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[A]Andrew Grove.; [Accepted] Finished.
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Topic Started: 30 May 2015, 04:37 AM (779 Views)
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Kristachii5
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30 May 2015, 04:37 AM
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Trainer Profile

Character Name: Andrew Grove. Nickname: Drew. Gender: Male. Age: 22. Birthdate: 13th of August / Year 179. Trainer Class/Occupation: Private Detective. Dialogue Color: #7E587E Hometown: Wisteur Town.
Appearance Height: 5'9 (175cm) Weight: 184 lbs (83kg)
Hair Color & Style: Drew's hair is naturally a dark brown, commonly mistaken for black. He swore as he aged, once he finds a silver hair he will die his hair black. It is kept in short strands, never growing longer than his shoulders or over his ears. He mostly leaves it down in a messy, scrungy look, only tossing it around for some stylish effect. When undercover or in an interview, however, he does pull out some gel and styles his hair up in a spiked or messy bedhead look, but with some neat effect, making sure his face is visible with no stray strands sticking out.
Eyes: Andrew's eyes are considerably dark from far away, but up close the colours are shown. Around the outside of his Iris is a dark blue, almost black. It gradually lightens into a dark teal, which continues to get lighter toward the pupil. Around the outside of the pupil, a saturated topaz flares out. His eyes are a classic almond shape, with a natural lift at the outer corners. His eyebrows are thin and though he doesn't admit it, he does sometimes go to his sisters to help pluck them in line. | Clothing/Accessories:Northern/Cooler ClimatesWhen in colder areas, Andrew wears a thick jacket with a wooly hood, made with genuine Mareep wool. Colored a light brown from Urasang hide, the jacket is reasonably flexible and considerably warm. His pants are his usual pair of denim jeans and Bouffalant-hide boots to match his jacket.
Warmer ClimatesAndrew keeps his thick jacket in his backpack when traveling through canyons, savannahs and warmer climates and areas. His boots are swapped for sneakers. His pants are also traded for a pair of black, knee-high shorts.
ConsistentAround all times of the year and everywhere in the world, Andrew can be seen with his personalized dog tag chain, embedded with 'Drew Grove' and his date of birth. Whether warm or cold, he can sometimes be seen with bandages over his wrists and arms, due to common injuries he gains from his travels. His shirts don't vary much through the year, mostly made from string-cotton from bugs like Spinarak, Wurmple and Scatterbug. Each with a different colour, ranging from purple to green and grey. |
 General Appearance: He grew up shaving every visible hair on his face. Though once he got into his twenty's, he began to shave everything but his sides, giving him side-burns. He does tend to work out, jogging whenever he can and if he has any spare time in a town or city, he wont hesitate to spend an hour or two at the local gym. He has some muscles, but not anything to gloat about. From the way he stands, anyone would say Andrew is a fit man with no anxiety issues, as he doesn't sway or have a noticeable hunchback. His head, however, is held forward from his shoulders, showing a restless, yet curious mind.
He has a medium-tan skin tone, due to being outdoors often. On his upper left arm he has a tattoo of a tribal flame, replicating his mother's tattoo, although hers is on her right arm. She originally got it to show her love for fire-type Pokemon, but it's meaning changed once Andrew got his own, showing the strong bond they share. He tried getting his elder sisters to get the same tattoo, though they were worried about scarring their skin for life. His father got a tribal thunderbolt on the back of his left shoulder, as he favors Electric type over Fire. |
Personality and History Personality: Andrew has grown into a responsible, young man with some crude humor whenever the situation calls for it. Because of his independence and responsible attitude, he has grown very confident in his abilities and is most comfortable when he is in charge. This is because he feels more freedom, not having to live under anyone Else's rules or be limited by their delays. However, being confident in his own abilities also makes him a bit arrogant, in the sense that he gets defensive when criticized or corrected. He has spent years pursuing one goal. To become a detective, following his father's footsteps. He grew up distant from his father, feeling enviousness toward him and his analysis abilities. Andrew always heard him come home after solving a case, having a celebratory beer. Or returning from a tough case and he's beat. Going with him onto the field Drew heard people say how great his father was, seeing things they walked passed a hundred times. Andrew always aspired to make his father happy, by becoming a better detective than he could be. Although he has confidence in his abilities, Andrew continuously compares himself with his father. He always sets his mind to think 'What would he do?', questioning every movement, every action he makes, to ensure he outsmarts his father. He has this mindset because he wants to succeed in life, going as far as to exceed his father.
