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Topic Started: Sep 29 2009, 10:09 PM (482 Views)
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The following story was written for my Adv. Creative Writing and Reading class. Although the title is the same, it is unrelated to a story I tried to start a while ago.

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I think Agent 3 could be fleshed out more... because a few things don't fit.
From what I've gathered, he's a middle-aged man, who, up until this little incident, was in the Army. However, it makes me wonder why a middle-aged man would receive the Metal of Honor when, assuming he's made a career out of being a solider, he'd most likely be an Officer in the Army. They're usually in charge of troops, rather than seeing action themselves; so that doesn't leave a whole lot of room for "heroism". Of course, he might have been a patriotic citizen who decided to enlist in time of war. It's just not clear.

Do keep in mind, however, I'm an Air Force child - not Army... so my knowledge about the Air Force may or may not translate to the Army. :angel:
Army sucks.
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hahahaha, air-force-child-linden, my godfather, a few of my cousins , and my sister's boyfriend are in the army XD . hahaha, that just cracked me up though XD .

i like the story. :D

Edited by Jessie, Sep 30 2009, 05:18 PM.
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Linden
Sep 30 2009, 05:08 PM
I think Agent 3 could be fleshed out more... because a few things don't fit.
From what I've gathered, he's a middle-aged man, who, up until this little incident, was in the Army. However, it makes me wonder why a middle-aged man would receive the Metal of Honor when, assuming he's made a career out of being a solider, he'd most likely be an Officer in the Army. They're usually in charge of troops, rather than seeing action themselves; so that doesn't leave a whole lot of room for "heroism". Of course, he might have been a patriotic citizen who decided to enlist in time of war. It's just not clear.

Do keep in mind, however, I'm an Air Force child - not Army... so my knowledge about the Air Force may or may not translate to the Army. :angel:
Army sucks.
Although it's not directly referenced in the story, I envisioned 3 as being in his twenties, so he'd still have a little innocence in him, he'd still question things. As opposed to his collegues, for the most part, who are older and veterens, and a little desensitized.

And I didn't think that far, dammit. XD

Other than that, did you like it?
Edited by D. Black, Sep 30 2009, 05:24 PM.
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You said he listened to a phonograph as a kid though... I assumed he was a teenager in the 70 or 80's.
You're better off changing it to an ipod or something, to make it more clear. Nobody has a phonograph nowadays. :dead:

But yeah, I liked it. I hope you get a good grade. :)
Edited by Linden, Sep 30 2009, 05:43 PM.
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what are you talking about.... I have a phonograph. psshhh, who doesn't?

hah, XD , sorry David, i don't mean to spam your thread, i just needed to say that.
Edited by Jessie, Sep 30 2009, 05:33 PM.
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Okay, one - one person out of 25 million teenagers today owns a phonograph. :P
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hah, i really don't, but that'd be totally awesome if i did 8D . a friend of mine actually does have a record player though XD .
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