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Trainer Profile Character Name: Nicolla LaVoie Nickname: Nike (pronounced like Nee-Kay), La-La Gender: Male Age: 20 Birthday: Feburary 27th, 180 AG Trainer Class: Muse (Essentially, a follower and lover of all forms of art.) Height: 5'6 Weight: 129 lbs Text Color: Honeydew! Hair Color & Style: Auburn in color, naturally wavy. He loves the wavy look of his own hair, letting his bangs fall down over his forehead, but very neatly styled and cropped the rest of the way around his head. Though naturally wavy, it is incredibly easy to style. He prefers the neat and clean cut look, his light, silky hair is very easy to straighten and style if he ever feels like it. Sometimes he decides to let his bangs hang down a little more and sweep just past his eye, and other times he gels them up and out of his face entirely. He's also not a stranger to putting in his own extensions if he ever want his hair to look incredibly long for some reason, though it's not often and only works with some of his many outfits. But no matter how you look at it, there's never a hair out of place, just the way he likes it. Eyes: Almond eyes that are roughly 23mm, spaced exactly one eye length apart. His left eye is a pale brown while his right is a deep blue, possessing the somewhat rare disorder known as heterochromia. He likes to keep his eyes covered by a pair of frame-less prescription glasses that he almost never takes off. Though Nike seems to always wear a smile, his eyes are a window into his mind to show you what he truly feels. They're very expressive, constantly squinting, widening, and looking every which way. However, when Nike is in a neutral state, his eyes often look sleepy, and sometimes they even close. Almost as if he's too deep in thought to keep his eyes open. Clothing/Accessories: His style consists of lots of expensive semi-formal attire like button down shirts, khakis, slacks, vests, and blazers. His favorite outfit is a black vest with gold buttons over a stark white button down shirt. This is accompanied by black slacks, black heeled shoes, and finished off with a crimson red tie. If he decides to wear something less formal, he'll probably opt for his charcoal grey sleeveless sweatshirt, with a a color that goes right up to his chin. He will usually compliment these with a pair of dark khakis and his favorite pair of sneakers, which are all black with silver designs on them. In colder weather, he wears a black leather jacket line with white fur around the neck, more slacks and more khakis, and a pair of black work boots with silver accents. In this weather he will occasionally put his hair up into a knit beanie and throw a silver scarf around his neck, but only in the worst of circumstances. In warmer weather, he wears a wide array of colored V-Necks and graphic tees, though he usually favors pastels over brighter colors. He usually accompanies these with a pair of cargo shorts, or board shorts if he's at the beach. He refuses to wear sandals so he instead wears boat shoes, his favorite pair being grey and green. As far as sleep wear goes, he likes to wear an off-white sleeveless shirt made out of charmeuse, and a pair of expensive sweatpants about two sizes too big for him. He always wears a little crescent moon charm on a silver choker chain around his neck, and an ornate silver ring on each of his middle fingers. General Appearance: The usual first impression people get when they see Nike from the first time is that he's just a very privileged, rich kid. He's lucky enough to have lived a lavish lifestyle and his clothes make sure everybody knows he's wearing the latest and greatest styles. But there's something slightly strange about Nike, some odd aura of mystery and curiosity. When you see Nike, something about him strikes you as far different from other people. Maybe it's his very petite, slender build. Maybe it's his two different colored eyes. Maybe it's the way he carries himself or the way his outfits are always perfectly put together, but this aura sort of draws people to him, as if you can't help but want to know more about him. Since he was never much into athletics and he inherited the small-boned, daintier build from his mother's side, Nike is a very small person. His natural slenderness and his low weight allows him to look much better in clothes than he does out of them, his scrawny body is something that many would even laugh at. He doesn't mind this at all though, he enjoys the way he looked in all of his clothes and he even tries not to gain any weight. He always looks like there's something on his mind, and you'll often find him looking into crowds or out at an open field with a blank stare and eyes glassed over, like he's in a trance. He walks with his head held high and every movement, every step, has a certain elegance and grace to it. Nike often wears a smile, though very slight, across his face. Just enough to let everyone know he's pleased. Image is currently being commissioned Hometown: Aurmouth City, South Godai Personality: +Intelligent +Creative +Stylish +Generous +Witty +Talented +Happy +Observant/Analytic Well, let's start off with the good. Nike has been smart from a young age, and he doesn't mind showing it. At every twist and turn he does everything he can to express his intellect, whether it be with fun facts and useless knowledge or how fast he does math in his head. He makes sure every word he says is carefully planned out and all of his sentences are perfectly woven together with the proper words pulled from his immense vocabulary to send the exact message he wants to. Having spent most of his life studying, he remembers plenty of facts from the textbooks he read, making him extremely book smart. His intelligence however stops