He wanted to see things that nobody else could see, to help people and Pokemon who had been suffering for years. Andrew wanted to make a difference in the world. Being born with such an analytical father, he was constantly challenged growing up, to look into the finer details in every aspect of his daily life. This has given him an intelligent mind and great attention to detail. The long years he spent training shows his great focus, patience and sense of perseverance, ready to wait to see any task to the end. On the other hand, his time spent training and studying has given him a high level of built-up stress. To deal with this weight, Andrew tried going to the gym (no pun intended). Though after one particular incident when his stress was shown through anger and he punched one of the wall-length mirrors, he was banned from the local gym and needed a new way to relieve his stress. He never enjoyed the idea of drinking in the afternoons, seeing his father drink extensively whenever he dealt with a problematic case. Drew never liked the taste of alcohol, claiming the bitterness is like a cutting poison. He witnesses his father having hangovers the next morning and questions why anyone would go through that pain at the price of an hour of blurred good times. 'Good times' you don't even remember the next day. Another way to relieve stress in the modern day would be to watch television or play Video Games, however, his family never had any video games for him to use. His parents believed every technical object was just a cheap way to escape the real world. So he picked up smoking. His hand was shaking when he lit his first cigarette, knowing there may be no going back, though promising only one a day. To this day he has kept his promise. He continues to go to the gym and jog whenever he can, keeping his stamina as high as possible. Keeping to one smoke each day, he isn't given any serious set-back when it comes to his day-to-day life.
However, because he smokes simply due to stress, it unintentionally creates more stress for him. As he smokes, the nicotine constricts the blood vessels in his brain, increases his heart rate and blood pressure. This, in turn, gives him migraines and added dizziness. Whenever he reaches for a cigarette, knowing he is limited to one each day, he does remind himself and go to find someone else to do to clear his mind. This can range from a few minutes outside to get clear air, to a small nap to even just a snack.
Because of his independent, confident attitude, Drew has a sense of arrogance. However, because of his occupation as a detective, he always tries to connect with the people he talks to. He can be calming, but ultimately his appearance makes him hard to approach. Because of this, he is often thrown into awkward situations, causing him to grow with flexibility, able to act accordingly in various situations. Andrew's adaptable and confident mind has given him self-strength, which allows him to be uncontrolled from his own beliefs and the beliefs of others. Growing up with the strays brought in with his mother helped him understand that bad things do happen in the world. He experienced changes, with the different pets coming and going to new homes, and realized that not all people are happy, safe house-keepers. These aspects of his mind and lifestyle has given him an open-mind. Particularly the homeless strays he helped raise has given him the sense that everyone needs help from time-to-time. Drew has grown up with the mindset of being someone to help those being victimized to get something back in return for all the crap handed to them. Andrew wants to see those who caused pain and suffering to get what they deserve. He wants to help those less fortunate, people and Pokemon alike.
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History: Born into a family of five with two older sisters, Andrew grew into a feminine household, brought up with dolls and make-up around every corner. As a young toddler, he could often play the part of 'Baby' when the siblings would carry him around the house and pretend to cook for themselves, force-feeding him. His parents worked in the local Police Station, his mother working with the 'dog squad' and voluntarily helping out with raising stray animals and Pokemon. His father worked as a Crime-Scene Investigator, gathering clues from local crimes to help solve cases. Helping his mother raising the strays had given him some small connection to the Pokemon world, providing him with knowledge about the various species that live around his area alone. Though these strays were mostly pets cast-aside, such as Stunky, Purrloin, Delcatty and other cute felines, or wild creatures wandering from Lumina Bridge, like Hoppip, Zigzagoon or the occasionally lost Psyduck.
As Andrew got older, starting school, he felt a bit of freedom, being in a separate class from his siblings. He began to find his own independence, talking freely with classmates and, with more growing confidence, he grew into a class-clown. He went through his elementary years playing pranks on teachers, talking back smartly and generally being a 'devil-spawn'. Despite his bad reputation he still did his work, only creating a crowd once his test was complete and he began to bug the students around him who were still trying to finish. His grades remained averaging As and Bs. If whenever he got a C or lower, he would punish himself and re-read his tests or assignments to pin-point his mistakes. The group of friends he would sit with were mainly those who were easily entertained and distracted. They weren't sitting in the back of the class to whisper the answers or tease any one child in particular. They sat together in the back to laugh at Andrew's antics.
