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Kill Steve Austin; Season 1 Episode 11
Topic Started: May 31 2009, 12:42 PM (2,849 Views)
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Prologue

(This takes place three months after the birth of Jaime and Steve’s Children.)

Dr. Michael Marchetti watched the island’s beach come into view as the fast boat he rode in cut through the waves. It had been two months since his last trip here to check on the Zanin’s, a group of alien descendants whose parents had been forced to settle here on the island called Ninau or question by the native Hawaiians; due to its sudden appearance last year. Oscar had assigned him this..fate..he thought about it, but Oscar called it a mission of serious national and international security.

“We’ll be there soon Mike.” The statement brought him out of his mental remorse to turn and nod at Chris.

Chris for his part grinned and shook his head a bit as Michael turned back to look ahead of them back out at the water. Chris knew what he was feeling, both of them had loved Jaime and both of them had thought it would end in one of them marring her and making a life with her. Both of them of course failed, thanks to one Colonel Steve Austin. Jaime had never really forgotten him, not deep down in her heart. Now of course Steve and Jaime were married and had two three month old baby daughters named “Rose and Ann” from what he had heard.

“Sir?” the young coast guard ensign, with them on this trip spoke up. “We still have not heard back from the base camp.”

Chris tapped Michael on the back. “Is it normal for the base camp not to communicate back to us Mike?’

Chris looked at Michael with a bit of concern in his eyes and in his voice.

Michael nodded his head. “Yeah, last time I was here, they were having radio issues then. Something about the islands unnatural magnetic field left over from the years of the Zanin shield screen.”

Chris nodded, he had read the report of how an OSI satellite had crashed here last year; on an island that had been shielded from the outside world for over 50 years by an energy barrier that made it appear invisible to visual and electronic detection and of how Steve had encountered a girl named Da-Nay from the Zanin people.

He helped her to get the T-cell serum X-99 for them, due to their immunity issue with Earth germs. Some of the Zanin’s had mutated into feral like humanoids due to the satellite radiation as well. Steve helped save those Zanin and gave them a cure for their immune systems. All in a day’s work for the great American hero, Steve Austin he thought.

Hopping out of the small boat, the young ensign pulled on the line to guide it to the sandy shore as Chris and Michael both stepped out to help him secure it to the beach. All of them saw the large posted signs every thirty yards or so, stating how this was US. Navy private property and used for Navy test bombing no trespassers were allowed.

“How long do they think that will actually keep people off here?” Chris asked.

Michael looked at him. “Hopefully until we are sure the Zanin can live safely among us without dying.”

All three grabbed the bags and backpacks from the boat and headed into the islands enterer

The trek along the well worn path had been a bit long but completely normal. Chris was ahead of Michael and Ensign Wong, when he spotted the Flag pole, marking the base camp.

Chris walked in and saw the mess that was left of the base camp. “Everyone hold up” he whispered back.

Laying the bag down he slowly moved forward, ducking and weaving around the over turned tents and tables. Michael and Ensign Wong watched through the brush, until a shadow fell over them.

“Chris!!!” was all Chris heard as he spun around to see the bodies of Michael and Wong come flying through the air into the camp area. Michael came down hard on an overturned desk..as he felt his left side impact and the feel of his ribs breaking.

Chris started to move forward when he saw the three come into the camp. Zanin’s by their dress but their faces and hair..like…”oh no” he looked at them in fear.

”It’s happened again.” Chris turned to run toward Michael when two men jumped over him from the island jungle behind him. Chris stopped and fell back as he saw their faces changed as well.

“Welcome to our camp” The deep voice from the left Zanin spoke to him. Chris had seen the pictures of some of the Zanin’s and this one looked similar to..”Torg?”

Chris was taken to the center of the camp near Michael and the limp body of Ensign Wong, and tossed to the ground. The six Feral Zaninn’s surround them.

“Bring the female doctor here Riga” Torg stated to the curly haired Feral Zanin next to him. As Dr. Lee was brought into the clearing, Torg looked down on Chris.

“Is this them Doctor? Chris and Michael?” he looked at her and smiled.

“Yes” she whimpered.

