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The Over-Use Thread
Topic Started: May 22 2009, 05:23 PM (2,336 Views)
bionic4ever
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What phrases do you tend to over-use when you write? A couple of mine are 'tears pearled in her eyes', 'eyes widened in alarm' and (not really a phrase but my worst over-use):

"......"
But....people talk this way, and I think it makes a conversation flow more naturally, so this one, I am keeping.
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I use capitalizations and "..." a lot too, but it's hard to impart the inflection or pause in your voice and I think those two elements help convey that. I guess that is a weakness in my writing, but I can't seem to help myself. I'm sure there are all KINDS of words I overuse - especially those describing movement or looks/touches.
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Oh, I have a bunch, I know. I've just blocked them from my mind for the moment. "eyes widened in alarm" is definitely one of them.
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But yet how else do you SAY some of those things? How many synonyms are there for walking without sounding stupid? Or gazing? Or kissing?
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GAZING! That's another one. I sometimes think I'm going to shoot myself if I have to use it again, but then I can't come up with anything better.
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It's a hard one, especially because I often use it and want it to mean more than just looking at someone, but to look at someone with fondness in their heart. To say you are "studying someone" doesn't have the same connotation.
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To avoid 'gazing' I now over-use 'eyed him closely'. :D
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Still doesn't seem to have the same "dreaminess" as gazed. I guess it depends on what exactly you're trying to convey.
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Yeah, "eyed him closely" has a suspicious sound to it.

Jaime eyed him closely.

Jaime gazed at him intently.


Totally different, don't you think?
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Yes, the one seems to imply she doesn't trust him, whereas the second one conveys more of a romantic feeling.
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Very true....and....while I eye that statement closely....I must gaze intently....upon the fact....that I over-use...BOTH! :D
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:lol:
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As I gazed deeply into this thread....my eyes widening with shock....I came to the sudden realization...and it chilled me to the core of my soul....that my work is cut out for me.
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Ooohhhh...you're good!
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I worry that I overuse the idea of Oscar and Jaime getting together, but I LOVE, LOVE, LOVE those stories, and they are really the only ones I want to write.
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