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| Red Love | Sep 20 2007, 09:15 PM Post #1 |
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The fairest of them all
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Red Blood So beautiful dripping from my fingertips. So alluring with its taste. So satisfying when it touches my lips. So delicious as it slides past my tongue on the way to my throat. So stubborn as it clings to my teeth like dye. Red is the color of flowing blood Passion So simple yet so powerful. So undeniable as it overwhelms logic. So frightening in how quickly it takes you. So amazing when you finally feel it. So easy to let go of yourself, yet So impossible to give up. Red is the color of burning passion Fire So startling as it touches your skin. So comforting as it lulls you to sleep. So dangerous as it consumes all in its path. So protecting from the elements. So cleansing and life-giving Red is the color of fire |
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| + ****+Child of the Night | Sep 20 2007, 09:18 PM Post #2 |
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What is the price of freedom?
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I love it! I can completely relate to the blood stanza. Dark, equisite imagery. Very well done! |
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| ChipChamp | Sep 20 2007, 09:18 PM Post #3 |
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Have fun!
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Very good poem! I really liked it! The only thing that I could say about it that perhaps you could think about is that the first and last stanza has 5 'So' lines, but the second stanza has 6. Anyway, it was a really good poem! 7.5/10 ~ ChipChamp |
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| Red Love | Sep 20 2007, 09:21 PM Post #4 |
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The fairest of them all
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I thought that It would be nice to have a little more substance in the middle, but still make it symmetrical |
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| ChipChamp | Sep 20 2007, 09:22 PM Post #5 |
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Have fun!
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Yeah, I still think it was really good. :) |
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| Red Love | Sep 20 2007, 09:26 PM Post #6 |
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Thank you very much, I try. |
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| ** Death's servant | Sep 20 2007, 09:37 PM Post #7 |
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Reflection
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that was very good, I loved the metophors. |
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| Red Love | Sep 20 2007, 09:39 PM Post #8 |
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Ok who can guess what my favorite color is? LOL |
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| ChipChamp | Sep 20 2007, 09:39 PM Post #9 |
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Have fun!
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Hmm.. I'll take a wild stab and say... blue? Lol |
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| God of The Congo | Sep 20 2007, 09:46 PM Post #10 |
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Dead Poet
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Very good. It flows well I think. |
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| Red Love | Sep 20 2007, 09:48 PM Post #11 |
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The fairest of them all
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Thank you very much. |
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| + ****+Child of the Night | Sep 22 2007, 01:22 AM Post #12 |
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What is the price of freedom?
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Makes me think of blood and chocolate... Does that make me abormal? |
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| ChipChamp | Sep 22 2007, 10:10 AM Post #13 |
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Have fun!
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Just slightly... Lol JK |
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| Anonymous | Sep 22 2007, 10:30 AM Post #14 |
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Honorary Member
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it was OK... |
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| + ****+Child of the Night | Sep 22 2007, 01:25 PM Post #15 |
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What is the price of freedom?
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But when is anything excellant in your eyes, Anonymous? |
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