“Good.” Torg turned back to Chris and Michael next to him, now looking at him to. “You will get Steve Austin to come here…or the female doctor will die right now.” Torg motioned for the two Zanin’s to begin pulling on her arms.

Her screams echoed out. Both Chris and Michael shouted out. “Stop this..she did nothing..stop it.”

Torg grinned at them..”I will spare her..IF..if you use the communications here to call for Steve Austin to come.”

Michael hung his head, while Chris looked at Torg with anger.

“Ok..just stop hurting her.” Michael yelled out.

Torg waved the two feral Zanin to stop. Michael was taken to the communication trailer and sluped into a chair by the feral Zanin Torg. “Call him now..but do not give anything away…or the female and Chris will die.”

Torg left Michael with two other Zanin and walked back outside to Chris. “What are you going to do if Steve comes here?”

Torg frowned and looked at Chris with pure hatred in his eyes. “When Steve Austin comes here…..I will have my revenge…I will kill Austin and anyone who comes here with him.”


(Ok this is my first try here hope everyone enjoys it as I prepare to take the Austin's, Jaime and Steve out on a mission together. Thanks B4E for your words of encouragement)
Edited by johnfsg, Dec 20 2013, 01:44 PM.
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Jun 2 2009, 08:50 PM
Great action sequence! I'll be holding my breath 'til you come back with more!

Thanks..so much.
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Be warned - I am not very good at holding my breath! So hopefully you'll be back soon!
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Jun 2 2009, 09:02 PM
Be warned - I am not very good at holding my breath! So hopefully you'll be back soon!

As fast as I can. I do have to work a job and such. :rolleyes: :rolleyes:
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That was a good chapter! I really felt worried for Steve in what looks to be an impossible situation.

You did a good job with the dialogue too - it just needs a little more tweaking and then you've got it. Because of the organization of the sentences it seems like Steve is speaking when Jaime is speaking and vice versa. All the character's actions belong in the same paragraph as their own dialogue.

This:

”OSI relay station Hawaii calling Colonel Austin, come in Colonel Austin..over.” He grabbed the mic, and returned their call.

“Sir, we have priority call for you, from your wife.” Steve smiled and laughed a bit. (It seems like Steve said that last line.)

“Put her through.” Jaime's sweet voice came through. (Looks like Jaime said this one, etc.)

“Steve?” Her voice always made him smile.

“Yes sweetheart” Jaime replied.

“Oh good, hoped I‘d catch you before you went ashore…I..I wanted to say…be careful and I love you.” Steve countered. (This one is the most confusing. It really seems like Steve said it.)

“I love you to sweetheart…should be talking to you again in about four or five hours tops.”


should look like this:

”OSI relay station Hawaii calling Colonel Austin, come in Colonel Austin..over.”

He grabbed the mic, and returned their call.

“Sir, we have priority call for you, from your wife.”

Steve smiled and laughed a bit. “Put her through.”

Jaime's sweet voice came through. “Steve?”

Her voice always made him smile. “Yes sweetheart”

Jaime replied. “Oh good, hoped I‘d catch you before you went ashore…I..I wanted to say…be careful and I love you.”

Steve countered. “I love you to sweetheart…should be talking to you again in about four or five hours tops.”


Thanks for a fun chapter.
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Great action-packed chapter! I could easily imagine the scenes as I was reading it. Excellent descriptions and very enjoyable.

I agree with Messyhead about the dialogue. It is somewhat confusing who is saying what. Such as:

It’s over Steve Austin..” Torg shouted to him. Steve could see him now, stepping from the tent…”You will never leave here.” Steve frowned at him.

“Torg what happened, where’s Da-Nay, where are the others?” Torg’s fury rose in his voice.


I thought at first that Torg said the second line (in blue) but then I realized that wasn't right. Messyhead has shown you though how to make it clearer.
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Jun 3 2009, 07:21 AM
That was a good chapter! I really felt worried for Steve in what looks to be an impossible situation.

You did a good job with the dialogue too - it just needs a little more tweaking and then you've got it. Because of the organization of the sentences it seems like Steve is speaking when Jaime is speaking and vice versa. All the character's actions belong in the same paragraph as their own dialogue.

