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The Few; The work of daydreams in math class. Feedback, pl0x?
Topic Started: Jun 11 2012, 08:20 PM (248 Views)
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"Every dead body that is not exterminated, gets up and kills. The people it kills, get up and kill." -Dawn of The Dead

I walked down the street, sword over my shoulder, revolver at my side. The street was crammed with abandoned cars, the car alarms were a nuisance at first, but now they're just a beat in my head. I had a dream about the car alarms, once. Going on, forever and ever, never stopping. My family is dead, my friends are dead, everybody is dead. I wouldn't be surprised if I'm the only one who is NOT dead.

Maybe I should explain...
In year 2017, Russia declared war on America for the sole purpose of the lack of oil. Russia created a super virus that could reanimate the dead and use their brain for the sole purpose of murder. Few people remained, and the few who did remain most likely died, except for a few survivors. This is the story of those few.
I trudged through the streets, hearing a groan. I saw one of the Infected trapped under a tire. I used a single shot to put it out of it's misery, when I saw a small girl, oh, six or seven, of Asian descent, running down the street.

She hid behind my leg and said, "Kill it!" That's when I saw an Infected hobbling down the street.

I covered her eyes and aimed for the forehead with my revolver. Slow is smooth, smooth is fast. I launch the bullet into it's head, seeing it fall down.
She still stood behind my leg.

"What's your name, kid?" I asked, adding, "I'm Kolin."

She looked at me and murmured, "Juliana."

"Okay, Juliana," I said, picking her up and setting her on my shoulders, "We have to get to a place to sleep by sundown, which is about, 2 or 3 hours away." I began trudging down the street with Juliana on my shoulders, looking for a suitable place to sleep.


After a bit, I saw a nice little place that hadn't been desecrated yet, I listened at the door and knocked. Hearing no response inside, I opened and peeked. I walked in slowly, alert. Juliana also scanned the room. I saw a kitchen, which might have some canned goods. Sleep first, eat later. I walked up the stairs and scanned, knocking on one of the bedroom doors. No response. I peeked in, and stepped in. "I'll sleep on the floor, you can have the bed, Juliana." I closed the door and checked if the lock worked. I hit the door hard with my shoulder, it held. "Alright, let's go eat."
I walked down the stairs, holding Juliana's hand. I walked into the kitchen without knocking and saw a Caucasian man with an Infected on him. The man had a crowbar, horizontally, in the Infected's mouth to stop it from biting it. He shoved it off of him and used the crowbar to crack his skull open. He tugged the crowbar out and kicked the zombie off of it, standing up. He turned to us, ready to swing.

"More... s-survivors?" He asked
"Yeah." I said, "I'm Kolin, this is Juliana, who are you?"

He sat down and opened a can of peaches. "Nick." He took a few bowls and poured the peaches into them, and began eating his. I sat down around the table and ate mine, and so did Juliana. Juliana got the most peaches, because the child was more important.
And so we spent the night in peace.

We, luckily, woke up in the morning and begin shoving the cans into some backpacks we found. I gave Juliana a kitchen knife and told her to be careful, and that it's only for emergencies. I helped her up onto my shoulders, and Nick, Juliana and I began our trip. We made it a way before we saw any Infected. We put the one down when we finally did see one. The day was long and hard, but we made a lot of distance towards New York City.
The sun was beginning to go down again, so they looked for another house. I stepped on something hard. I looked down at a... landmine?

"DIVE FOR COVER!" I shouted, hopping behind a car and covering Juliana from the blast. Nick did the same. The mine went off and somebody stepped outside of the house the landmine was set up outside of. He had a... water gun? With a match attached. He scanned the area with his eyes, seeing nothing. He pumped the squirt gun and launched a stream of fire into the air, laughing.

"Take that, infected! And stay dead!"

