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LossT; A reflection of love and tragedy....
Topic Started: Sep 9 2008, 04:17 PM (219 Views)
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It was inspired by real life experience. No I am not in love, but if you read carefully, you may understand....
I do mention God, if it offends anyone, remember God is Love. Love is the cure. I use God as a symbol of Love and Satan as Evil/Destruction.




LossT
By: Julian Faust

Love is the cure for any diesease,
Any nook and cranny, every creed,
Treat one like a sister, or a brother,
Sometimes, that leads 2 to fall in love with each other.
An emotion turns to magic, but one can sway away and cause something tragic

Two can build a family, have a unity together
To stick it out thick and thin, under any weather
Complications and all,
2 can build together, and have it just fall.


When 2 attract, you think you never know who’s the one,
Until you have an urge, that blazes like the sun
One look into their eyes, and you can see the depths of their souls
You may have a unity, that may contain many holes,
But even than, thick and thin you always fight,
Does it really matter, who’s really wrong or right?


One can turn into 2 and even double that,
A connection that no one thought could be broken,
Maybe it was way to fast before you had spoken?
Sometimes individuals, do things not knowing how the others feel,
Sometimes people think they should make like a banana and peel,


Through out every storm, every tragedy
A unity must fight it out, even with a catastrophe
We must fight the war of the evils of life, and not wage it on each other,
Love can cure all, if we all give it to another,
Through out all the blood and tears, it could be a victory having all cheers


Through any storm or test, remember as a unity you can make it out,
Because we all know God is the best,
Despite what you see in sight,
We continue to fight,
This war called life,
With God as your miracle, darkness turns to light
The structure many built, can rise again,
If we all love each other, instead of following sin

God helps build,
Satan destroys,
Throughout the weather,
Throughout the noise,
No problem, is something God can’t solve
If you love, we all evolve
God is love.
If you having it, don’t ruin it
It can be the biggest regret of your life…….
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Ok, I'm going to level with you. I hate non-musical poetry. However, having been forced to read a lot of poems, I can't tell the difference between this and those written by the "good" poets. So I guess this must be good. lol

I can see room for improvement and some parts tend to sound a bit cliche'. But the talent is there and if built upon, could possibly blossum into something pretty darn good.
I'm writing a serial and a book! :P
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Sep 10 2008, 09:23 PM
Ok, I'm going to level with you. I hate non-musical poetry. However, having been forced to read a lot of poems, I can't tell the difference between this and those written by the "good" poets. So I guess this must be good. lol

I can see room for improvement and some parts tend to sound a bit cliche'. But the talent is there and if built upon, could possibly blossum into something pretty darn good.

Thanks for reviewing. Sorry if anything sounded cliche, but I was just telling my story of my family. Its my side, and what I believe could've been done. Thanks dude.
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Sep 10 2008, 09:23 PM
Ok, I'm going to level with you. I hate non-musical poetry. However, having been forced to read a lot of poems, I can't tell the difference between this and those written by the "good" poets. So I guess this must be good. lol

I can see room for improvement and some parts tend to sound a bit cliche'. But the talent is there and if built upon, could possibly blossum into something pretty darn good.

Thanks for reviewing. Sorry if anything sounded cliche, but I was just telling my story of my family. Its my side, and what I believe could've been done. Thanks dude.

NP, like I said, I ain't big on poetry. So I really couldn't judge anything accurately.
I'm writing a serial and a book! :P
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