This:

”OSI relay station Hawaii calling Colonel Austin, come in Colonel Austin..over.” He grabbed the mic, and returned their call.

“Sir, we have priority call for you, from your wife.” Steve smiled and laughed a bit. (It seems like Steve said that last line.)

“Put her through.” Jaime's sweet voice came through. (Looks like Jaime said this one, etc.)

“Steve?” Her voice always made him smile.

“Yes sweetheart” Jaime replied.

“Oh good, hoped I‘d catch you before you went ashore…I..I wanted to say…be careful and I love you.” Steve countered. (This one is the most confusing. It really seems like Steve said it.)

“I love you to sweetheart…should be talking to you again in about four or five hours tops.”


should look like this:

”OSI relay station Hawaii calling Colonel Austin, come in Colonel Austin..over.”

He grabbed the mic, and returned their call.

“Sir, we have priority call for you, from your wife.”

Steve smiled and laughed a bit. “Put her through.”

Jaime's sweet voice came through. “Steve?”

Her voice always made him smile. “Yes sweetheart”

Jaime replied. “Oh good, hoped I‘d catch you before you went ashore…I..I wanted to say…be careful and I love you.”

Steve countered. “I love you to sweetheart…should be talking to you again in about four or five hours tops.”


Thanks for a fun chapter.

Thank you, I think I have it now.

Thanks for everyones help. Need to proof read earlier and not at 11:00 pm at night. Let me know if you catch anymore.

Thanks again to everyone here.
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Hey you're welcome. Proofreading is not my favorite activity any time of day!
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Jun 3 2009, 09:14 AM
Hey you're welcome. Proofreading is not my favorite activity any time of day!

I made some more corrections....hope it makes it even more enjoyable
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Nice story - I've enjoyed all the chapters so far.
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Chapter 3

Jaime Stepped off the fighter jet, that Major Dumas piloted from Ojai to Hawaii. She had flown many times before but it always carried a bit of bad feelings She had radioed ahead for the OSI field office to have a chopper on standby to take her out to the Island of Ninau. Jaime knew she would have to move fast, before Oscar found out and he was very good at finding out things fast.

“Ok Jaime, you be sure to tell that husband of yours that after this were even.” Major Dumas winked and grinned.

Jaime smiled at him continuing the lie. “I will and I know he will be thankful…seeing as how his wife is going to surprise him.” She handed him the helmet and took off the flight suite in the hanger.

“Well you and Steve have a good time here Jaime…have a few drinks on me. “ The Major finished.

Two men in black suits walked up, a bit hurried. “Miss Austin?” the slightly older man spoke.

“Yes that’s me, your Agents Jacobson and Smith?” she started walking toward the hanger entrance the fighter jet had taxied into.

“Yes Ma’am…we have the chopper ready but?” the younger agent Smith stated

“We have to say this is a bit irregular, no orders of this assignment and no code clearance from OSI HQ…” the older agent questioned her.

Jaime thought quickly on her feet, a skill she had honed on her many missions. “Well agent Jacobson…you can call ahead while we are on our way, but if we're late… Oscar Goldman is going to be very, very upset with one of you.” Jaime gave them her best steely glare, and continued walking toward the waiting helicopter, just landing.

Running ahead of her they opened the side door of the two setter copter, just as Jaime had wanted…just her and the pilot. She stayed all business while they took off, and headed toward the island. “Listen, we need to maintain radio silence until we reach our destination, understood.”

“Yes Ma’am but no one informed me of that.” The pilot replied to her.

“This is OSI classified, from Oscar Goldman himself…now do you want me to call the Director about you not being able to follow a senior agents lead?”

Jaime looked at her watch, as the copter lifted off and headed at full speed out toward the open sea in the direction of Ninau. She did the math; it had only been two hours since she left Ojai. “How long till were over the island?”

“We should be there in a half hour or so Miss Austin.” He replied.

Jaime silently prayed that if anything was wrong, Steve could hold on for that long…two hours and thirty minutes. Not a long time by standards but forever to her. “Can we go any faster?”

“I can push it Miss Austin but the extra fuel will be gone.” He didn’t finish.

Jaime cut in on him. “Then go faster.” She sat back and continued to watch the sea for any signs of a boat or anything.

