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Insecure Waltz In The Sky
Topic Started: Oct 25 2007, 08:55 PM (198 Views)
Mavrix
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Insecure Waltz in the Sky

I simply feel no effect,
No prophecy of success
Wasted and controlled
I set my mind to confess

My helpless house has been brought near
My soul has been lured away
Now my friends and family I do fear
And lies have brought me astray

How simple is this confession?
How can you ever understand?
Would I have to belittle my relation?
Or just hope I can go from sky to land.

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Another one, ties into some emotions of mine I've been having recently. Not much to say, just getting back into writing more regularly. Comments?
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Red Love
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It sounded very heartfelt and meaningful. It makes you feel the poem rather than hear the words :up:
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Really really good! :D

8/10

~ ChipChamp
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that was good. good structure too
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