almost entirely when it comes to street smarts, having lived a very sheltered life. Though he's never fully been tested, Nike's memory seems eidetic and his family and friends recognize it as such. He only further enhances this by linking facts to images and vice versa, using such methods as remembering what picture a certain piece of information in a text book was next to so he can remember it for a test. Nike is also incredibly creative with a muse that never seems to run out. Though he has trouble expressing his feelings in traditional ways, he uses art as his medium to really express himself. Whether it be through painting, drawing, photography, music, fashion, or even cooking, if it's an art form Nike has tried it. He never seems to run out of new ideas for paintings or songs or outfits, and his unbound creativity is shown in his style of battling. He relies not on the sheer force of his pokemon, but on creative tactics and interesting combinations. Every one of his battles has a little bit of Nike flair to give it a little bit more pizzazz. Though many may not particularly find it a "personality" trait, Nike certainly thinks so. He prides himself on the way he looks and often judges other based on how they dress and certainly how they accessorize. He always makes sure he's wearing something perfect, unique, and fashionable for every occasion, and you'll never catch him wearing something out of style or season. He'd rather lose a limb than be caught dead in something ugly. Another good trait of Nike's is his generosity. Coming from a family that gave him much more than he needed, Nike is always one to give things to others that he himself doesn't need. Whether that be money or some clothes that went out of style this year, he's happy to give and donate to those who are less fortunate and won't think twice about it. Even in his school days, he was the guy everyone went to when they were strapped for cash, and he would never ask for anything in return. Nike, despite not being the most incredibly social and funny person, has a fantastically witty sense of humor. Maybe it's from all of his reading and literary studies, or maybe it just comes naturally, but he always seems to have the right one-liner or the right comeback for every situation and every insult that's thrown his way. Though because of this, he's also amazingly quick-witted and loves thinking on his toes, often getting into arguments and sticky situations purely to practice having to think quickly, and this also shows in his style of battling, seeming to have an answer for everything his opponents throw at him. He never backs down and is always confident in his pokemons' ability to win, always believing he can outsmart any adversary. Lucky for Nike, he's incredibly multi-talented, not only loving every art type but able to pick them all up at an unsettlingly quick pace. He has yet to try his hand at something and not pick it up naturally. His family and friends love to feed him difficult tasks, games, and projects to see how quickly he can solve and complete them. This causes him to always like to try new things, loving to explore everything life has to offer. Nike never backs down from a chance to try something new, and often urges and implores his friends to do the same, dragging them into situations that they otherwise wouldn't be in. Nike is also a naturally happy person, seemingly always wearing a smile of some kind on his face, whether it be a devilish grin or a confident smirk it seems as though the corners of his mouth are always turned up. He naturally has a positive outlook on life, always thinking positively and tries to make the best of every situation. No matter how bad it may seem at its surface, Nike always thinks there's a way to turn it around. Nike hates sadness and sad people and will do his best to cheer up anyone who he thinks could use a good smile. He does his best to enjoy his life, urging others to do this same. This positive outlook shows in his style of battle, never accepting defeat until his last pokemon is down for the count and always believes that through some means, any battle can be won. Lastly, Nike is incredibly observant, always seeming to find hidden details and information that others missed. His eyes are constantly carefully looking things over, registering everything he sees and hears and thinking them over down until the last bit of information. This is partially drawn from his love of capturing scenery in paintings and in photographs, doing his best to perfectly place every detail from a scene. This also means he loves observing and analyzing people, trying to draw their intentions and thoughts from their moves and actions, trying to read peoples' minds through their words and through their eyes. He doesn't let a single movement or a single word slip under his radar. This also shows in his battling, carefully analyzing his opponent and their pokemon to spot any weaknesses and potential ways to win right from the very start. He takes note of everything around him before making his decisions. ?OCD/Perfectionist Something that's not really good or bad about Nike is his OCD and his Perfectionism, it's just sort of part of him, and in a sense it defines him. His constant need to look neat and clean and fashionable, making sure everything he wears perfectly matches, making sure every hair is in place. All of his clothes and books are sorted by color, and he's even to take the time to memorize the shade of his favorite books so he can find them on his shelf. Though he is mainly triggered by things that aren't sorted by color, or things that have non-matching colors, other things still effect him just as they would anyone else with OCD. Anything that's not neat or in its place will bother Nike, just not quite as