| Black Hole, Parts I-iii; A trilogy about life, death, and rebirth | |
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| D. Black | Mar 30 2008, 10:04 AM Post #1 |
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I'm not breathing, I must be in heaven
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"Black Hole, Part I: Salvation" Home is nowhere I look above as the gods smile down on me I let go Empty spaces fill the gap Once, I had a heart there Now I fall into the rhythm My body, split open left to rot As my soul slips out Leave me and I'm born again Leave me and I will come again The shining stars of salvation lead me to the end "Black Hole, Part II: Into Tomorrow" The clouds greet me as I float up to them Shining shimmering opalescence all around me I pass through and move on I wave goodbye to everything Look forward, I drift on into hope The door opens I reach out and move through And take one look back So long yesterday You've lead me home one last time So long yesterday You've lead me home on last time "Black Hole, Part III: Finale" Move out Move through Move in Move around I have reached the end of a new beginning Black hole, lead my salvation Receive me, I lay open to you On the brink of tomorrow So long everyone I'll miss you Please remind me of home before I'm gone forever Goodbye, goodbye Sweet black hole, be my salvation |
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| ChipChamp | Mar 30 2008, 10:07 AM Post #2 |
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Have fun!
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Very good! I liked how you split it up into three parts.
:D 8.5/10 ~ ChipChamp |
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| D. Black | Mar 30 2008, 10:12 AM Post #3 |
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I'm not breathing, I must be in heaven
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Thanks. It's actually a tetraolgy (sp?) with an instrumental track called "Black Hole, Part II: Passing Through" following "Salvation." |
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| ** Death's servant | Mar 30 2008, 04:37 PM Post #4 |
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Reflection
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Amazing poems. You performed them well too. |
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| God of The Congo | Jun 4 2008, 12:21 PM Post #5 |
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Dead Poet
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Again, very good! The ideas were very cool. |
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