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Topic Started: Sep 20 2007, 09:15 PM (422 Views)
Red Love
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Red

Blood
So beautiful dripping from my fingertips.
So alluring with its taste.
So satisfying when it touches my lips.
So delicious as it slides past my tongue on the way to my throat.
So stubborn as it clings to my teeth like dye.
Red is the color of flowing blood

Passion
So simple yet so powerful.
So undeniable as it overwhelms logic.
So frightening in how quickly it takes you.
So amazing when you finally feel it.
So easy to let go of yourself, yet
So impossible to give up.
Red is the color of burning passion

Fire
So startling as it touches your skin.
So comforting as it lulls you to sleep.
So dangerous as it consumes all in its path.
So protecting from the elements.
So cleansing and life-giving
Red is the color of fire


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I love it! I can completely relate to the blood stanza. Dark, equisite imagery. Very well done!
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Very good poem! I really liked it! The only thing that I could say about it that perhaps you could think about is that the first and last stanza has 5 'So' lines, but the second stanza has 6. Anyway, it was a really good poem!

7.5/10

~ ChipChamp
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I thought that It would be nice to have a little more substance in the middle, but still make it symmetrical
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Yeah, I still think it was really good. :)
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Thank you very much, I try.
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that was very good, I loved the metophors.
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Ok who can guess what my favorite color is? LOL
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Hmm.. I'll take a wild stab and say... blue?


Lol
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Very good. It flows well I think.
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Thank you very much.
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Makes me think of blood and chocolate... Does that make me abormal?
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Just slightly... Lol

JK
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it was OK...
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But when is anything excellant in your eyes, Anonymous?
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