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| Sosina | Oct 15 2017, 11:10 PM Post #1 | |||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
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The sleepiest Doo you know
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探検家 NPC Type:Trait NPC 探検家 Character Theme Characters Battle Theme Name:Summus Aberdeen Nickname:Alpha Walker of the void Age:new born Gender:Female Race:Ripper/human(Nola hybrid Height:4'0" Weight:85 lbs Faction: Nola Crew:None Reputation:None Profession:Hunter Fame:0 Vessel:Injector Hometown:no home town but will answer "the Hive" if asked (was born on Little garden) Physical DescriptionSummus is rather short, standing only 4'0" tall, and she has a rather frail looking body, thin and not very muscular looking, but this is because she is covered from head to toe in a hard exoskeleton that protects her that is purple in color, her flesh is of a light red, almost bordering on a dark pink, she also takes after her "mother" hair color wise and she wears it loose with no real attempt to style it,, her arms end in small claws for fingers as well as massive arm scythes that she can fold back to use her hands, the blades of the scythes being a light purple in color, her eyes are large and multifaceted, as well as a bright green in color, she has a small nose that actually is kinda cute, and her mouth is more human like then insect like, however her teeth are not human they are like her ripper ancestry sharp and made for rending and tearing. Clothing:She tends to not like clothing, her carapace covering her body completely anyway, though when forced to she will only wear a lab coat like her "Mother" likes to wear Accessories:A necklace that her "Mother" made for her that says "Test-01" that looks like a gear Extra:she has bio-cannons on her shoulders. she also has a pair of wings that allow her to extend her jumps and fly which are a light green in color, as well as web-spinners, and a stinging tail Picture: Spoiler: click to toggle Personality Summus is extremely loyal to her "Mother" Seeing her still as her queen and the one who gave her life and meaning, she would never turn on her and never think to betray her for anyone, she is however very innocent, her simply mind still forming and adapting to the new form and abilities she has, making her quite curious about everything, in a more feral way then one would expect, due to her genetic code she tends to test things first with her mouth before anything else. When not feeling threatened or feeling like her "Mother" is threatened she is a very kind and nice individual, though she is confused by a lot of things that most take for granted, this is again due to her once simple mind having grown and learning about all this new information that she never had to think about before, but she has a great capacity for learning as she does have her mothers innate intelligence, but she is building from the base of a Ripper which are very simply minded. As far as things go she is innocent and kind when not feeling threatened, often snuggling up to people that show her kindness, showing affection in a rather feral manner, however she is smart enough to know when she is being lied to, or someone is being sarcastic to her, she is simple and innocent, not stupid. Like her mother she shows a great ability to adapt, shown how she still has the mold-able part of her DNA, allowing her to "evolve" taking the time to learn and adapt to things that are encountered. History Summus was actually a mutational quirk in the creation process of a normal Ripper, rather then hatching immediately the egg continued to gestate and grow, the elasticity of the organ that produced the living ammo was such that Nola didn't notice till the time came for the egg to come out, and even then it was still barely larger then any of the other ammo, but the organ worked it out of one of the bio-cannons and allowed it to simply roll out, the hard shell protecting it from impact. It then started to rapidly mature and grow, eventually hatching into the fully grown and matured Summus, four feet of Enlarged Ripper DNA mixed with Nola's DNA to give her a daughter, and while she was at first simple minded she was also quite different, having the same inherent abilities as her mother, as her DNA was saturated with all the mixed things that she had added to herself, they came as Natural in this new daughter, thought she still needed to learn how to use them. Though once she had hatched she did try to do the normal function of her DNA base of a Ripper, and started to eat things that where all around to gather resources for her Hive and Mother. She seemed to posses an after affect of Nola's Genetic Tampering, making her DNA and body highly mutational, allowing her to evolve and Adapt as she needs to fit a situation, though any additions seem to be temporary to an extent unless properly nurtured and grown. Though after some time and a lot of talking to from her Hive and Mother Summus stopped and listened, she was being given instructions, important instructions, she was apparently different then her other Ripper siblings, she was larger, stronger, and she looked more like Mother then her siblings, it seemed her mother wanted to keep her around longer then the normal lifespan of her kind, and in fact, she could feel she was different, not just in looks and size, maybe she was made to help protect her hive and mother? if so then mother made her specially for that, it made perfect sense to her, and so she simply accepted her new life, after all if her queen, hive, and mother needed her, why shouldn't she stay? why should she complain? she had everything she needed really. Weaponry
Stats 471 total Strength:122 (104+18) Speed:122 (104+18) Stamina:122 (104+18) Accuracy:105 Fortune:117 Distributive Points Earned: 0/386 Sources Nola Aberdeen Traits 0/15 (15 natural)
Devil Fruit Name: Devil Fruit Type: Devil Fruit Ability: Techniques: 0/235 (58) Technique Name - Rank Type: Range: Stats: Edited by Sosina, Nov 4 2017, 01:38 AM.