Once he gained maturity, heading into his teens and Secondary School, he got curious about his parent's occupations and took up afternoons and weekends with his mother on her voluntary work, working with stray Pokemon. Once he hit the age of 13 years, he had his heart-set on joining his parents in Police-work. He had worked to get his Trainer's license (though he struggled at first and couldn't retrieve it completely until his 14th birthday) and began joining his father in the crime-scenes, helping with basic detective assistance.
While he struggled to get his license he felt a little disheartened, but no anxiety attacks followed. He knew his main dream wasn't to be a trainer, but to be a detective, so he pushed on with little wavering. His sisters did harass him from time-to-time as a light joke, so he ignored them for the most-part, knowing what they said were harmless words. Helping his father on fieldwork, he didn't do anything too extensive, as he was a young teen still and just volunteering. He mostly kept to himself and followed his father, who was the only familiar face. Andrew's dad would purposely ignore things in the open, so Drew could spot them and ask if they were necessary to the case. Sometimes just a tug on his father's sleeve or nod of his head.
At age 15 he gained other voluntary jobs, watching Video Surveillance, Crisis Response Teams and sometimes the Neighborhood Watch. Being given these jobs were always looked as a step forward in his career. Whether he was filling out paperwork with his father, or learning about new Pokemon species with his mum, Drew always looked at his long-term goal. After two years of constant voluntary work, he was offered a part-time job as a Detective, for which he had to go through rigorous tests and earn an Advanced Diploma of Public Safety, which was achieved when he aged 21.
Through these years he never gave a moment's thought of being partnered with anyone romantically, despite the many dates he was set-up on by his sisters, 'supporting' them on double-dates. He was told constantly 'A guy with your appeal and intelligence.. It's unbelievable you're still single!', but he only focused solely on furthering his career as a detective. His mindset was achieved in his schooling years and he has clutched onto it for a number of years. Money is more important than a stable family. He knew he needed to get a job first and worry about romances later. He also knew, with his years of pent-up voluntary work, it would be quicker to go for a job while he can, than to throw away years of working hard, for someone he could depend on. Growing up with his father who had spent special holidays in the office or out on a crime scene also gave him an idea of the long hours he'd sacrifice if he were to pursue his goal. Not only would he be spending time where it's most needed, but energy as well.
As he was given the job, he was advised to receive a partner to help solve his crimes. Once given the choice of a human or Pokemon, he spared no moment to chose a Pokemon. He knew with his many years of training he had basic human contact and communication skills, meanwhile Pokemon are easier to talk to as they listen with little complaints or reflex to argue back. Upon this choice, he suggested being a Private Detective, so he could be able to travel the world as a Pokemon trainer while also having an occupation that allows him to be hired at any given moment, giving him the money he needs. He had no relationship to worry about with long distances and time away from home. He could spend all his time gaining all the money he needed, which was a big plus for him and so his journey began. |
Inventory Dians:  1,646 Items: 2x Pokéball Subway Ticket x1 (Oraclair Town - Melka Village) Subway Ticket x1 (Sangproctor City - Kotoba City) Key Items: PokéDex  Journal  Holocaster
Advancement | Total Points: 36 |
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| Tier | Traits |
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| Tier Zero | Seeing the Sights: (3/15) Making Friends: (12/15) Nursing: (11/15) Parental Instincts: (1/20) TLC: (3/25) To Be The Best: (6/15) |
Pokemon
Total EXP Gained: 15
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 Tynamo Caught at Level 5
Dialogue Color: #486180 Nickname: Taser. Gender: Male. Type: Electric. Ability: Levitate. Height: 0’ 8” Weight: .7 lbs. Health: Scrawny. EXP Rate: Slow. EXP Gauge: (13/15) EXP Gained: 6 Level: 7 Division: D8 Total Stats: 77