much as things that aren't sorted by color. This would often cause him to get up in the middle of family gatherings to organize and sort things, mainly because he didn't like the way the colors would look together. No matter how hard he tried he could never control this massive spike in anxiety whenever colors don't match, and fixing them was the only thing that quelled this fear inside him, no matter what the inconvenience was. He has to eat his food a certain way to make sure the different parts of his meal are eaten evenly and his last bite is perfect, always finishing with his favorite part of the meal. Anything that's messy sends him into a cleaning frenzy, tidying up everything to make sure it meets his insanely high standards. In Nike's mind, every thing has its place and if it's not there, it's wrong. As far as his perfectionism goes, everything he does must be done to the best of his ability or not be done at all. Whether it comes to poetry or painting or photography, if it's not his finest work it's nothing he wants to keep or associate with. He keeps only his most perfect masterpieces, but treasures every single one of them just as much as the next. Everything he does must be done flawlessly or not be done at all. -Oblivious -Stubborn -Fearful -Headstrong -Harsh -Shallow -Attention Seeking -Vain Here comes the bad, starting off with Nike's overall obviousness to the feelings of others. Even from a young age, Nike seemed too caught up in his own head and in his own feelings to understand the feelings of those around him. Sometimes he would say mean and hurtful things to his friends, or even occasionally to his family without even knowing it. When he was scolded about doing such things, he would feel terrible, mostly because he had no clue he had even done anything wrong. He still does it up till now, sometimes just straight out calling people unattractive or stupid because he doesn't fully realize it's the wrong thing to do. He does his best to hold himself back and work on thinking of other peoples' feelings, but sometimes he just can't help himself. This also carries over to things that don't relate to feelings. He's quite oblivious to danger as well, often sticking steaming hot spoonfuls of food right in his mouth because he's too wrapped up in his own thoughts. If there's one thing everyone knows about Nike besides his happy personality, it's his stubborn nature. He refuses to admit he's wrong even if he [KNOWS] he is. He never backs down from an argument without the last word or the last laugh. He refuses to be defeated without a fight, even if challenged by a much stronger opponent. You could say this makes him determined, which it does, but it often goes too far to see it in a positive light, often being so stubborn to the point where it can be perceived as stupidity. It comes to the point where if he's proven wrong he becomes incredibly angry, and this sometimes turns him into a sore loser when he thinks he can win and loses despite his best effort. As tough and stubborn as Nike tries to seem on the outside, Nike is scared of a lot of things, and I mean a LOT of things. This includes the dark, heights, many bug type pokemon, death, dolls, closed in spaces, being buried alive, failure, dentists, needles, abandonment, clowns, falling, and sometimes, even women. When he encounters something he's afraid of, he does his best to be brave, but he often can't help but act scared and helpless around his fears. This also makes him depend on other people when he encounters something he's afraid of, figuratively and literally. Nike is also terribly headstrong due to his "I think I can" attitude. He always thinks no matter what he encounters, he has the means to beat it, which mean he may openly challenge much stronger, much more experienced trainers and then be confused as to how he lost. This also means he will rush into arguments and dangerous situations just because he can and think no matter what happens he can get out of it. This can often lead him to getting him and his poor Pokemon into trouble, though he feels terrible afterwards. This also means he has a lot of trouble understanding and accepting loss, always thinking himself as unstoppable. As happy and positive as Nike is, if he has a problem with someone he's not afraid to show it and sure doesn't hesitate doing so. He will often go out of his way to insult or degrade people he especially dislikes. If Nike doesn't like you, he will do everything in his power to make sure you know what he doesn't like and why he doesn't like it. This isn't to say he's outright rude, he's not mean to just anybody, the subjects of his rage are usually bullies or bad people themselves, but often times due to his lack of empathy, he may dislike someone for all the wrong reasons, completely misunderstanding the situation. This even extends to some of his friends and it ESPECIALLY extends to people who are not wearing matching clothes. As good of a person as Nike tries to be, he can't help but be a little shallow. Nike is a very attractive person and he knows it, so in his head, he will not accept anyone who looks any less gorgeous as he does. This means that all of his potential girlfriends, and often times even potential friends, are at first judged based solely on their appearance. This also goes for strangers, often disliking certain people just by how they look and finding certain people ugly just based on what they wear. This also means he gets himself into a lot of less than desirable relationships, dating terrible people just because they're beautiful and missing out on the chance of dating fantastic people because they might not be so attractive. Because he spent his whole life surrounded by siblings and a family that appreciated him and praised his talent, his