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Not named yet.; A book I wrote. :P
Topic Started: Oct 15 2012, 08:22 AM (68 Views)
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{Chapter One}
[USM Base]
“GRENADE!” A voice says. I jump to cover as the blast blows into my ears. I feel blood trickle down my face as a tear. I roll over on the dirt, feeling the screeching pain in my head. I look around, everything blurry. “Everyone okay? Wolfe! Get up!” A man with a scratchy voice yells. My first instinct is to grab my gun. I try to reach for it, but misses. Brian runs over to me, and looks at me. “You okay? You were really close to that grenade.” I wipe the blood away, making a streak across my face. “Yeah, I guess” I say, regaining my balance and getting up. “Tell me if it still hurts. Here take these.” Brian says, as he gives me pills. I take them, then follow the rest of the team up the road. “Up ahead sir! The main USM base!” Max says as he lifts his glasses up, trying to see without the dirt on them. “Alright, Wolfe, stay back since your hurt.” The scratchy voice says, as I realizes it’s Flexo, my commander. “But! I know I’m a girl and all, but I’m not hurt, I can go with you guys!” I complain. “Brian, stay with her, me, Jeff, and Max will go and breach the base.” Flexo says as he walks away, Jeff, and Max following him. “You sure you okay girl?” Brian says, as he takes his medic helmet off. “Yes! I’m fine, why can’t I go!” I scream, as a bird flies away from the tree overhead of us. “Look, we got an engineer, and assault, along with our commander going. Their fine. Besides, you’re a sniper, you always stay back.” Brian says, smiling at me. “You do realize, I have a M4A1, not my M82 Barret 50 Cal. We’re Marines, we don’t stay back.” I protest, trying not to look at Brian. I hear the radio go off, and go over to it, Brian hits me in the head, knocking me out cold.
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Great! Cant wait for the next chapter! Tho i would revise that a little. When i get home ill talk to you about that and we can see if I can help you make it better.
The many links to the Parts and Books of The Forgotten Squad series below.
The Forgotten Squad Book 1 Part 1: http://w11.zetaboards.com/RBLX_Bookwriter_club/topic/8020410/1/?x=0#post8081036
The Forgotten Squad Book 1 Part 2: http://w11.zetaboards.com/RBLX_Bookwriter_club/topic/8655777/1/#new
***NEW*** The Forgotten Squad Book 2: Fall of Syndicate: http://w11.zetaboards.com/RBLX_Bookwriter_club/topic/9615685/1/#poll438680
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