- Attack: 19 (25%)
- Defense: 11
- Sp. Attack: 13
- Sp. Defense: 12
- Speed: 22 (28%)
Vitamins Used: None
| Moveset: 1. Charge Beam 1. Spark 1. Tackle 1. Thunder Wave
Unique Moves: -
Item: None |  Purrloin Caught at Level 6
Dialogue Color: #6A287E Nickname: Spotter. Gender: Male. Type: Dark. Ability: Limber. Height: 1’ 4” Weight: 22.3 lbs. Health: Scrawny. EXP Rate: Medium Fast. EXP Gauge: (14/15) EXP Gained: 5 Level: 7 Division: D8 Total Stats: 79 (77 + 2)
- Attack: 19 (17 + 2)
- Defense: 11
- Sp. Attack: 14
- Sp. Defense: 11
- Speed: 24 (31%)
Vitamins Used: None
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| Moveset: 1. Scratch 3. Growl
Unique Moves: -
Item: - Kasib Berry |  Growlithe Caught at Level 5
Dialogue Color: #E9AB17 Nickname: Unit. Gender: Male. Type: Fire. Ability: Flash Fire. Height: 2’ 4” Weight: 41.9 lbs. Health: Low. EXP Rate: Slow. EXP Gauge: (11/12) EXP Gained: 4 Level: 6 Division: D8 Total Stats: 66
- Attack: 14 (21%)
- Defense: 13
- Sp. Attack: 17 (26%)
- Sp. Defense: 10
- Speed: 12
Vitamins Used: None
| Moveset: 1. Bite 1. Roar 6. Ember
Unique Moves: -
Item: - Rawst Berry
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PC Box: Stored Pokemon (NONE)
Journal | Topic/Thread | EXP Gained | Dian Obtained | Additional Notes | | His Mission: A New Beginning. | + 1 EXP | + 37 | - Andrew is currently in Wisteur Town.
- Andrew is awaiting to get his partner Pokemon.
- Topic is Incomplete...
AP Gained
- Seeing the Sights, 3
- Making Friends, 1
| | A Chilling Start. | + 6 EXP | + 856 | - Andrew began in Verdant Highlands
- Andrew encountered a wild Purrloin!
- The Purrloin retreated!
- Andrew encountered a wild Growlithe
- Andrew captured the wild Purrloin (-1 Pokeball)
- Andrew attempted to capture the wild Growlithe, but it failed! (-1 Pokeball)
- Andrew captured the wild Growlithe! (-1 Pokeball)
- ...To be continued!
AP Gained
- Making Friends, 5
- Nursing, 1
- Maternal Instincts, 1
| | Fire & Ice. | + 1 EXP | + 24 | - Andrew is currently in Cascadia City.
- Andrew bonds with Unit a little,
- Topic is incomplete...
AP Gained
| | Shortcuts ! | | - 1400 | +1 Subway Ticket (Oraclair Town - Melka Village) +1 Subway Ticket (Tribule Karsts - Kotoba City) | | The Melting Ice. | + 7 EXP | + 1,129 | - Andrew arrived at Oraclair Town.
- Andrew’s Purrloin stole a Kasib Berry from Dio Explor and prompted the latter’s Pokémon to assault Purrloin (+1 Kasib Berry)
- The next morning they initiated a battle.
- Growlithe fainted to Dio's Corsola and was rendered unable to battle.
- Andrew healed Growlithe and ran into his client, Gerard Scearing who made a scene.
- In his anger, Gerard sent out Comfey and Mudbray. Andrew sent out Growlithe and Dio sent out Corsola.
- Andrew's Growlithe fainted and was replaced by Tynamo.
- Andrew forfeited the battle and left Dio to finish the fight.
- The three trainers heal their Pokemon.
- ...To be continued!
AP Gained
- Making Friends, 6
- To Be The Best, 6
- Nursing, 10
Also obtained x1 Kasib Berry! |
Edited by DrakeX, 30 Jun 2018, 04:16 AM.
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The Detective
 Andrew Grove Taser, Tynamo Male • Level 7 • (13/15) Ability: Levitate Health: Scrawny Dialogue: #486180
Attack: 19 (25%) Defense: 11 Sp. Attack: 13 Sp. Defense: 12 Speed: 22 (28%) |  Spotter, Purrloin Male • Level 7 • (14/15) Ability: Limber Health: Scrawny Dialogue: #6A287E
Attack: 19 (17 + 2) Defense: 11 Sp. Attack: 14 Sp. Defense: 11 Speed: 24 (31%)
(+10%) |  Unit, Growlithe Male • Level 6 • (11/12) Ability: Flash Fire Health: Low Dialogue: #E9AB17
Attack: 14 (21%) Defense: 13 Sp. Attack: 17 (26%) Sp. Defense: 10 Speed: 12 | | Empty | Empty | Empty |
The Rising Star
 Emily BurnetteAge: 14 Years. Dians: 254 Dialogue: #C6A939 EXP Gained: 9 Last known location: Aurmouth City, South Godai Current Thread: None. Roll!: None. |
 Litwick Female • Level 9 • (15/18) Ability: Flame Body Health: Low Dialogue: #6CA0C8
Attack: 11 (12%) Defense: 20 Sp. Attack: 27 Sp. Defense: 23 Speed: 9 (10%) | Empty | Empty | | Empty | Empty | Empty |
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Kristachii5
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1 Jun 2015, 04:57 PM
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This Character is Complete and ready for Application.
