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| D. Black | Sep 15 2009, 08:57 PM Post #1 |
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I'm not breathing, I must be in heaven
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I wrote this single sentence today as a part of my English class ----- The world is big and blue and green and beautiful and round and shiny and if I could hold it in my hand I bet it would look just like a marble that I lost when I was a young child back when a sunburn made you feel like a space alien and those Heely shoes with those crappy plastic wheels in the heels made you feel like God and I used to believe in God until these two skyscrapers in New York fell down one day and some people got hurt but it wasn’t hurt like you skinned your knee on the sidewalk hurt it was hurt like your heart had stopped circulating the automobiles of your red blood cells and the police closed off the highway because of a car crash hurt and now my f*cking hand hurts from writing so much but I will never stop writing never stop writing never stop writing because I still think of writing as an air bag deployed during a car crash during that last real second where you wish you could’ve told someone how much you love them and I love you because you were the Jaws of Life that pulled me from the torn wreckage of my Honda Civic and you were the electric paddles that kept the interstates of my circulatory system driving again and you were the lifeguard that gave me CPR on the day when I thought that I could swim the English Channel with my eyes closed and this world is big and blue and beautiful but this world will never be as big and blue and beautiful as you are and oh my god I can see my house from here and it kind of looks like a marble I lost and I think that maybe it’s time that you and I go looking for my marble. |
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| Andy92 | Sep 15 2009, 09:29 PM Post #2 |
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good stuff man |
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| +Linden | Sep 15 2009, 09:42 PM Post #3 |
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awesomesauce
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Could use a few comma, at least? :P |
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| kelseyyy. | Sep 15 2009, 09:52 PM Post #4 |
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Set down your eyes for a moment and breathe.
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haha. that's awesome. |
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| Jessie | Sep 16 2009, 05:52 PM Post #5 |
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haha, yeah, i agree, that was awesome. |
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