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Topic Started: Aug 14 2008, 10:29 PM (214 Views)
CrestfallenNights
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This is something I just started. Feedback is appreciated.

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Isadora was running, and she was running fast. That’s all that she knew how to do right now. Run straight into the darkness ahead of her, and away from the blinding light of the fire, away from the heat. Into the dangerous and uncertain cold. She remembered faintly how she hated the cold, and how she needed the warmth. She couldn’t live out in the cold. But she couldn’t see any other options. That warmth wasn’t for her...

The dream was branded into Isadora’s memory as a soft whimper and a gentle nudge on the cheek woke her up. She opened her eyes quickly and buried her face in her wolf’s warm coat. The remains of the dream left her with a chill down her spine. She rubbed her face against his grey coat as he whimpered, nudging her again.
“Nothing’s wrong. Just missed you.” She muttered into his fur. She could smell the fresh dirt on his paws and fur. She looked up at the clock, wondering how long he had been gone. It was nearly four in the morning. He left at midnight. Just enough time for the cold to sink in through the walls and her blankets.
She yawned and laid her head back down on him as he curled around her. “I missed you a lot. It was cold.”
He let out a soft growl and curled in closer to her, rubbing his muzzle against her side. In a few moments like this and she would be completely toasted. In a few more seconds, she would be asleep, warm and safe with her wolf.
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ooohh toasty wolves. ^_^

By the way, how'd you come up with the title?
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nicely done, good writing, one thing, the first paragraph has a lot of changes in tense.
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I was looking for names for mai wolfy. And I came across Rune. It means "secret lore". And it's amazing. <3.



And Deaths', what do you mean by changes in tense?
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A bit more of the story.
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The sun shone brightly in Isadora’s room, waking her slowly from her dreamless sleep. She sat up slowly and petted her wolf before stretching and laying back down on the pillow. She continued to pet him until he opened his eyes and licked her cheek. Isadora laughed and hugged him. “So what do you wanna do today?” He let out a sound like a yawn and rolled over, looking at her upside down with his paws in the air. She rubbed his tummy and he kicked his leg. “Okay. Sounds good,” she laughed and continued to rub his tummy.
Isadora stretched again before sitting up and rolling out of bed, walking towards the kitchen with her wolf walking next to her. They were so used to walking everywhere together, that her hand automatically rested on his back, as if she were the one following him. Maybe she was, but Isadora and her wolf were so close, it didn’t make a difference. They acted like one mind. She knew what he was telling her, and he understood her when she spoke.
Grabbing a box of cereal, Isadora wandered towards the couch in the living room. Her wolf jumped up next to her as she sat down, and she leaned against him, eating, and looking out the window. Everything was covered in snow.
“How far did you go to get covered in dirt?” Isadora asked, looking out in the woods.
The wolf looked upwards, past all the visible trees and let out a short growl.
“Can I go see?” she asked, putting a handful of cereal in her mouth.
He rubbed his nose up and down her cheek in response.
“Oh yay,” she said with a smile. “I love you, Rune.” she said and finished her cereal, looking out the window.
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the tense of the verbs in the first paragraph changes a little bit. but looking back I see that it isn't so.

I like hte next bit.
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