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Endangered Species Watch Comittee; Proposal
Topic Started: 6 May 2014, 10:50 PM (85 Views)
Malastaar
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Endangered Species Act
Category: Environmental
Industry: All

World Assembly,

UNDERSTANDING that energy resources and other industries are found and prosper in the different biomes around the world.

REALIZING that each nation has the right to collect resources to maintain the well being of the nation.

However,

CONCERENED of the fact that collecting these resources takes a large toll on the environment and it's animals

IN EFFECT these animals are becoming endangered or extinct because collecting these resources.

DEVASTATED that nations would let their precious wildlife disappear right before them, gone forever.

Hear by,

CREATE the Endangered Species Watch Comittee which would
A) Watch for decline of wildlife so the ESWC would make it illegal to collect resources in that endangered species habitat until the endangered species regains it's former population.
B) Only the ESWC can declare an animal endangered or not, not the independent nations.
C) Members of ESWC can have surprise inspections to see if nations are up to code for wildlife protection.

URGES nations to follow ESWC guidelines or consequences will follow.


How can I make it less broad?
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Tenenza
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Well, first off, there are already a good number of resolutions regards animal protection. So you might want to check on those to get a good idea about the current sitaution.
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Cardoness
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Endangered Species Act
Category: Environmental
Industry: All

Instead of All (Business), this fits better under Mining, as that is what you are talking about in the first part of your proposal.

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World Assembly,

The World Assembly,

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UNDERSTANDING that energy resources and other industries are found and prosper in the different biomes around the world.

Even though it is called the "World" Assembly, it is actually a "Multiverse" where anything and everything can exist. We have talking bears, talking plants, and aparntly a kingdom of polar bears ruled by a pegisus whos ambassador to the WA is half bear and half human. Yeah. Also, I think ecosystems is a better fit.

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REALIZING that each nation has the right to collect resources to maintain the well being of the nation.

Ok, but I would end it at ...resources,

However,

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CONCERENED of the fact that collecting these resources takes a large toll on the environment and it's animals

Try "biodiversity" or "living organisms" instead of animals.

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IN EFFECT these animals are becoming endangered or extinct because collecting these resources.

Same as above.

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DEVASTATED that nations would let their precious wildlife disappear right before them, gone forever.

Drop the gone forever.

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Hear by,

Hereby,

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CREATE the Endangered Species Watch Comittee which would

CREATES not CREATE.

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A) Watch for decline of wildlife so the ESWC would make it illegal to collect resources in that endangered species habitat until the endangered species regains it's former population.

This needs cleaned up, and split into two sections. Something like "Watch for decline in wildlife populations," and "the ESWC shall regulate or restrict industrial operations within the habitat of endangered species,"

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B) Only the ESWC can declare an animal endangered or not, not the independent nations.

No, sorry, but this needs to come out.

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C) Members of ESWC can have surprise inspections to see if nations are up to code for wildlife protection.

This is unneeded, the gnomes who will run the ESWC have ways of enforcing each and every resolution. Compliance is manditory and nations cannot go against what the resolution says.

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URGES nations to follow ESWC guidelines or consequences will follow.

See above.

On the whole not a bad first attempt. Could really use some work but there is promise in there somewhere.
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Malastaar
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Endangered Species Act
Category: Environmental
Industry: Mining

The World Assembly,

UNDERSTANDING that energy resources and other industries are found and prosper in the different ecosystems around the Multiverse.

REALIZING that each nation has the right to collect resources.

However,

CONCERENED of the fact that collecting these resources takes a large toll on the environment's biodiversity.

IN EFFECT these living organisms are becoming endangered or extinct because collecting these resources.

DEVASTATED that nations would let their precious wildlife disappear right before them.

Hearby,

CREATES the Endangered Species Watch Comittee which would
A) Watch for decline of wildlife population.
B) The ESWC shall regulate or restrict industrial operations within the habitat of endangered species.

Okay how is this
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Malastaar
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Well... I searched the WA forums and found out that their is a WA endangered species Comittee....... So thanks for the help Cardoness ... It gave me exp on how to write proposals.
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Cardoness
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Sure thing, pick something else and write another one.
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