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| CrestfallenNights | Oct 5 2008, 07:51 PM Post #1 |
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I wish I could tell you something that would change your life. Something that would make you stop doing whatever you're so damn preoccupied with and start listening. Something that would make you want to stop throwing everything you have away and try to be a better person. ... But I fear that would be a waste of a perfectly good wish. ------- Wishes aren't something people come across easily. There is no magic lamp, not bottles filled with genies, no wands that make everything magically happen. This is the real world. Wishes are a tricky thing. Some people use up all of their valuable time just hoping that by wandering lost, a compassionate soul will give them the chance to get what they need. But how can any human truly know what they need? Sure, they know what they want. I want this. I want that. Give me what I want, and give it now. Want is easy. Need is what's difficult. Do you need this wish? Does your life depend on it? For me, it does. I'm Chelsea. And I have exactly forty hours to use this wish. My wish didn't come to me as some of the stories once told. There was no bright light, no angels telling me I had one chance to make everything right again. No, it started with a trip to the market. |
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| *HellionStorm | Oct 5 2008, 07:55 PM Post #2 |
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Runoilija Kunnon mies Aatelismies
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This sounds really cool. Sounds like the intro to a television miniseries or something. The suspense it radiates just makes me think of like Cris Angel popping up after this going "Are you ready?" XD Maybe that's just me. You should really write the rest of this and soon. XD This sounds like an utterly intriguing idea. |
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| CrestfallenNights | Oct 5 2008, 08:00 PM Post #3 |
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Haha. XD Thank you. I wrote the very first part like, a year ago and decided to work on it tonight. :D Procrastinating on school projects does wonders for my stories XD |
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| ** Death's servant | Oct 5 2008, 08:28 PM Post #4 |
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you should elaborate a bit on it. |
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| CrestfallenNights | Oct 5 2008, 08:29 PM Post #5 |
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Have you ever had a day where nothing makes sense? Not in the way that everyone is being absurd, but in the way where everyone acts the same way they always do. People still drive, people still work. The only difference to this day is that you just stop in the middle of the crosswalk, look around you, and wonder why these people do what they do. What could possibly pull them constantly forward? What in this world is moving you forward? Milk? Eggs? No, no. That's not enough to keep your legs moving. So you just stop there. In the middle of the crosswalk. You notice the red lights blinking and cars honking and you wonder what is going to make you move. For me, it was an ice cream cart. The bells ringing as a young boy pushed it along was what made me move. Oh, the joyous sound of bells. All the scientists in the world couldn't find a more pleasant sound. It was easy to catch up to the hopeful sound of the bells, and ask the boy what he had to sell. It was hard to remind myself I didn't have the money to buy any treats anyway when he told me he didn't have anything left. It was impossible to remember how to move. "Would you give me a hand? I've been pushing this around all day, and it just gets heavier every time somebody takes something," the boy said after a few minutes of my mindless standing. "Where to?" I asked as I took his place and started pushing. "To the grocery store." He said, and silently walked forward. |
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| CrestfallenNights | Oct 5 2008, 08:30 PM Post #6 |
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What do you mean elaborate on it? |
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| ** Death's servant | Oct 5 2008, 08:34 PM Post #7 |
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make it longer. which you just did. anyways, I believe that the sound of the c and g cello strings played together (or separately) is the most beautiful sound imaginable. |
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| CrestfallenNights | Oct 5 2008, 08:37 PM Post #8 |
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Ah. There are many beautiful sounds. I personally don't like bells.Too tinkly sometimes. String instruments are very beautiful. Music in general. |
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| +Linden | Oct 6 2008, 07:04 AM Post #9 |
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awesomesauce
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Take your time writing it. In my opinion, you don't have to elaborate on it. Just let it flow. Edit later. Sometimes I get so preoccupied with making things long enough, good enough, I loose track of my timing and whatever I'm writing turns to crap. So far it's really good and I want to know more. But really, take your time. You can't rush to perfection. ^_^ |
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| ** Death's servant | Oct 6 2008, 06:50 PM Post #10 |
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by elaborate on it, I ment that she should post sometime, not edit. Just thought I should clear that up. |
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| +Linden | Oct 6 2008, 08:01 PM Post #11 |
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awesomesauce
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posting again when you're not ready can ruin the flow too. |
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| CrestfallenNights | Oct 6 2008, 08:09 PM Post #12 |
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Yeah, it can. But I can see what Death's meant by elaborate with the first post. The last part was sorta a beginning for the next part, not the ending for the first. The latter would be a bit awkward without a continuation |
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| ** Death's servant | Oct 6 2008, 09:45 PM Post #13 |
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I'm not saying you have to post immediately, just that it's a story that should be continued. Believe me, I know how posting before it's ready can kill a story. read any of mine but clocks (Pretty much) |
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