| Trust; My first rhyming poem since 5th grade! | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Jan 5 2008, 03:08 AM (158 Views) | |
| Red Love | Jan 5 2008, 03:08 AM Post #1 |
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The fairest of them all
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Trust I need you to tell me, Tell me that It’s all real Because I’ll never be able to tell you, What it is I feel I would love to say That I have it all planned But, I don’t so you’ll have to trust me, When I say “take my hand” Trying my best to wait, To keep some control For our own good, To protect our souls I don’t know what to do I don’t know what the future holds I’m scared of it, Will we be alone and cold? But then I look into those green pools, And my racing heart slows I hold you close to me, And I forget everything I know |
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| + ****+Child of the Night | Jan 5 2008, 03:21 AM Post #2 |
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What is the price of freedom?
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I... really don't know what to say to this but that you mean the world and more to me... And the rhymes worked well, contrary to your claim. |
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| ChipChamp | Jan 5 2008, 03:17 PM Post #3 |
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Have fun!
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Very good, and the rhyming scheme is very good!
:D 8/10 ~ ChipChamp |
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| ***eboy192 | Jan 5 2008, 08:02 PM Post #4 |
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[Insert witty catchphrase here]
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so relate-able. very beautiful |
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| ** Death's servant | Jan 6 2008, 02:28 PM Post #5 |
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Reflection
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wow.....that was amazing |
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| Red Love | Jan 12 2008, 01:06 AM Post #6 |
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The fairest of them all
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thanx guys |
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| God of The Congo | Jan 12 2008, 06:24 PM Post #7 |
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Dead Poet
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Exquistetly beautiful. The rhymes were amazing. |
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