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| Mavrix | Oct 23 2007, 08:10 PM Post #1 |
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Verus Dilemma I do not see the plight, in leaving fate behind. There is no condemnation, in relaying one's simple mind. Out of all the horrors I could commit, and wield from this earth below. Believing the farce shall not vanquish. It's certainly what death can show. So while they have their dainty tales, and their pruned shrubs of life. I believe one's soul is frail, it cannot stand the flight. ___________________________________________ I'd really like some feedback, specially because I have some questions. For instance, should poems consist of correct punctuation? I decided to add commas, and periods to the poem above, but does poetry even "use" it? Furthermore, what do you think of it's structure? It lined up pretty well, but it seems repetitive. Comments? |
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| ChipChamp | Oct 23 2007, 08:26 PM Post #2 |
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Have fun!
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It was pretty good! 7/10 As far as punctuation is concerned... I don't think that you need it at all for poems. :) ~ ChipChamp |
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| + *thebalanceiswithin | Oct 23 2007, 08:45 PM Post #3 |
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that was very well done, very well done. You should be proud of yourself :D |
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| ** Death's servant | Oct 24 2007, 07:43 PM Post #4 |
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that was verry good. |
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| +Linden | Oct 24 2007, 08:03 PM Post #5 |
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awesomesauce
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Only if it helps it flow a little better, I think... |
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