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The Detective
 Andrew Grove Taser, Tynamo Male • Level 7 • (13/15) Ability: Levitate Health: Scrawny Dialogue: #486180
Attack: 19 (25%) Defense: 11 Sp. Attack: 13 Sp. Defense: 12 Speed: 22 (28%) |  Spotter, Purrloin Male • Level 7 • (14/15) Ability: Limber Health: Scrawny Dialogue: #6A287E
Attack: 19 (17 + 2) Defense: 11 Sp. Attack: 14 Sp. Defense: 11 Speed: 24 (31%)
(+10%) |  Unit, Growlithe Male • Level 6 • (11/12) Ability: Flash Fire Health: Low Dialogue: #E9AB17
Attack: 14 (21%) Defense: 13 Sp. Attack: 17 (26%) Sp. Defense: 10 Speed: 12 | | Empty | Empty | Empty |
The Rising Star
 Emily BurnetteAge: 14 Years. Dians: 254 Dialogue: #C6A939 EXP Gained: 9 Last known location: Aurmouth City, South Godai Current Thread: None. Roll!: None. |
 Litwick Female • Level 9 • (15/18) Ability: Flame Body Health: Low Dialogue: #6CA0C8
Attack: 11 (12%) Defense: 20 Sp. Attack: 27 Sp. Defense: 23 Speed: 9 (10%) | Empty | Empty | | Empty | Empty | Empty |
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Bones
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1 Jun 2015, 09:17 PM
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Alrighty Kris! You know how it works here; let’s begin -
First off, for his ”General Appearance”, perhaps another sentence or two about how he walks, his stature or posture? Or even how people view him on first impressions and if he is impressionable or not? So on and so forth.
Preferably I would ask you not to bullet point his likes/dislike and try and incorporate them into Andrew’s ”Personality” in paragraph form. While we’re on that topic, although I love his personality, I feel you can add in much much more! Constantly ask “why” and “how” when you reread through this. Why is he most comfortable when he is in charge? Does it give him a sense of power when he can control others? Does he feel more free that he’s on top of the ranks and thus does not feel limited by others? Is it because then he can make his own rules and are not bound by other people’s rules? Iunno! Not my character! Why does he want to be a detective? Is it simply just to follow his father? Just because someone is born having these traits doesn’t make them so! Is it because he likes catching criminals? Solving cases? Seeing things others can’t normally see? Puzzles perhaps? The thrill of doing things in secret? Being manipulative for good reasons? So on and so forth. Why does he choose smoking as his way of stress relieving and not any other activities such as drinking, kickboxing, gaming, or swimming and whatever? Why specifically smoking? How does this specific activity out of everything else make him feel? Not only that but what about his views on mankind? What are his flaws? I can only see one compared to his plethora of others. What are the side effect of smoking on a person’s physical abilities if he were to give chase to a runner? How does that affect him on a mental and psychological process? What is his view on life? Mankind? Pokemonkind? Any morals and beliefs? A life model perhaps? Relationships with other people? So on an so forth. Don’t be afraid to really flush out the details.
The same can be said about his ”History” though lovely, is lacking quite a bit of detail to compliment his ”Personality”. In what says throughout his life did he acquire these traits? What obstacles, experiences, or hurdles did he have to go through in order to obtain this personal and emotional growth as described in his Personality? Thought you’ve explained what he did, you didn’t quite explain how he felt and acquired these life experiences along the way. For example, how was his relationship with his parents? What struggles did he go through? How was he intelligent? What did he do in school? What about socialization? What about friends? How did he get out there? If not, then why? In what ways did he shape his confidence? How and what did he do in order to feed his intelligence more than others? What other things did he go through especially as a childhood and teenage years? How did he feel when he struggled to get his trainer’s license? What psychological and cognitive process did he go through as he continued to help his father in “basic detective assistance”? How did he feel as he obtained these jobs? How did he feel when he was constantly told “so and so” about his romantic life? Why did he not care and focused “solely on his career”? If he never gave it much thought - then why? Why not? What other struggles did he go through to build up a reputation? No one is born automatically smart with goals in life - they go through different worldly views and experiences with self growth in order to see the path ahead of them. So what was Andrew’s? Don’t get me wrong, this is good! But it’s almost like a grocery list of what is there and not “why” you have to buy these - if that makes any sense haha!
