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| Thatoneguyuknow | Feb 14 2007, 02:48 PM Post #1 |
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The Year Warm, sizzling, sprinklers spraying. Little kids running around in swimming shorts. Babies laughing, and bees buzzing. Cold, dark, leaves falling, Little kids running around in zombie masks. Babies wrapped up like mummies, and the wailing of ghosts. Cold, clear, powdered sugar falling from the heavens. Kids running around wrapped up like gifts. Babies yelp in joy at Santa on T.V. Warmer, clearer, flowers blooming from the ground. Kids picking flowers and giving them to their mothers. Babies smile at the sight of a new flower. All through this cycle the kids and babies grow, every year a bit wiser, older. And every year, they live, and reminisce, On all those Summer, Fall, Winter, and Spring days, Gone past. |
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| God of The Congo | Feb 14 2007, 02:50 PM Post #2 |
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Pretty good. |
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| + *cabecabe4 | Feb 14 2007, 03:58 PM Post #3 |
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PLEASE DELETE THIS ACCOUNT
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cool!! :D |
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| Thatoneguyuknow | Feb 14 2007, 08:15 PM Post #4 |
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Thnx! Appreciate the compliments! |
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| + *thebalanceiswithin | Feb 14 2007, 08:35 PM Post #5 |
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thats a cool poem dude, very thought out! |
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| ChipChamp | Feb 14 2007, 09:56 PM Post #6 |
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Have fun!
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I liked it! 7/10 ~ ChipChamp |
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| ** Death's servant | Feb 15 2007, 03:30 PM Post #7 |
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hmmm......Good job of depicting groing up. |
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| Thatoneguyuknow | Feb 21 2007, 06:47 PM Post #8 |
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Thanks a lot for the compliments guys! Really apreciate it... I didn't think it was all that terribly good...7 of 10 really? Well again thanks! Ill have to put some nice things on some of your poems! |
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