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| ***eboy192 | Jan 1 2008, 01:52 PM Post #1 |
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Why do I feel that this world never stops changing moving and shifting and even rearranging will any one thing ever stay the same will there be two things which have the same name? love always changes, from person to person some people push away while others try to listen friends always change, reacting to new stuff some getting weaker while others get quite tough work always changes, constantly fluctuating we constantly strive to get a new rating other things constantly change as well sometimes in too small of a way to tell and sometimes the things you wish would never change are the ones which occupy a varying range of ideals, morals, or a characteristic and you realize that its something we cant pick. Time is the one thing that will never vary It will not speed up, nor will it tarry change is inevitable so welcome it all for as time continues, summer changes to fall. |
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| CrestfallenNights | Jan 1 2008, 02:39 PM Post #2 |
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Coming Or Going?
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i love the idea of the poem, and the rhyming pattern was really nice. Though, a few words seem to take away from the feeling of the poem just so it could rhyme. But overall, it was a good display of the idea of change that i think we all can relate to. |
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| ChipChamp | Jan 1 2008, 03:39 PM Post #3 |
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Have fun!
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Very good, again! And as always... I love your rhymes!
:) 8/10 ~ ChipChamp |
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| ** Death's servant | Jan 1 2008, 04:59 PM Post #4 |
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That was amazing! |
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| God of The Congo | Jan 1 2008, 06:31 PM Post #5 |
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Eboy, I can think of no critism for this amazing work of art. That was the most amazing speculation on time and change I have ever read. It was from the heart, relatible, the rhyming was very good, the flow, also, amazing. One of your best. |
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| ***eboy192 | Jan 1 2008, 06:57 PM Post #6 |
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GoC, i really appreciate the feedback. I have been writing this for about a month and i finally felt it was ready. If you guys put together a book of poetry I'd love to include this one if possible. |
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| ** Death's servant | Jan 1 2008, 07:16 PM Post #7 |
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Rhat would be awsome |
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| ***eboy192 | Jan 1 2008, 07:56 PM Post #8 |
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even though i live far away from you guys would i be able to get a copy via PDF files or something? |
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| ** Death's servant | Jan 1 2008, 08:00 PM Post #9 |
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We could get one to you. |
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| ***eboy192 | Jan 1 2008, 08:13 PM Post #10 |
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cool. thanks for the feedback guys |
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| God of The Congo | Jan 2 2008, 08:20 PM Post #11 |
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Any time friend. |
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