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Topic Started: Feb 8 2008, 06:07 PM (300 Views)
+ ****+Child of the Night
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What is the price of freedom?
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Why was I cursed
With this body?
So perfect,
Such an annoyance

Eyes of emerald,
Hair of fire
Slim to a fault
And curved to the extreme

Eyes follow me
As I walk down the hall
Longing and hatred,
Lust and admiration

They say they
Want to be me,
So discontented
Sick of being invisible

In this body,
That is what I want,
Much too visible
A pretty face in the crowd

Disease ravaged
Always sick
So pale
Still envied

But who looks
Beyond the visible
To the pain inside
To the person within

They say I am beautiful,
But only a few really mean it
Only a few know me well enough
To fully judge

Let me become invisible
To all but those who
Love me for me
Not the body I was trapped in

Save your envy
For those who want it
Save your lust
For those who will appreciate it
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ChipChamp
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Have fun!
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Very good, Cotton! I liked it! The rhymes were good. :D

8/10

~ ChipChamp
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What is the price of freedom?
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I rhymed? Oh... Cool!
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ChipChamp
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Have fun!
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LOL! Well, sure... I wasn't paying attention. :P I meant to say that you had good Rhythms. Not exactly Rhymes. lol

Still really good. :D
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***eboy192
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[Insert witty catchphrase here]
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Wow. just...Wow.
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*Inkheart
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You are pretty, although I never really thought of you that way, but look on the bright side! I'm straight, yet I'm more commonly called 'faggot' than my real name.

I'm not being emo, or accusing you of being emo, but I suppose that it is one of the ultimate human conditions to long for what we don't have.

BTW, great poem! It was a very distinct work that had an overall characterization suitable to the content.

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Reflection
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hmm.....I agree with inkey. I also agree with chips. Nicely done.
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God of The Congo
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Well written.
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