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South Park Unleashed discussion thread; Along with other John's fics
Topic Started: Nov 9 2013, 10:11 PM (424 Views)
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Check out my personal Obi-wan's profile and fics. If he doesn't delete them in the next few months, at least. No, really, I respect him as an author and all, really check him out, his fics are one of the few that actually keep true to the show and become really emotionally and psychologically complex.

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1074739/Formerly-JVM-SP150
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John
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Hoping sometime when I get free time to make a little side (non-forum) site for my shit. Stay tuned.
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That'd be cool. How are the rewrites coming up?
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Coyote Smith
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Well, I still think that it would be better to reactivate your old forum, but whatever.
Good luck, dude :)
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That'd be cool. How are the rewrites coming up?

They've gone nowhere for weeks due to school but I'm coming upon some time off for the holidays and it'll be my number one priority over that.

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Well, I still think that it would be better to reactivate your old forum, but whatever.
Good luck, dude

Thanks man!
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Some questions for the YWBHIE rewirte, as I should be coming into free time in a week or two to work on it:

1. What aspect of the fic was strongest/most interesting - the Trap House, Cartman and Connor, or the Police Station stuff?
2. Who would you cut from the trap house scenes?
3. What characters deserved more time? Less time?

As many responses - and as detailed - as possible, please.
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Coyote Smith
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The most strongest aspect was the trap house, obviously.
Well, sincerely it should be Red and Stephen Stotch, they aren't very interesting.
Wendy, Sharon and Stan deserved more time. Kyle and Cartman less.
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To me, Cartman and Connor really shined through, but as a comedy, cause Connor's motivations were a tad unclear. So, he wanted to have his revenge on Eric... by capturing some townspeople who he mostly didn't care about?

Keep the focus on the boys and Wendy, since after all that build-up that thread must be resolved. I agree with Coyote, Red was kinda shoehorned in. Though I don't agree, Stephen was perfect for his trap.
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Red's already been completely cut. Save a possible cameo in the classroom, she won't be in it at all.

Besides that, not much I can comment on.
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College is holding up production but ground is broken and it's moving.
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