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| Tweet Topic Started: Mar 31 2008, 12:35 AM (206 Views) | |
| LastOfTheIndipendents | Mar 31 2008, 12:35 AM Post #1 |
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"Scared" Going through my days, What am I scared for? My mind and me at war, What do they all think? This self conscious craze. Am I quite smart enough? Am I dumb as they come? Should I have more fun? Is this too much thought? Mind in pieces, Body in one. I'm as scared as they come, Yes, talking about me, No my mind isn't free. For those who watch this show, You can't begin to understand, This mindset I cannot command, Do not begin demands, Until I can give it a go. Why can I not stop this, This depression of mine? Is this paranoia A crime? Does it pose a danger to me? Confidence just give me a kiss. It began many years ago, Self Destructive interior, Calm, Collected exterior, Don't ask what I'm feeling, Because I don't even know. |
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| ** Death's servant | Mar 31 2008, 03:49 PM Post #2 |
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Damn dude. Better than the first. I know that possition more or less. |
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| ChipChamp | Mar 31 2008, 04:26 PM Post #3 |
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Have fun!
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Very, very good! You are a very good poet.
:D 8.5/10 ~ ChipChamp |
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| ** Death's servant | Mar 31 2008, 06:04 PM Post #4 |
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This poem rocks my face off. |
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| LastOfTheIndipendents | Mar 31 2008, 06:08 PM Post #5 |
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Rocks your face off huh? Haha. Thanks you guys, I try. Tis auto-biographical of course |
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| God of The Congo | Jun 4 2008, 12:19 PM Post #6 |
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Very good job! I like the strong rythem and the rhymes that it had! |
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| ** Death's servant | Jun 4 2008, 01:30 PM Post #7 |
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Autobiographical stuff is interesting. |
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