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Topic Started: Jan 1 2008, 01:52 PM (292 Views)
***eboy192
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Why do I feel that this world never stops changing
moving and shifting and even rearranging
will any one thing ever stay the same
will there be two things which have the same name?

love always changes, from person to person
some people push away while others try to listen
friends always change, reacting to new stuff
some getting weaker while others get quite tough

work always changes, constantly fluctuating
we constantly strive to get a new rating
other things constantly change as well
sometimes in too small of a way to tell

and sometimes the things you wish would never change
are the ones which occupy a varying range
of ideals, morals, or a characteristic
and you realize that its something we cant pick.

Time is the one thing that will never vary
It will not speed up, nor will it tarry
change is inevitable so welcome it all
for as time continues, summer changes to fall.

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CrestfallenNights
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i love the idea of the poem, and the rhyming pattern was really nice.
Though, a few words seem to take away from the feeling of the poem just so it could rhyme.
But overall, it was a good display of the idea of change that i think we all can relate to.
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ChipChamp
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Very good, again! And as always... I love your rhymes! :)

8/10

~ ChipChamp
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** Death's servant
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That was amazing!
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God of The Congo
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Eboy, I can think of no critism for this amazing work of art. That was the most amazing speculation on time and change I have ever read. It was from the heart, relatible, the rhyming was very good, the flow, also, amazing. One of your best.
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***eboy192
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GoC, i really appreciate the feedback. I have been writing this for about a month and i finally felt it was ready. If you guys put together a book of poetry I'd love to include this one if possible.
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Rhat would be awsome
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***eboy192
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even though i live far away from you guys would i be able to get a copy via PDF files or something?
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We could get one to you.
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***eboy192
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cool. thanks for the feedback guys
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Any time friend.
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