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Never Be Mine
Topic Started: Feb 9 2008, 12:50 AM (513 Views)
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Something totally different... Working with stories through a male persona... No idea how this will work
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I'm falling for a girl. I know, there's nothing too shocking about that, but she is beautiful. And there is no way she'd ever see me like that. She's got a gorgeous boyfriend, good grades, and gods, her smile...

I mean, what goes around comes around, right? A few weeks ago, I wouldn't have known she existed... Well, we're on a debate team together, but I never had to actually talk to her... I had a chance and I over looked it. It wasn't until recently I really got to know her... Beautiful, witty, wry, smart... real. She has self image issues! Who would have guessed? How could someone this... amazing have such personal image problems?

I mean. If I was her, I'd be basking in my own glory. She gets stared at in the halls constantly. Isn't that what girls want? Attention?

She seems more comfortable alone... Sweet Claire... That's her name. Claire.

It all started as a joke. I had a nickname for her to make her mad... and it stuck and evolved into babe as a joke... To see how far I could push her until she snapped. And she never snapped. She came to me when she had problems with people in her life... And now I love her.

And she will never be mine.

I can't try to steal her. Her boyfriend is a giant. And he's already warned me off her once. Yes. This is bad... I have to stop thinking about her. But that's like telling a swan to stop swimming. Impossible.

And she will never be mine.
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Cross gender perspectives are always interesting. Good job of capturing the male persona.
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very relate-able to many male situations :mellow:

very good idea of how we work considering you aren't a guy lol
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Pretty good cross-gender perspective. :)
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Not the kind of thought proses I have. I can't pinpoint the exact reason, it just seems naive. Good writing, don't get me wrong, but it needs some.......spark. If I figure it out Ill tell you emediatly.
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I was sort of going off a conversation I'd been having with a friend from school... Except the girl he likes isn't called Claire. It was just something that had been pestering me for a while.

And, Eric, I must thank you (Again). Talking to you helped immensely
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cross-gender is hard. >_<
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it is hard.
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yup. I'm working on it now and they're all too level-headed to be guys. :P
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Guys arn't all idiots lindin.
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Not idiots, exactly, but impulsive... VERY impulsive
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I found it.

"I mean. If I was her, I'd be basking in my own glory. She gets stared at in the halls constantly. Isn't that what girls want? Attention?"

That is the part that seems strange to me. Most guys I know are not really concerned with that sort of thing. The "If I was her, I'd be basking in my own glory..." is more of a feminine thing.

Thanks for re-opening this story.

Everyone has impulses, some act on them some don't, although it is true as a generalization most guys are more impulsive than a good amount of girls, that doesn't mean they're not level headed.
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Okay, let me clarify. It's a typical girl thing to say boys are stupid, guys are idiots, ect. It's not that I'm taking a stab at you or just one guy, as much as I'd hate to admit it ( :P ) there are some intelligent males. Just I'm stabbing all of the male species. heh.

You do realize, I'm joking? :P
Edited by Linden, Jun 12 2008, 07:54 AM.
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*sigh* so be it.
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Like... my boyfriend is generally level headed unless Red Love or his mum are involved... Then he can be counted on to do something REALLY stupid...
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