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Desperadas; Play for theatre class.
Topic Started: Nov 13 2008, 07:48 PM (312 Views)
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In my theater class we have to write and perform a fairytale. I got stuck as the writer because I was the only one who expressed interest in writing. :dead:
So here's our script so far. It's suppose to be cheesy, goofy, melodramatic -- so don't hold that against me for lack of character development. Lol.

Lines on the same line are meant to be spoken at the same time; I didn't forget to hit enter. ;)

I'd appreciate your comments and opinions since this is for a grade. My group is split between the messenger being too wordy and monologing vs wanting it to look like a pageant at first. The ending is still being worked on, I'm not sure of the exact ending I want. Oh and we have 10 minute limit.

Set: A table in the middle of the stage. Perhaps small scenery to indicate the Princesses’ kingdom during the princess dialogue to the audience in the very beginning.

On stage, the princesses: Victoria, Rachel, Linda, and Delilah should stand on house left; how the princesses are spaced should denote their separate kingdoms. On house right should be the King and the Prince. Cindy should be sweeping behind the princesses.

VICTORIA: Once
RACHEL: Upon
LINDA: A time
DELILAH: There was a princess.VICTORIA: were four princesses.

Victoria gives Delilah an annoyed glare but Delilah continues.

DELILAH: And she was the nicest
RACHEL: the kindest,
LINDA: the most beautiful,
VICTORIA: and the most graceful!
ALL: I had everything I could wish for.
LINDA: Execpt…
ALL: Princes.
DELILAH: Males.
RACHEL: You see…
VICTORIA: In every country, the princes ran away.
LINDA: We sent them questing
RACHEL: for necessities!
DELILAH: Like chocolate.
LINDA: Rubies!
RACHEL: Magazines, with the quizzes!
VICTORIA: Tampons.
ALL: We had everything! (some cry) But they never came back!

Princesses freeze.
Cindy exits.
The audience’s attention should switch to the King and the Prince through their movements before they say their lines. The king should look regal, the prince should look slightly bored. He has a game boy.


KING: My Son, it’s time for you to marry.
PRINCE: Yes, my father.
KING: I have written letters to the princesses in the neighboring kingdoms.
PRINCE: You mean the kingdoms without other princes?

KING: Yes… PRINCE: I don’t know about that… I’d like a woman who can do something for herself -

KING: Bahumbug, I have a master plan. Now, bring me the messenger!! MESSENGER!

Messenger enters and bows.

MESSENGER: My liege!
KING: Take these letters and distribute them to the Princesses in the neighboring kingdoms!

Messenger stands up and takes the letters.

MESSENGER: Yes, my liege!

King and Prince freeze.
Messenger skips or moves enthusiastically and delivers a letter to each Princess.
A princess or two should try to trip up the messenger.
Messenger circles back to the King and freezes.
They read the letter and gasp at the same time.


ALL: A BALL!
VICTORIA: My God!
RACHEL: A prince!
LINDA: A marriage!
DELILAH: My chance!

The princesses scatter and reform in a line ready to be presented at the ball.
They trip and laugh at each other in the process.


MESSENGER: Presenting Princess Victoria, hailing from the kingdom Victimize!
She enjoys eating Vienna sausages.

Victoria moves forward and curtsies.

Presenting Princess Rachel, hailing from the Land of the Reckless!
This princess loves Rollypollies!

Rachel should do the same but slightly more extravagant.

Presenting Princess Linda, hailing from Let On!
She enjoys little puppy dogs.

Linda does the same and does something more extravagant.

Presenting Princess Delilah, hailing from the Kingdom Destitute!
Princess Delilah loves Dark chocolate.

Finally, Delilah curtsies and does the most extravagant thing.

KING: Welcome Princess Victoria, Rachel, Linda, and Delilah. I am thrilled you all could be here. (He should use wide, welcoming gestures) Now that you’re all here, let’s begin the tournament!
LINDA: T-tournament?!
KING: Oh, you thought it was a ball?

King laughs evilly.
Princesses look horror-struck.
King starts monologing.


KING: You thought you’d have a nice evening, dance, look pretty like you always do, marry well... Well not today, it’s time you’ve learned your lesson!
PRINCESSES: WTF!
KING: Your rule of oppressive femininity is over! I need a daughter-in-law that lets us relax and get business done rather than send us off on frivolous quests! However, this tournament is not without your interest. The winner will marry my son, Prince Whatever.

Prince looks up from his game with a dejected expression.
Princesses swoon, giggle… you know, that kind of stuff. >_< They accept the tournament.


KING: This will be an elimination type tournament.

Messenger should produce a poster with an elimination graph to show the audience.

KING: Our first two competitions will be: Rachel vs Linda at arm wrestling; and Delilah vs Victoria at seed spitting.

The Princesses move to the designated acting areas.

