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The Story so far...; original topic by Raine
Topic Started: Jul 25 2012, 08:35 PM (267 Views)
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STORY FOUND HERE

Alright, so it's rough and missing a lot, but here's a basic idea of the story that I've sorta come up with. It's only a draft so far so things will definitely change. I'd like some opinions and comments about it from everyone~! :D

Here's a few things that's popped up in it which I like but you're welcome to point out anything wrong with them:

To go with the themes of life and death, there's also a theme about family. The protag's parents passed away a few years ago, so the bond the siblings share is a very deep one.

Orpheus Industries isn't entirely bad. The company has helped advance the region and improve infrastructure and people's lives. At the same time, there's internal strife within the company that not everyone knows about.

Please read through this and post anything you think of! I haven't really taken into consideration the limits we have for the game, but I thought it best to present an interesting story first with lots of stuff that we can gradually chip away at until we get what we need within reason of those limits. I also haven't finished it entirely, especially what will eventually happen in the lead-up to the fight with Necrobra. That's why I'm hoping for more opinions on what you guys think would be the best option.
Edited by QKNC, Aug 22 2012, 10:22 PM.
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Raine

So I've done a bit more thinking about the story and this is something interesting I thought of. I was thinking about something for the project's storyline, but I don't know if it's too defined or not since I want a story that is open to interpretation. It's an idea based off a Godzilla movie of all things and also Watership Down... XD

Firstly, the inspiration:

So in the Godzilla movie this guy who fought in the war was saved from being killed by Godzilla. Over the years he began to see Godzilla as a personal friend, having a special link with him. Later on when Godzilla is attacking a place, he decides to go and see his friend to thank him or whatever. However, when he goes onto the roof of this building Godzilla merely looks at him then kills him like he's nothing. I thought that was really interesting for some reason as Godzilla isn't so much a creature but a force of nature. I think that's something I want Necrobra and Prismambi to be.

At the same time, when I was reading Tales of Watership Down I found that quote I put in the script about death not being cruel and that (the actual quote is: "The Black Rabbit inspired a terrible, indescribable awe; helplessness and the fear of endless darkness. But he is not wicked, evil or cruel."), also a force of nature. And in the first Watership Down book Hazel (the chief rabbit) asks Lord Frith (the sun and creator) to make a bargain - his life for that of his warren's. Frith replies and says "There is not a day or night that a doe offers her life for her kittens, or some honest captain of Owsla, his life for his chief. But there is no bargain: what is, is what must be.".

I kind of want the main CEO to not be afraid of death. He sees it something he has a connection with, but in the end it's a force of nature far beyond his control and is killed for it (or the other CEO in trying to protect him). When one of the CEOs, or maybe the player, gets to Prismambi they try to make a bargain to bring back the dead but is met with the same sort of reply as I said before. I was thinking that the CEO that approaches Necrobra may have had a brush with death in his past but was saved thanks to an unknown miracle. He presumes this to be Necrobra and the reason he seeks it out is merely to befriend and thank it.

I may make it more vague than that though so it's open to interpretation. But one of the reasons it seems like the evil CEO is "evil" is that he's become obsessive and maybe even a bit arrogant since he thinks that he's somewhat immortal thanks to that initial brush with death.
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That is a really cool idea... but it may be really tough to do since pokemon games aren't exactly character driven. And trying to make ours more character driven could result in a long, boring plotline similar to D/P/Pt
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Raine

That's why I plan on making it vague so people can leave it open to their own interpretations. It won't go into the level of detail about why or how with people doing long-winded explanations, it'll just have it shown in the way people speak to each other. After all, the CEO is a busy man and doesn't have time for speeches.
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Sister, Good CEO, and protagonist talking:

Sister:"[Bad CEO] is evil isn't he?"
Good CEO: "No, he's just a little dillusional from his many close calls with death."

Something like that?
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Raine

Hm, perhaps. Maybe if we're able to do the scene where they get led out of HQ after confronting Grant and the Evil CEO on the issue of hiring Grant the President can say something?

Sister: "I still don't get why Grant would work for such a jerk!"
Prez: "He's the arrogant sort sometimes, yes, but he still does good work. I'm lucky to have someone in the company like him. Well, actually, he's the lucky one - I heard he had some sort of accident when he was younger. That might be what pushed him to become the individual he is now."

Later on when the Evil CEO is standing in front of Necrobra he can say something like "Lord Necrobra! I came here to thank you - to thank you for your graciousness! Without you, I wouldn't be here today. You are the reason I've-"

That could be when Necrobra kills him. It's vague enough that the player can make their own assumption I think?
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I like that.
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Raine

:D Awesome, because I'd love to do a Nuzlocke comic/story of this myself one day.
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I think it sounds good :>

To clarify, the Evil Ceo dying would happen at the part of the story that says Grim Barracks, right? (in the story file up there, I mean)
Edited by QKNC, Aug 22 2012, 10:21 PM.
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Raine

Yeah, that's it. I'm just considering how we establish a relationship between the good and bad CEOs in order to have the good one be devastated enough to offer his life in exchange for the evil one's in front of Prismambi.

I think we should also give them names because I'm getting confused.
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I think they have names... but they're somewhere in the old site.
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Raine

I can't remember them at all. =/ Maybe we should pick new ones?
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So... I went back find the names and discovered that the good CEO is named Jackson and the bad CEO is Richards.
Other suggestions were Ben and Mal.
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Raine

I think we had Jack as a name suggestion for the male protag. How about something like Hawke instead?
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That works... is it for the good CEO or the protag?
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Raine

Good CEO should be Hawke. It feels vaguely ominous somehow although he turns out to be a truly good guy.
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