That's it! Everything else looks fine. You know the drill once anything is changed. Good luck; you got this in the bag! ♥
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Sonak Paetdee
EXP Gained: 801 | Dians: 24,372 |
Age: 26
Height: 5' 9"
Location: Skytouch Forest
Mental State: Nostalgic
Classification: Physician
Main Features: Half-shaved hair | Tattoo | Book
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Kian Conrad 
Kian Conrad
EXP Gained: 741 | Dians: 114 |
Age: 27
Height: 6' 2"
Location: Safari Zone
Mental State: Doubtful
Classification: Returning Trainer
Main Features: Goggles | Cigarette | Scar
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Kristachii5
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2 Jun 2015, 12:08 AM
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Gotta admit, first seeing your comment was a bit daunting. I did struggle, but I added a small portion to his General appearance about his posture. I also added a considerable amount to his Personality and History, hoping it suffices.
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The Detective
 Andrew Grove Taser, Tynamo Male • Level 7 • (13/15) Ability: Levitate Health: Scrawny Dialogue: #486180
Attack: 19 (25%) Defense: 11 Sp. Attack: 13 Sp. Defense: 12 Speed: 22 (28%) |  Spotter, Purrloin Male • Level 7 • (14/15) Ability: Limber Health: Scrawny Dialogue: #6A287E
Attack: 19 (17 + 2) Defense: 11 Sp. Attack: 14 Sp. Defense: 11 Speed: 24 (31%)
(+10%) |  Unit, Growlithe Male • Level 6 • (11/12) Ability: Flash Fire Health: Low Dialogue: #E9AB17
Attack: 14 (21%) Defense: 13 Sp. Attack: 17 (26%) Sp. Defense: 10 Speed: 12 | | Empty | Empty | Empty |
The Rising Star
 Emily BurnetteAge: 14 Years. Dians: 254 Dialogue: #C6A939 EXP Gained: 9 Last known location: Aurmouth City, South Godai Current Thread: None. Roll!: None. |
 Litwick Female • Level 9 • (15/18) Ability: Flame Body Health: Low Dialogue: #6CA0C8
Attack: 11 (12%) Defense: 20 Sp. Attack: 27 Sp. Defense: 23 Speed: 9 (10%) | Empty | Empty | | Empty | Empty | Empty |
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2 Jun 2015, 02:01 AM
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Your General Appearance is good! That’s literally all I wanted to see haha.
And no worries, I hold everyone to the same standard, yours is actually rather short compared to everyone else. So kudos!
Anyways -
I love the edits done to his ”Personality” and all I ask is just a tiny bit more. I feel that some of these are just segments of thoughts and I don’t quite understand how his father having a celebratory beer and being tired from a tough case caused the man to psychologically distance himself away from his father? What was done because of those actions that made Andrew want to shield away from his once role model? And all the way on the bottom, why Andrew not enjoy the idea of drinking? Was it because of the social stigma associated with it? Or was it because of a bodily reaction or a mood reaction he saw that came after his actions of his father? The video games is quite randomly put in there (you don’t have to edit that but I just wanted to point it out haha) I do, however, love the delve into why he picked up smoking. But to continue, in what ways does he keep an open mind? It’s easier said than done, so what are some examples of this? I say this because there are many variations of keeping an open mind to the point where it can actually be seen as being naive or silly or even being in denial. Lastly perhaps add a sentence or two of how he views Mankind/Pokemonkind of perhaps how he feels about himself or even how he views the world? That also helps us tie together our personality and give us a base in which we can build upon.