KING: Ready Set Go!

Commencement of competitions.

RACHEL: I won!
KING: Good job, Princess Rachel. Over here it looks like Delilah won her competition too.

Cindy enters. She removes the loser princesses off stage, but otherwise everybody ignores her. The Prince has is back turned and is engrossed in his gameboy.

KING: Our final competition, to decide the winner and who will marry the prince is… BEER CHUGGING!
RACHEL and DELILAH: Fine!

They move to the table, shooting evil glares at each other.

KING: Ready… Set…. GO!

They chug.
In 4 seconds, they both slam their glasses down,
Angered that they tied.


KING: A TIE!

Delilah lunges over the table to strangle Rachel.
Rachel pulls out dagger, Delilah pulls out hers. They fight.
Cindy enters to wipe up the blood. The Prince looks up from his game boy and finally sees her.


PRINCE: Wait! (he should say this like 'STOP!', as if addressed to the fight) Let me do that for you…

He gets on his knees to take her rag to clean.

CINDY: What?

She tries to go on with her job,
pulls out a bandaid for a princess that was cut.


PRINCE: No, let me…

Still on his knees, he takes the bandaid and absentmindedly sticks it on the princess.
He never takes his eyes away from Cindy's.


PRINCE: I love you!
KING, DELILAH and RACHEL: WHAT?

Cindy looks at the angry mob of three, Prince takes her hands.

CINDY: You’re delusional!
PRINCE: But I love you!

Cindy tries to gets away,
The princesses are approaching.


CINDY: You’ll get me killed! I have to go!

Cindy runs off stage.

KING: Whatever, why did you do that? You ruined my master plan!
PRINCE: Because I never liked your ‘master plan’.
KING: You don’t want justice?!
PRINCE: I just wanted my gameboy… and Cindy - CINDY!

Prince runs off stage wildly.
Delilah and Rachel look at each other, then the king.
They chase him off stage with daggers.
Prince and Cindy come on stage.


CINDY: You really mean you were never interested in the princesses?
PRINCE: Never, who could ever be interested in a Desperada?

Cindy and the Prince freeze.
The Princesses come out.


VICTORIA: Did he just call us ‘desperada’?
DELILAH: Oh keep the rhinestones on your tiara, will ya.
LINDA: We’re all desperadas.
RACHEL: Oh, shut up. I’m despairing here.

They all snort/sigh.

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Cindy enters. She removes the looser princesses off stage, but otherwise everybody ignores her. The Prince has is back turned and is engrossed in his gameboy


I think you meant loser, in which case I suggest the "losing princesses" although I suppose that isn't a huge deal. Other than that small technical error, I must say I like this. It's short, as it should be, but it is not so short as to lose the impact. I think this would be hilarious to watch.
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On stage, the princesses: Victoria, Rachel, Linda, and Delilah should stand on house left; how the princesses are spaced should denote their separate kingdoms. On house right should be the King and the Prince. Cindy should be sweeping behind the princesses.


Do you mean stage right and stage left instead of house right and house left? When you say house you mean the area where the audience will be sitting not the stage or preforming space.

-I like it but it will require some serious directing because there is a lot of pantomiming that will have to take place.

-If this if for school how are you allowed to have daggers and beer chugging competitions? I know at my school anything like that is thrown out.

I am having a hard time following it though, there is a lot left open for interpretation and as a writer I don't know if you want it to be like that or not. It seems segmented and divided. The overall flow in my mind is lacking.

BUT! If your drama teacher is anything like mine you should get an A+++ on the writing portion even if you just leave it like that.

----now it is up to the actors----
Edited by girl anachronism, Nov 15 2008, 09:29 AM.
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House left is the same as stage right, the house is the audience's point of view.

It's a collage theatre course. They're wooden daggers. And it's only two plastic cups. XD But you know, I'm only the writer. I don't have to worry about the blocking. Thank god, I'm not acting either. lol. Once it leaves my hands, I'm done. XD Our elected director (like how I was elected playwrite) knows stage combat, so our dagger fight is a go at least.
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Okay.. I just get confused thinking in house left and house right. Sounds good to me!
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I'll read this when I feel less tired.
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Corrections made and suggestions taken into consideration. :)

DS, take your time. Life gets busy. I understand.
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hehe...Nice little story about the ridiculisness of what people will go through to get what they want, and how little it all realy meens. One thing, where does a prince get a gameboy? I meen this is feudal ages isn't it?
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Not really. It doesn't really take place on Earth. Tell me there's a country called Led On or Victimize, and I'll happily edit the gameboy out. XD

It's supose to be a fairy tale, the project said nothing about being historicaly correct. :P
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I was just sayin...
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LOL, I really liked it. Some of the stage directions are a little vauge, however.
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Maybe you should switch to a writing major, love. You and I could go work together XD I love it I love it I love it!
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