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| Sosina | Nov 2 2017, 05:34 PM Post #16 |
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The sleepiest Doo you know
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edits made and ready for approval |
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| Zaine | Nov 3 2017, 06:19 PM Post #17 |
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Ball of Sunshine
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Please make the following changes: Properly list which which natural weaponry are 'free' on the Weapons section Rename your 3 trait natural weaponry as Dangerous Natural Weaponry in the traits section. I'll need some direction over what your Mutational Genome even enables your character to do ICly and how it'll be shown. Bodily Resistance - Being highly resistant to 5 separate elemental effects is over the top even as a dangerous ability, so I'm going to ask you to limit the elements down to 2. Chem Gas - How exactly is the gas expelled from all over the body? Also being able to expel 3 different types of gas in one ability is quite much imo, so I'll ask that you lower that down to one element each per dangerous ability trait. |
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| Sosina | Nov 3 2017, 07:14 PM Post #18 |
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The sleepiest Doo you know
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hey I copy and pasted the code beside the trait, not my fault you guys didn't fully make the code correctly, but sure whatever (edited) As by the rules of Monsters Tier 1 I can only have 2 free strong natural weapons and 1 ability if you read the app you will see only 2 weapons are listed as Strong and I have not bought the 2 point trait to get strong weapons, I have also clearly marked one as a Dangerous Ability as tier 1 monsters gain 1 free dangerous ability, however as I have no Doubt that I will be told to do it anyway I have edited my App to say as such, because looking over the App is apparently something staff doesn't do completely..... (salty) I sent you a PM about what genome does already if you have not read it, that is not my problem you have the power go read your PM's I sent it to you the same time I sent one to scarlet (factual) in the last post you said that the chem sac was a dangerous weapon and now your changing it's strength again? I have it quoted here for and saved a copy of a screen shot just in case
please don't edit this post, I have it saved and a screenshot of it and will simply edit it back to normal if this is done. |
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| Zaine | Nov 4 2017, 12:45 AM Post #19 |
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Ball of Sunshine
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1. I wasn't involved in putting it in the trait section so I wouldn't know about that, either way it makes it easier to tell which trait you have instead of 'Natural Weapon'. 2. As for your listing, it only makes it easier instead of having to find a needle in a haystack each time. Less time spent deciphering your app means less time you need to spend waiting for mods to be approved in future, etc. 3. I've read your genome PM when you first sent it. So let me ask again. How does it affect your character ICly. As in, does it amp her stats somehow? does she sprout wings? would she need a technique for it. Do the adaptations last forever or does it only last in a single thread if given the time to adapt (10 posts), and after threads they lose their adaptations permanently until forced to readapt later on. I just want you to explain it a bit better please. I never said I wasn't fine with it, but I can't approve it unless I can know for certain what it can do. 4. Bodily Resistance - Being highly resistant to 5 separate elemental effects is over the top even as a dangerous ability, so I'm going to ask you to limit the elements down to 2. This means two per dangerous trait. 5. Yes, I did say that. This is a decision we've reached after deciding that being able to do 3 potent things with one ability is too strong even for dangerous. When we approved your trait, we even stated that discretion would be used for what would pass for a strong and dangerous ability. Please can you also mention how the gas is being secreted if it's apparently from all over your body, like is there a needle somewhere or some sort of nozzle or does it just leave through it's skin. Sosina, I understand that you are frustrated with this, but I would appreciate if you did not insult me by assuming that I would stoop to such a thing as editing a message just to pretend I'm right. |
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| Sosina | Nov 4 2017, 01:38 AM Post #20 |
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The sleepiest Doo you know
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I never said YOU would edit it first of all, that was a general statement, from my past experiences many staffs cannot handle any negative things when it comes to critique, so I simply issued a blanket statement. from what I understand Scarlet has informed you what it does, if ether of you want to edit it in go ahead, you know what it is and you guys make a repost of the app anyway, I am sure adding that info to the app isn't beyond your capabilities though I have a feeling it's beyond what you WANT to do.... As for the chemicals, pours in the skin, small vents in the Carapace. can be exhaled from the mouth and nose, you get the Idea, didn't think it would need explanation considering it says on the ability [from any point on the body] but meh....what ever.... as I asked Scarlet, and I will ask now...will this "goal post" be moved the moment I gain the ability to get the weapons? or will it happen before the app is approved?... also everyone says "potent" if I recall it was a 10 point cost organ for each element when I first got it (which was described to me as moderate in strength on it's own) and now it was increased to 50 for a reason I don't understand (on Nola) but apparently that doesn't matter in the long run....honestly I question a lot about the way this has been handled and it has left a bad taste in my mouth regarding staff as a whole... As it appears that no suggestions and only rejection and denial of things are all staff does on things...very well I will reduce them, as demanded by staff (as a request can be denied and worked to reach a compromise, a compromise from one side is a demand). I hope for a swift reply but I don't hold my breath with the speed things have been handled as of late....or the manner in which they have been handled.... |
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| Zaine | Nov 4 2017, 01:54 AM Post #21 |
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Ball of Sunshine
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I can more than gladly work things out with you, but not when you choose to respond in such a disrespectful manner. Whether what you said was a blanket statement or not, you realize how someone can misinterpret that when you're only talking to one person, namely me. I am trying or was trying to sort your application out and make everything work out to the best of what would be allowed, but as you have been unnecessarily rude during the process of that, I see no reason why I have to do anything anymore. Until you apologize for the rude things you have said, as well as the earlier insult you made, then there is nothing else that is to be said here. This app will not move any further until then. |
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| Scarlet | Nov 4 2017, 09:00 PM Post #22 |
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1/2 all of the systematic issues have been gone through and edited properly. |
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| Zaine | Nov 5 2017, 03:21 AM Post #23 |
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2/2 Approval. This character has been accepted and will be relocated to its proper sub-forum. A moderator will re-post your character in the archives shortly. |
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