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Topic Started: Feb 3 2014, 07:44 PM (98 Views)
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I've got to say, I simply love it when people take something from South Park which was played for laughs and treat it seriously, especially friendship bonding moments between the boys and actually any "evidence" that the boys might be gay. With that said, it's "My Pretty Feet" by Madam RedRose25.

Oh, boy, the author's name suggests some fic issues already, let's hope nothing like that leaks into the fic...

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This takes place just before the events of the episode South Park is Gay.
On with the big guns already? All right, it'll be pretty difficult to satisfy me with this one... But let's discuss the episode itself. We start with an establishing shot at the one and only South Park, Colorado.
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It was a rather nice day in South Park Colorado. The sun was peeking through the clouds for once and there was no trace of snow on the ground to be found.
Oh, really? Because the episode itself suggests otherwise!
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If you reference an episode, at least get it right!

Anyway, apparently Sharon and Stan have something called "mother-son day" now. Ookay... They head to the mall and Stan's apparently excited to go. Okay, I can believe that, since the episode itself defied Stan's habit of not going along with his peers' fads. But wait, get this:
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She was always busy at work and when she was home her kids always seemed to have something to do with friends. Stan especially since he was friendly with anyone he met.
Oh, yeah, like that Mark Cotswolds kid, he was pretty friendly with him. And how about Gary Harrison? He definitely didn't want to kick his arse at the beginning before knowing him better through his actions. Even if he's your favourite character, DON'T FORGET ABOUT HIS FLAWS!

The rest of the drabble is really not that harmful to Stan's characterization, although I wouldn't believe he'd be so excited to go shopping and get a pedicure even when he's just going along with South Park's latest fad. Even if he was once subjected to peer pressure, I believe he'd be that excitable only among the rest of the boys, unless the author suggests some gay issues buried deep inside his mind, which I would most certainly roll my eyes at.

Sharon does a good job reminding us that Stan's actions during this fic is not what he would usually do. Althogh this begs the question why this fic was conceived anyway since it's not telling us anything interesting unless... you know the theories.

So, if the two main characters are okay, I doubt any other would be written wrong-
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What if Randy found out? He was already bothered by how sensitive their boy was, something like this wouldn't go over well. But what would be the worst thing to happen? Stan wouldn't care if his dad hated it, his sister would already make fun but that was a given, and his friends seemed to be okay with the idea too.
What. Randy would be bothered by Stan's sensitivity. Randy, the liberal drama queen would be worried by Stan's sensitivity. Sharon, you already mentioned metrosexuality would be a fad Stan picked up, wouldn't Randy be the one to pick it up before? You don't seem to know your own husband very well, at least not in this fucking fic! Besides, if anyone's the sensitive one in their own set of siblings, it's Randy compared to Jimbo! ...Okay, Madam RedRose25, maybe you got the idea that Randy would not like the idea of Stan acting feminine from Cripple Fight, but... not liking him "acting sensitive" is just bullshit, and actually offensive, as if the terms "boyish" or "manly" and "sensitive" were incompatible!

So, after all this ranting, after all this complaining, what are my final thoughts on this fic?!

...It's okay. I mean, it's not perfect, but it's quite good at hiding its mistakes and if you're not a die-hard fan of the show, you're probably not going to notice them. The spelling's okay and it uses writing tricks Ama said she didn't, like tagging the dialogue by the characters' actions as far as I noticed. As far as the characterization goes, it never goes beyond SP's universe, unlike another author I tend to enjoy, and the plot is actually not that horrible as far as the stories based on South Park Is Gay are concerned. I can take pointless. Judging from the content, it's not the kind of author whose stories I would read often, but I can't criticise it completely.
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She was always busy at work and when she was home her kids always seemed to have something to do with friends. Stan especially since he was friendly with anyone he met.


Mark was an exception and I think the episode happened before about Gary Harrison apeeared(I'm not sure). I think she tried to say that Stan was friendly to people in general(at least before YGO).

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Maybe she just have forgotten about it when she made the fic, WDC.

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Oh, yeah, like that Mark Cotswolds kid, he was pretty friendly with him. And how about Gary Harrison? He definitely didn't want to kick his arse at the beginning before knowing him better through his actions. Even if he's your favourite character, DON'T FORGET ABOUT HIS FLAWS!


I know. I'm trying to solve this in "Todo Cambia"(including the problem with pacing) in the next cahpeters, but I think I will not be able to take care of the pacing :(

Anyway, nice review. I enjoyed it very much :)

Edited by Coyote Smith, Feb 4 2014, 03:54 AM.
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