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Trust; My first rhyming poem since 5th grade!
Topic Started: Jan 5 2008, 03:08 AM (158 Views)
Red Love
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The fairest of them all
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Trust

I need you to tell me,
Tell me that It’s all real
Because I’ll never be able to tell you,
What it is I feel

I would love to say
That I have it all planned
But, I don’t so you’ll have to trust me,
When I say “take my hand”

Trying my best to wait,
To keep some control
For our own good,
To protect our souls

I don’t know what to do
I don’t know what the future holds
I’m scared of it,
Will we be alone and cold?

But then I look into those green pools,
And my racing heart slows
I hold you close to me,
And I forget everything I know
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+ ****+Child of the Night
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I... really don't know what to say to this but that you mean the world and more to me... And the rhymes worked well, contrary to your claim.

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ChipChamp
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Very good, and the rhyming scheme is very good! :D

8/10

~ ChipChamp
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***eboy192
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so relate-able. very beautiful
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Reflection
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wow.....that was amazing
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Red Love
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thanx guys
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Exquistetly beautiful. The rhymes were amazing.
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