513559/1/#new TheMostBadassHenshin
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