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| Tweet Topic Started: May 22 2009, 05:23 PM (2,334 Views) | |
| bionic4ever | May 22 2009, 05:23 PM Post #1 |
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What phrases do you tend to over-use when you write? A couple of mine are 'tears pearled in her eyes', 'eyes widened in alarm' and (not really a phrase but my worst over-use): "......" But....people talk this way, and I think it makes a conversation flow more naturally, so this one, I am keeping. |
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| OJFan | May 22 2009, 05:49 PM Post #2 |
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I use capitalizations and "..." a lot too, but it's hard to impart the inflection or pause in your voice and I think those two elements help convey that. I guess that is a weakness in my writing, but I can't seem to help myself. I'm sure there are all KINDS of words I overuse - especially those describing movement or looks/touches. |
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| messyhead | May 22 2009, 05:59 PM Post #3 |
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Oh, I have a bunch, I know. I've just blocked them from my mind for the moment. "eyes widened in alarm" is definitely one of them. |
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| OJFan | May 22 2009, 06:02 PM Post #4 |
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But yet how else do you SAY some of those things? How many synonyms are there for walking without sounding stupid? Or gazing? Or kissing? |
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| messyhead | May 22 2009, 06:09 PM Post #5 |
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GAZING! That's another one. I sometimes think I'm going to shoot myself if I have to use it again, but then I can't come up with anything better. |
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| OJFan | May 22 2009, 06:12 PM Post #6 |
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It's a hard one, especially because I often use it and want it to mean more than just looking at someone, but to look at someone with fondness in their heart. To say you are "studying someone" doesn't have the same connotation. |
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| bionic4ever | May 22 2009, 07:19 PM Post #7 |
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To avoid 'gazing' I now over-use 'eyed him closely'.
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| OJFan | May 22 2009, 07:25 PM Post #8 |
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Still doesn't seem to have the same "dreaminess" as gazed. I guess it depends on what exactly you're trying to convey. |
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| messyhead | May 22 2009, 08:25 PM Post #9 |
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Yeah, "eyed him closely" has a suspicious sound to it. Jaime eyed him closely. Jaime gazed at him intently. Totally different, don't you think? |
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| OJFan | May 22 2009, 08:33 PM Post #10 |
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Yes, the one seems to imply she doesn't trust him, whereas the second one conveys more of a romantic feeling. |
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| bionic4ever | May 22 2009, 09:05 PM Post #11 |
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Very true....and....while I eye that statement closely....I must gaze intently....upon the fact....that I over-use...BOTH!
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| messyhead | May 22 2009, 09:41 PM Post #12 |
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| bionic4ever | May 23 2009, 09:02 AM Post #13 |
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As I gazed deeply into this thread....my eyes widening with shock....I came to the sudden realization...and it chilled me to the core of my soul....that my work is cut out for me. |
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| messyhead | May 23 2009, 09:22 AM Post #14 |
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Ooohhhh...you're good! |
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| OJFan | May 23 2009, 09:30 AM Post #15 |
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I worry that I overuse the idea of Oscar and Jaime getting together, but I LOVE, LOVE, LOVE those stories, and they are really the only ones I want to write. |
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