[WIP] Slap! by martian lizard and ? (One-shot)

[WIP] Slap! by martian lizard and ? (One-shot); Short Morality Tale
Topic Started: Jun 30 2012, 01:30 PM (173 Views)
martian lizard	Jun 30 2012, 01:30 PM Post #1
Posts: 6 Group: Members Member #64 Joined: Jun 30, 2012	Hi first time poster. Still not totally clear on the submission requirements. If I have made a mistake or have posted in the wrong area I apologise. With that said.... I have attached my short nine page comic script. I will be on the look out for an artist if this moves on to the next section. Any feedback will be appreciated. Thank you. Attached to this post: Slap__Comic.docx (26.6 KB)
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Brian JM	Jun 30 2012, 04:52 PM Post #2
Administrator Posts: 116 Group: Admins Member #1 Joined: Apr 25, 2012	Hey martian lizard. The requirements for running in an issue of Pulp are getting your completed script in before the entry deadline and also finding an artist to draw your script. Right now I'll move this to the seeking collaborators section.



Jack Garren	Jul 1 2012, 01:08 AM Post #3
Posts: 52 Group: Admins Member #2 Joined: Apr 25, 2012	If you could read this thread: http://w11.zetaboards.com/Premier_Pulp/topic/7878313/1/#new and post the information suggested there, it would be appreciated.
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martian lizard	Jul 1 2012, 07:06 PM Post #4
Posts: 6 Group: Members Member #64 Joined: Jun 30, 2012	SLAP! One Shot Writer: Jimmy Furlong. I am looking for an artist to collaborate with. Slap! is a dark morality tale that depicts how a minor ignored transgression can shape one man's entire lifetime. In nine pages we flash through four decades of Cobb's grubby violent life, from snotty four year old to psychotic forty something. The story begins when Cobb is a naughty four year old who is allowed to riot unpunished on a public play area. On each consecutive page we jump forward five years at time and plot his downward spiral of his ever increasing misogynist behaviour. His unchallenged abuse to himself and to others leads to the inevitable murders of innocents. But even at the end of this increasingly grim tale there is a tiny glimmer of light in the dark..... The tone throughout will be dark and gritty, the art style, the same but realistic. Interested artists should have a firm grasp of body form and facial expression. This piece would work as black and white, muddy washed out grey shadows, with the minimalist of colour seen only in Cobb's hair and stripy green and yellow clothes which is a recurring theme throughout the story. The character of Cobb must be fully realised before story starts. The completed first draft of script is attached above.
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gerent	Jul 2 2012, 10:48 PM Post #5
Posts: 12 Group: Members Member #39 Joined: May 18, 2012	It's nice, though it might be a bit constrained with the panels per page amount. But it's not impossible, especially since we're focusing on Cobb. Based on your panel descriptions, I imagine it as the panels getting progressively smaller down the page. But heck, I'm not the artist! The narrative pacing is proper, and I like its parallel return at the end. Nice. Nice.
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martian lizard	Jul 3 2012, 12:35 PM Post #6
Posts: 6 Group: Members Member #64 Joined: Jun 30, 2012	Cheers man, thanks for the imput and compliments. j
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Jack Garren	Aug 1 2012, 01:09 AM Post #7
Posts: 52 Group: Admins Member #2 Joined: Apr 25, 2012	If this is a morality play, I'm left wondering what the moral is. Is it that someone (presumably his mother) should have slapped him more? Is it that his mother is at fault for slapping him at the end - the fact it's positioned like a reveal makes me think it should be important, but how? We get several pages of a guy being misogynistic, then some stuff about his mother's parenting and the implication there's a moral to be taken from this... What's the message you're going for?
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martian lizard	Aug 7 2012, 01:04 PM Post #8
Posts: 6 Group: Members Member #64 Joined: Jun 30, 2012	"Spare the rod, spoil the child." I suppose is the moral. Two versions of reality play out. One the original, were there is no consequence to his misbehaviour. And then the second were he is punished, it is up to the reader to decide if imposed boundaries to actions will cause any change in Cobb's personal growth. Personally I think he is an unredeemable bad egg.
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martian lizard	Aug 15 2012, 07:34 PM Post #9
Posts: 6 Group: Members Member #64 Joined: Jun 30, 2012	I have now found an artist and will be moving forward with this.
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Jack Garren	Sep 3 2012, 06:01 AM Post #10
Posts: 52 Group: Admins Member #2 Joined: Apr 25, 2012	If you're planning to submit it for #4, get a submission email to us about it before the 5th. (We might be soft on it this time around but we want emails for every submission since forum threads are just too easy to miss/be lost/be posted in the wrong place.)
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Jack Garren	Sep 6 2012, 06:17 AM Post #11
Posts: 52 Group: Admins Member #2 Joined: Apr 25, 2012	I'm gonna assume this was intended for 4 and move it in here.
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