kind of expects others to do the same. Nike seeks the spotlight and is often upset if it's not pointed on him. This causes him to either feel disappointed in himself, like he didn't do a good enough job, or even get a little angry at people for not realizing how amazing he is. Even when it comes to battling, he tries to demoralize his opponent by making his Pokemon take center stage in a battle, always trying to mount an incredible offense to outshine that of his opponent. Lastly is Nike strongest, most volatile negative trait. Nike, at no surprise to anyone, is incredibly vain. He cares more about his appearance than he does his physical health. As talented as he is at art, he would sacrifice all of his artistic talent for the sole purpose of keeping his beauty. As stated earlier, Nike knows he's very attractive and points it out to just about every just in case they didn't see it the first time around. He has to make sure he looks absolutely gorgeous before going anywhere, and he often thinks that his mere presence should be enough to make others happy. _______________________________________________________________ Overall, Nike is a very happy and confident person. Though he knows he has plenty of bad in him, he works with what he has and always tries to be happy about it, no matter how bad his traits may seem at some times. Unfortunately, it can sometimes be construed as arrogance. He lives by the words "I'd rather make mistakes than make nothing at all." To him, this means "I'd rather do things I regret than regret the things I didn't do." He has what he likes to call a "yes" attitude, always saying yes to new experiences and new events in his life. He always rolls with the punches life throws at him and never lets anything bad get him down. History: Nike was born to the wealthy couple of Lyon and Suzanna LaVoie in the later winter of 180, the youngest of four children. These four children were Vincent [169] Cheri [172] Marie [178] and now, Nike [180]. Being the youngest and the last of their children, he was babied and pampered a little bit more than his older siblings, given a little bit extra and held a little bit closer. His family was and still is very close, loving everyone unconditionally and making sure everyone feels respected and cared for. Ever since he was a baby, Nike was a fast learner, learning words and basic skills at a rate that far exceeded that of his siblings, able to form grammatically correct sentences at the age of two, albeit simple ones. This may have been due to the bit of extra compassion given to him by his parents, but he seemed to have the skills to pick anything that was handed to him remarkably quickly. Nike, even from a young aged, shared the Lavoie family values of love and compassion. He was constantly tailing one of his little siblings relentlessly as if he were a second shadow. It was hard to catch him without a smile and he rarely cried, but that may have been simply due to his welcoming environment, where making mistakes was encouraged so they could be learned from. His siblings never seemed to mind playing with him, especially his sister Cheri, who he seemed to have a special bond with for as long as either of them can remember. It was hard to find the two of them without each other, and it's even were the little guy got his love for fashion! Even to this day they still compare styles and fashion choices together. Though he loves his other siblings, Cheri will always have a special place in his heart that no one else can fill. As far as elementary school went, well, he never went. His parents felt as though it would best for him to spend his early years at home, because his parents never wanted to miss a single milestone in Nike's life. He was set up on plenty of play dates with other kids from the area so he was never lonely, but he never kept any lasting bonds with any of them. Shocking to no one, Nike excelled at everything his tutors put in front of him, whether it be word problems, math problems, or even history questions, Nike seemed to remember everything he learned with ease, even enjoying the task of being challenged from a young age. He would even walk up to his family members time after time and ask them to quiz him! Nike never seemed to really enjoy this play dates, maybe it was because these kids weren't on the same intellectual level as he was. Maybe it's because they embodied the stereotype of snotty rich kids. But no matter what the reason, he was oblivious to them simply because he didn't like them and felt no real connection to them. But the one thing he was interested in was their days at school. What it was like to be around other kids all day and learn alongside them, as well as all of the class trips they went on and things of that nature. Nike would always listen intently to these stories with a silent jealousy. Since Nike disliked most if not all of these kids he was around, and envied their ability to go to school and hang out with other children, something funny happened. He made his first friend, in a strange little ghost type pokemon called Shuppet, which he later nicknamed Umbra. This little pokemon was drawn to Nike's strong envy and dislike for these children, but Umbra had something in common with Nike. She was just as lonely as he was, lost and away from her group, Nike's envy drew her to him, but her own loneliness made her stay. Though very frightened by her at first, Nike and Umbra became great friends with a little bit of time. They would run through the halls of his great big house and play the days of when, whenever Cheri was away or he couldn't talk to her, Umbra was always right by his side to keep him company. Though Nike's parents were very skeptical at first, they eventually let the pair stay together. Nike's OCD began