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Purpose; How I'm feeling right now
Topic Started: Jul 5 2007, 01:18 AM (192 Views)
God of The Congo
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I have a purpose,
to help,
to advise,
to confort,
I feel as if the world,
is unfolded in front of me,
I KNOW I will stay with you,
my love until the end of time,
I know that my friend will find his someone,
I know my onther freind will stay with her's.
forever,
All these things I know,
I know that I have helped,
one who has helped me,
and my love,
and I know that I have helped one of my dearest friends,
I just need to help my love now.

I know that my destiny is,
to fulfill the promises I have,
made,
to everyone,
my love,
my friends,
my family,
everyone,
So I will,
and the most important promise is to you love,
forever and a day,
forever and forever.

Should I put this in love?
Please, give me some feedback.
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+ *thebalanceiswithin
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Love is meaningful, isn't it?

I liked it, I liked it a lot.
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ChipChamp
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I liked this one. :) I think I liked the change in rhythm that you had, some long lines and some really short lines.

6.5/10

~ ChipChamp
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God of The Congo
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Thank you. I guess when you love someone as much as I do, it's hard to really right about anything else.
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Invisible Dancer
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not bad
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God of The Congo
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Thank you.
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Invisible Dancer
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your welcome
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+ ****+Child of the Night
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That was a constructive set of posts.... No, I think this should be exactly where it is. It works here... This was quite well written, I very much enjoyed it
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** Death's servant
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pretty good it didn't make sense in the middle.
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