I stood up with my hands lifted into the air, "We're survivors! We come in peace!"
Edited by username90, Jun 11 2012, 09:35 PM.
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Its pretty good you should try to go on. (Also you could say that he lit the match with something as pretty soon that match is going to burn out)
Edited by RCJJ, Jun 12 2012, 05:09 AM.
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The man took the match off of the front of the squirt gun and tossed it aside. "Come on in, watch your step." He lead us inside of the house, which had a few Molotov cocktails and other makeshift explosives. "Who are you fellows?" He asked.

"I'm Kolin, this is Juliana, and this is Nick. Who are you?" I said

"Call me Mitchel," he ordered. "Now, where you headed?"

"New York city, sir," answered Nick.

"Well, that's fine. Would you mind if I joined you, if I let you stay here for the night?" he asked.

"Yes, we can do that," answered I.

He brought out a can of soup, and began cooking it on the stove. After it was finished, we ate. Then we slept.


I woke up to a loud explosion, I looked out the window and saw chunks of flesh flying away from an explosion. I looked at my watch... 2:00 A.M. "Juliana, wake up." I shook her, "Hide under the bed and don't move." I say, grabbing my sword and my revolver. I stepped into the hallway. Mitchel handed me a rifle and pumped his squirt gun. We peeked ou the window, seeing more undead being attracted by the scent of brain and guts from the other zombie.

"Alright, how should we do this?" I asked.

"We shoot 'em until they clear out, then we hit 'em with a Molotov."

"Alright." I opened the window a crack, got down one knee and took aim. I saw Mitchel was doing the same with his Glock.

"Fire!" He said, as I unleashed a bullet into their skulls, three of them dropped with one shot. From then on, Mitchel and I were just slaughtering them until there were only a few left. He opened the door and throw a Molotov Cocktail out, the zombies catching fire until they were just piles of ash.

I went back to sleep, and woke up in the morning. I stepped into the kitchen, where Mitchel was cooking some canned Corned Beef Hash. I sat down, with Juliana and Nick. When the food came, I ate it happily, taking my time to enjoy it. I was just about finished when the door busted down. An Infected with long claws grabbed my shoulders and tried to implant it's teeth into my skull.

BANG. BANG BANG. The Infected fell back, as Mitchel set his Glock down.

"They can bust down doors, that turns the tables." Nick said. We packed up our stuff and left immediately. More Infected roamed the streets.
Edited by username90, Jun 12 2012, 10:30 AM.
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Pretty good! I did find it weird that he covered his eyes when shooting at the zombie chasing the girl, but not when he shot the zombie under the tire. The plot is moving very fast, try and slow down and add more detail. The final problem is that zombies are attracted to noise, if you shot a gun, the zombies in the surrounding area would make haste to that spot. Otherwise Good Job!
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(He covered Juliana's eyes.)
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ummm, Ditzy Dani?
I luv it!
HOLY CRAP IM DREAMING! IM DREAMING! IM-... DANGIT! I WOKE UP!
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i really want to read it i read the first 2 sentences, but the dancing troll is just too distracting!!
I finally got through reading it, and i love it. I do agree, the plot is fast. So is mine, so i know its hard. Great work,and i mean GREAT!!!!!!
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PLEASE Continue this it is my favorite story on here!!!!!!!!
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Totally not a power freak!
Looked it up, the guy hasn't even logged onto ROBLOX since the 12th >_<

Maybe he went on vacation, and doesn't have internet?
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Bingo! We have a winner! I probably won't be on more actively until Friday or so. I'm in Texas.
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Totally not a power freak!
Lol, KK
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Juliana was set over my shoulders as the gang walked down the street. My feet started to ache, and my stomach started growling. I heard a loud gunshot rip through an Infected's head. I turned to where it came from to see a figure getting surrounded by them. I set Juliana down, and our group began to clear out the zombies.
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I only read up to the lack of oil...I can't read with a troll dancing in front of my eyes XD
I finished reading it :D
And yeah,pretty cool man!
Edited by zZThunderStorm, Jun 21 2012, 11:50 PM.
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