to manifest itself at a young age, his parents recalling the earliest signs being shown around age 5, where his older siblings would messily put back there toys and hate cleaning there rooms, Nike would sit in his room for an hour or so checking and re-checking to make sure everything was sorted perfectly by color. He would also get upset if his food wasn't separated and organized properly on his plate, claiming it made it hard to figure out how to eat it. His perfectionism seemed to show up at the same time. He'd burst out into tears and throw a fit if he even got one question wrong on a quiz or test, sometimes even tearing them to shreds in disappointment. Nike and his family also took great pride in their music family, him and his siblings were all given private music instructors based upon what instrument they had the most interest in. Though Nike found himself to be a fantastic singer, second only to his father, he still had a strong interest in string instruments, mainly the guitar and violin, both of which he had a fantastic grasp of just as he hit secondary school. Him and his family loved to enjoy little jam sessions on the weekends where they would all gather and play music together as a group. He spent most of this time around his sister Cheri, who still loved to hang out with him even though there was a fairly large gap in age. She would constantly dress him up and teach him how to match clothes. He would sit in her room for hours and take fashion lessons from her. Being older than Nike and even having the privileged to travel around the region, she had seen many of the latest and greatest fashions. This was around the time where Nike really started to care about he looked, mainly to try to impress Cheri. He would spend a lot of time carefully planning out how he wanted to dress each day, and he still continues to do this up until this day. Nike was also the first person in his family to ever attend secondary school. His older siblings were kept on private tutors up until university, but due to begging from both Nike and his siblings, his parents agreed to let him attend secondary school, but only for extra curricular, which is where he found his natural knack for the arts. He decided to sign up for the most basic drawing class the school had to offer among some other things related to cooking, fashion, and music. This is where Nike really shined. Though he was and still is fantastic academically, he never felt happier than he was drawing and painting. This is also where he met a lot of his friends, who all started talking to him to admire his work, and many became his friends even up to this day. His two best friends are Ajax and Morgan, Ajax being an fantastic athlete who does art on the side, and Morgan, who's an aspiring digital artist. Though he has a lot of trouble with emotion, he loves these two almost as much as he loves Cheri. As Nike aged and matured, Umbra kept her fun side, much to Nike's liking. Whenever Nike began to get stressed about an upcoming exam or a girl problem or anything of the sort, Umbra would play a little prank on Nike and then make this goofy smile that never failed at making Nike do the same. Nike's OCD may have even been a lot worse without Umbra around to comfort him whenever he got too stressed. If anything tho, his OCD and perfectionism got worse when he went to public school. He always felt the need to impress everyone of his class mates every day, so he would do his best to make everything he did even more "perfect" than it already was, and along with this constant pressure came a constant need for relief, so once he got home he would run around his house just perfectly sorting, fixing, and placing everything in just the way he liked, only to run right back and change it again because he didn't like it anymore. These years also caused him to become somewhat shallow and vain. Since everyone around him would go out of their way to compliment his style, and many attractive girls would go out of their way to get him to notice them, his standards increased. He expects nothing less than someone just as perfect as he is, which may be why he's still searching for a long term partner. As secondary school moved forward, he found himself delving more and more into the world of art, letting it consume most of his life and free time. His work won many awards in local and not-so-local competitions and he found it to be his favorite activity. So he would spend any time he found on his works of art, whether it be a new painting, a scratch board, a collage, an outfit, or even a delicious meal. Even when he was around his friends he talked about almost nothing besides art, though as he finished primary school, he began to be inspired by pokemon, starting to draw many stylized and cartoonish pictures of pokemon, eventually graduating to work that looked more realistic. After he graduated and headed off towards GSUC, he had a larger interest in pokemon than ever. Once making it to GSUC, working on his art major, he began to realize how much he loved pokemon, and that pokemon battling is merely another art form for Nike to tackle. Though he was hesitant at first about changing his life from an artist to a trainer, many upon many encouraging talks with Cheri later he decided to take his two-year degree from GSUC and head off on his journey, from central Godai out towards the east. But before leaving on his journey, after many years of an unbreakable friendship, Nike and Umbra became trainer and pokemon. Nike pulled out his first pokeball and Umbra was happy to go right inside, starting off on their adventure together. Inventory Dians: [dian] 1,000 Items: Key Items: PokéDexTrainer AdvancementAdvancement Points: 0 Tier 0: - Title: (#/#) Pokemon Total EXP Gained: 0
