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Black Hole, Parts I-iii; A trilogy about life, death, and rebirth
Topic Started: Mar 30 2008, 10:04 AM (258 Views)
D. Black
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I'm not breathing, I must be in heaven
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"Black Hole, Part I: Salvation"
Home is nowhere
I look above as the gods smile down on me
I let go

Empty spaces fill the gap
Once, I had a heart there
Now I fall into the rhythm

My body, split open left to rot
As my soul slips out

Leave me and I'm born again
Leave me and I will come again
The shining stars of salvation lead me to the end

"Black Hole, Part II: Into Tomorrow"
The clouds greet me as I float up to them
Shining shimmering opalescence all around me
I pass through and move on

I wave goodbye to everything
Look forward, I drift on into hope

The door opens
I reach out and move through
And take one look back

So long yesterday
You've lead me home one last time

So long yesterday
You've lead me home on last time

"Black Hole, Part III: Finale"
Move out
Move through
Move in
Move around
I have reached the end of a new beginning
Black hole, lead my salvation
Receive me, I lay open to you
On the brink of tomorrow
So long everyone
I'll miss you
Please remind me of home before I'm gone forever
Goodbye, goodbye
Sweet black hole, be my salvation
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ChipChamp
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Very good! I liked how you split it up into three parts. :D

8.5/10

~ ChipChamp
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D. Black
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I'm not breathing, I must be in heaven
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Thanks. It's actually a tetraolgy (sp?) with an instrumental track called "Black Hole, Part II: Passing Through" following "Salvation."
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** Death's servant
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Amazing poems. You performed them well too.
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God of The Congo
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Again, very good! The ideas were very cool.
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