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My theater sketch; Hope you like it...
Topic Started: Aug 30 2006, 12:31 AM (328 Views)
Brookworm
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(not sure if this belongs in Lubber's Hole)

I was given an assignment to write a short sketch of about three pages for theater. Maximum three characters, and it needs a conflict in it. I was sitting in class when it came to me. As soon as I hurried back to the dorm, I typed it out. I'm not quite finished, I need to finish the last paragraph.

I'd love your comments about this, I tend to be insecure when I write!

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Stage lights on. Brook enters, walks to computer desk sitting center stage. Brook sits on desk chair, a thoughtful look on her face.

Brook: So I’ve got to write this script for my theater class. Ok. Let me clear out my head. (Wiggles arms and shakes head. Cracks her fingers.) Good. Now I can write…”The Perfect Play.”(She looks off into the distance, then returns.)

Ok, topic. Let’s see…I’ll make the title (typing) “Forbidden Love at (insert college name here).” Characters…A handsome senior, we’ll call him Frederick…

(Frederick enters stage right and stands front left of Brook’s computer.)

Brook: …falls in love with a beautiful freshman girl named Isabella.

(Isabella enters stage left, stands front right of Brook’s computer.)

Brook: Now, the plot. (Drums fingers on desk. Light bulb in head goes on, “aha!” moment. Brook rapidly types as she thinks out loud.) Frederick and Isabella were from opposite worlds. Frederick was a star running-back on the football team (Frederick pantomimes throwing a football, making poses, and smiling). His father was a very successful businessman in Downtown Greenville, owner of a huge sign-making company. Frederick could have any girl he wanted with a snap of the billfold. (Brook and Frederick both snap fingers at the same time, Brook engrossed in her computer and Frederick grinning into the audience. Brook thinks for a moment, then changes her mind.) Nah, more like he could have any girl he wanted with a charming, disarming smile. (They both smile. Brook nods) Good. (types) Now, Isabella was a shy clarinet player in the marching band. (Isabella pantomimes playing a clarinet.) She was scraping by, working two jobs to pay for her education. (Isabella wipes her brow, exhausted.) Her good looks were hidden behind her long, unkempt hair and her glasses. (Isabella and Brook shake their hair into their face.) The two future lovers passed by each other daily. (Frederick and Isabella walk around not looking at each other.) They were trapped, each in their own world, never speaking to each other, true love caught behind the mask that society forces upon us all! (During this sentence, Brook becomes more and more passionate, finally rising from her chair and raising her fist. Frederick and Isabella have stopped and are staring at her. Brook grins sheepishly and sits down.) All right. One day, Isabella is card-swiper in the Todd Dining Hall. Frederick enters with his “pals” and gives her his card, still talking to his friends. Isabella swipes the card and nothing happens. She swipes it again. Still nothing. (Frederick and Isabella play out action Brook describes.) Now for their dialogue.

(Brook is typing the dialogue, mouthing the words as Frederick and Isabella speak.)
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Isabella: (mutters)

Frederick: Hey, um, you wanna give me my card back now? I’m kinda hungry.

Isabella: Something’s wrong with your card.

Frederick: (with an attitude) Yeah right. You’re probably just sliding the card wrong.

Isabella: No, I don’t think so. The machine’s been fine all day.

Frederick: (exasperated) Well, just try it again. (He looks behind her into the dining hall where his friends must be sitting. He waves. Looks back at Isabella.) Are you still messing up?

Isabella: (flustered) No, no I don’t think so…

(Frederick stomps on the floor. Isabella bursts into tears, but immediately stops. Brook has stopped typing and mouthing words.)

Isabella: Now hold up just a minute. There is no way my character would “burst into tears.” She’s way too strong for that, having to work two jobs and all.

Frederick: Yeah, and no human being is this mean. I mean, guys have feelings too!

(By now they have made their way to where Brook is sitting, gawking at her characters. She composes herself.)
Brook: Well, it’s still my first draft. Who asked you guys anyway? I’m the writer here.

Frederick: Who says? (Enunciated, Takes on professor persona) Some theorists believe that “a play is simply something to be produced and that the artists who create a stage presentation are its true authors.”

Isabella: (similar style as Frederick) Yes. Also “that each audience member may create his or her own reading of a production. The spectator is the author.”

Brook: (On the offensive) Well just who are you two to say so? I made you both, I can do with you as I very well like! Watch this!

(Brook bends over her keyboard, eyes wide and hands flying. As she types, Frederick and Isabella begin to do crazy moves, hopping on one foot, flapping their arms, jumping and jerking around, making chicken noises, etc. Brook ends her typing with a grand gesture and stands triumphantly, fists on her hips. Frederick and Isabella stop moving and breathe heavily, bent double.)

Brook: There, now, what do have to say for yourselves?
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(The two look at each other, slowly straighten. They begin to speak quickly and passionately, almost rapid-fire delivery but subdued a bit. As they speak, Brook is pushed back into her seat, head tennis-balling between the two. Her gaze eventually falls on the computer screen.)

Frederick: I think you’re a mediocore writer.

Isabella: I think your plot is unoriginal.

Frederick: It needs tragedy.

Isabella: It needs comedy.

Frederick: It’s crying out for political injustice! Throw in some action!

Isabella: It’s should definitely have some musical numbers! And plenty of villains!

Frederick: Emotion!

Isabella: Exposition!

Frederick: Opposition!

Isabella: And opportunities!

Together: (With outstretched arms and uplifted faces) The perfect play!

(A pause. Brook begins to type.)
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NB2000
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*stands up and applauds*

I loved it Brook, it's very good!

:hug:
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xXmadameparleyOo
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Wretch
*applauds* Yay Brooky! I Love it!
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k-con
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Hi Brook! :wave:

I recently started taking writing classes so I know how hard it is. I really enjoyed it! :biggrin:


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pirategirl0306
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:lol: I love it, Brook. Very creative. I'd watch that sketch!
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mttomb
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Scallywag
I loved it, Brook! You needn't be insecure about your writing! That was far more original than most things I read, and more entertaining, too. :yes:
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ElvenLight
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Very good Brook! You kept me entertained the whole time! It was funny and very creative!
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Explosive Calm
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:worship: Awesomeness, that was really good, and it made me laugh too, bravo! :D
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Very cool and very funny!
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