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Tiny things, might be more later when I have more time: Please remove the img coding until you have a photo, you can submit it in a modification at any time after acceptance. You have a bold coding in your hometown that needs fixing, plus you need to include the prefecture of Godai as well. Your moves are numbered incorrectly. And a suggestion, but adding your brithday up above your appearance information might make your profile look a little more organized, but it really is up to you. Great work though, lots of detail, remember not to over-saturate your prose, but for a profile this is truly excellent! |
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Oh yeah haha, sorry for the formatting errors. It has been a while since I've coded for a forum. I believe I made the edits you asked for, and the ones Bones asked for as well. Thank you both for your help and for your praise! ^.^ |
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Alrighty Roba! We’ve already been acquainted and since you’ve asked me, let’s cut to the chase and begin - First off, I’ll say it again; this is simply a wonderful profile! There’s hardly anything to change, but maybe a few things to elaborate upon. For his ”Eyes”, if you’d like, perhaps add in something about his complimentary eyebrows, or maybe how expressive those eyes are? Is there anything else unique about them? An eyelid on the left high hanging down, or perhaps he has double eyelids? So on and so forth. You sorta of mentioned it in his General Appearance, so cut out some of that and place it on to here. For his ”General Appearance”, this is good but since one or two belong in the other categories, add in just a bit more. How does this odd aura affect others upon first impressions or from a far? Does he have a small, medium, or large build? Based on his ”Height” and ”Weight”, he’s quite a tad bit underweight, which makes sense due to his mild disorders, so how does that look on him? Does he use his sublime fashion desires to cover it up? Anything else we should know about him? For his ”Hometown” you’re missing a colon, and check out ”Common Application Mistakes” one more time on that section. Once you see it, you’ll go “oooh!”. Because your ”Personality” is incredibly detailed and very accurate - yay! - then I know you have the ability to be slightly more specific but not too much. So for example, how is he smart? In what way? What method does his mind use to remember these facts? Does he have a photographic memory or does he chunk in the information in a way that his brain allows him to store those facts within his long term? So on and so forth. One thing I must note is that there’s a lot of usage of “fantastic”, “incredibly”, and “amazingly” so in short he sounds almost like a genius especially later described during those child developmental states in his History. Is this how you’re trying to portray him? Now, because these are lists of what he can and can’t do, what I also must ask is as a person, how does Nic feel about himself having all these +/?/- traits mixed together? How someone feels about themselves internally can also play a large part in their overall personality, whether or not it is hidden. That and, perhaps a sentence or two describing any morals or beliefs he has - a life motto perhaps or something he won’t budge away from no matter what. Or perhaps even how he views the world, Pokemon, and again himself. The same can be said for Nic’s ”History”. Don’t get me wrong, this is absolutely fantastic as well, however, elaborate just a little bit more on how Nic felt during those years. For example, these play dates as a child vs going to a public school. How did he feel as he saw the differences and the conversation he has with potential play dates who weren’t homeschooled? That, were there any other situations, obstacle, or events that assisted in shaping Nic towards his lesser intellectual traits he has now? Something to better support his negative traits and how his OCD would later affect him as he grew into a teenager and how it affected his interaction with friends? Was there something he experienced that allowed him to solidify an understanding of some sort - for better or for worse - or shaped his mind into thinking a certain way? So on and so forth. Honestly I’m just looking for, again, a tad bit more of elaboration and one or two more paragraphs on the latter. Delete where the part that says to be deleted in ”Advancement Points”. Change [dian] to * dian * (without the spaces) in your Inventory”. There’s just a little bit to correct on the ”Pokedex” so I’ll list it here:
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Nicolla LaVoie • Muse • Total EXP Gained: 0 • Dians: 1,000 • Location:Reedriver Bridge Umbra
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Oh my goodness, definitely better than what I even wanted! Must I say I am almost smitten with Nic's "overall part" personality! And, child Nic... Ugh hug times /sob. PS - If you ever feel that anything is getting too long, feel free to put them into Spoiler Tags. That said... 1/2 Approval on my end! ♥ (While waiting, go ahead and unbold the "6" in Shuppet's "Special Defense" unless it was on purpose. And take out where it says to delete on "Advancement Points") |
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Your character application has now been accepted! Please make sure to create a signature of your character. Once that is done, you are now free to RP! If you made a personal mistake with your character, please submit a modification process involving a revamp. This topic is now closed without further ado. |
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Emilie 'Lili' Kaplan Elijah Hershel
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