That’s it! I’m okay with the ”History” so great job there! You know the drill when any changes have been made. ♥
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Sonak Paetdee 
Sonak Paetdee
EXP Gained: 801 | Dians: 24,372 |
Age: 26
Height: 5' 9"
Location: Skytouch Forest
Mental State: Nostalgic
Classification: Physician
Main Features: Half-shaved hair | Tattoo | Book
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Kian Conrad 
Kian Conrad
EXP Gained: 741 | Dians: 114 |
Age: 27
Height: 6' 2"
Location: Safari Zone
Mental State: Doubtful
Classification: Returning Trainer
Main Features: Goggles | Cigarette | Scar
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Kristachii5
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2 Jun 2015, 03:44 AM
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Edited. I also tried to make the 'Video Games' area flow a bit better x3
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The Detective
 Andrew Grove Taser, Tynamo Male • Level 7 • (13/15) Ability: Levitate Health: Scrawny Dialogue: #486180
Attack: 19 (25%) Defense: 11 Sp. Attack: 13 Sp. Defense: 12 Speed: 22 (28%) |  Spotter, Purrloin Male • Level 7 • (14/15) Ability: Limber Health: Scrawny Dialogue: #6A287E
Attack: 19 (17 + 2) Defense: 11 Sp. Attack: 14 Sp. Defense: 11 Speed: 24 (31%)
(+10%) |  Unit, Growlithe Male • Level 6 • (11/12) Ability: Flash Fire Health: Low Dialogue: #E9AB17
Attack: 14 (21%) Defense: 13 Sp. Attack: 17 (26%) Sp. Defense: 10 Speed: 12 | | Empty | Empty | Empty |
The Rising Star
 Emily BurnetteAge: 14 Years. Dians: 254 Dialogue: #C6A939 EXP Gained: 9 Last known location: Aurmouth City, South Godai Current Thread: None. Roll!: None. |
 Litwick Female • Level 9 • (15/18) Ability: Flame Body Health: Low Dialogue: #6CA0C8
Attack: 11 (12%) Defense: 20 Sp. Attack: 27 Sp. Defense: 23 Speed: 9 (10%) | Empty | Empty | | Empty | Empty | Empty |
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3 Jun 2015, 12:18 AM
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I also added more to his 'Eyes' section. It previously just spoke about the colours, so I added more about their shape and eyebrows.
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The Detective
 Andrew Grove Taser, Tynamo Male • Level 7 • (13/15) Ability: Levitate Health: Scrawny Dialogue: #486180
Attack: 19 (25%) Defense: 11 Sp. Attack: 13 Sp. Defense: 12 Speed: 22 (28%) |  Spotter, Purrloin Male • Level 7 • (14/15) Ability: Limber Health: Scrawny Dialogue: #6A287E
Attack: 19 (17 + 2) Defense: 11 Sp. Attack: 14 Sp. Defense: 11 Speed: 24 (31%)
(+10%) |  Unit, Growlithe Male • Level 6 • (11/12) Ability: Flash Fire Health: Low Dialogue: #E9AB17
Attack: 14 (21%) Defense: 13 Sp. Attack: 17 (26%) Sp. Defense: 10 Speed: 12 | | Empty | Empty | Empty |
The Rising Star
 Emily BurnetteAge: 14 Years. Dians: 254 Dialogue: #C6A939 EXP Gained: 9 Last known location: Aurmouth City, South Godai Current Thread: None. Roll!: None. |
 Litwick Female • Level 9 • (15/18) Ability: Flame Body Health: Low Dialogue: #6CA0C8
Attack: 11 (12%) Defense: 20 Sp. Attack: 27 Sp. Defense: 23 Speed: 9 (10%) | Empty | Empty | | Empty | Empty | Empty |
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3 Jun 2015, 01:52 AM
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Nooope
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I'm okay with this -
1/2 Approval. ♥
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Sonak Paetdee 
Sonak Paetdee
EXP Gained: 801 | Dians: 24,372 |
Age: 26
Height: 5' 9"
Location: Skytouch Forest
Mental State: Nostalgic
Classification: Physician
Main Features: Half-shaved hair | Tattoo | Book
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Kian Conrad 
Kian Conrad
EXP Gained: 741 | Dians: 114 |
Age: 27
Height: 6' 2"
Location: Safari Zone
Mental State: Doubtful
Classification: Returning Trainer
Main Features: Goggles | Cigarette | Scar
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Wremn
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4 Jun 2015, 07:18 PM
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Blerrraaaugh -fire-
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I like your changes Kris! Though if you're still worried about your character being too perfect, I'm sure you'll know what to change when you begin RPing with him. By the standards of our site, this is still a pretty impressive profile, so I will give you the other 1/2 you need! Enjoy~

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