Meanwhile back on Ninau, Steve, Chris and Michael had made their way up toward a high ridge overlooking the sea. Steve had found a cave for them and took them as deep inside as he could. To heal up and think through his next move.

“Look Austin, I don’t think sitting in this cave is the best idea,” Chris sat looking up the cave entrance.

Steve looked at him with his right eye, while Michael wrapped cloth from his shirt around the bloody mess of his left. “So what’s your plan Williams?”

“I move out and lay in wait; maybe I can get one or two more with the pistol.” Chris thought out loud, trying to find an advantage somewhere.

“Chris they would be on you faster than you can imagine.” Steve stressed to him. “You’ve seen what they can do, and they know this island.”

“So…what then, we wait here till what, till they find us…then what Colonel?” Chris spoke his frustrations.

“Chris, why don’t you back off?” Michael turned from working on Steve. “Steve is doing the best he can.”

“So that’s it huh, the best the great hero Steve Austin can come up with…let’s wait.” Chris was letting his jealousies get the better of him.

Michael had had enough. “Williams stop it…you’re not helping anything here..ok. If not for Steve…we…we would be dead now."

Chris exhaled and sat back down. “You’re right…just got carried away there..Austin.”

Steve watched him, and began to believe there was more to this man’s anger then just this present situation, he was downright…jealous and that could cause a lot of problems. Steve got up and tested the sling for his left arm Michael made. “Good job Michael…thanks for fixing me up.”

“Yeah…yeah but you know he does have a point…we cannot just sit here, you know they will find us Steve.” Michael stressed with fear.

Steve got to his feet, lest they were not hurting at all, a gift of bionics, no pain legs or pained right arm. “I’ll take a look outside…you two sit tight….I will be back.”

Steve jogged up to the entrance and kneeling took a look outside. ‘Shoot, if I only had my eye.” Steve looked out, taking time to take in the area. No one yet he thought. Just as he started to turn back, he heard it...the faint sound of….a helicopter? Steve listened, judging from the sound it was coming in from the west…it was headed to the camp. Steve went back and told Chris and Michael to stay here…he was going to have run full out to try and get to the camp in time to warn or help whoever it was coming.

Across the island, Torg heard it too. “One of the earth peoples aircraft are coming. Riga, take one other and go spy what goes on. If they land somehwere, send word…and I will come with the others.”

Riga took off running with another Zanin following him.

Jaime looked through the binoculars scanning the beach, and the jungle as they approached the camp area. She saw the first signs of the camp, but..something was wrong…”There’s no one around…isn’t there a team of people here at all times?”

“Yeah most times I have been here.” The pilot stated to her.

Jaime had been an agent long enough to spot…danger when she saw and felt it. “Radio back to OSI HQ, and ask for Oscar Goldman…understand…Oscar Goldman…tell him Jaime Austin said to get help here fast…something has gone wrong.” Jaime looked outside. “There’s not enough room to land huh?”

The pilot laughed. “Your joking right…no there’s not enough space to land in there, that’s why we usually come in on the east side to land the copters.”

Jaime opened the door.

The pilot shouted at her. “What are you gonna do…you can’t jump from here, you’ll break your legs.”

Jaime smiled at him. “Listen you get back and radio for help…remember what I told you…understand…that’s…that’s an order…from a senior agent.” Jaime turned, stepped out slowly and leapt down from the copter.

She landed, and slightly fell to one knee. “Whew, haven’t done that in a while.” Getting up she scanned the area, after the stunned pilot flew off. Jaime waited until it was safe not to pick up the copter, and listened with her bionic ear for anything.

Faintly she heard it…someone was coming…fast.
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Got Episode 4 in just in time.

Hope I got the proof reading better this times.
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Jaime's determination - and her cleverness in getting things done her way - is very authentic and extremely Jaime-like. Nice job!
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You got it J - great job. That was a much clearer read. I liked the tension between the three men and Jaime's take charge attitude. Thanks for a terrific chapter.
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You got it J - great job. That was a much clearer read. I liked the tension between the three men and Jaime's take charge attitude. Thanks for a terrific chapter.

Thanks a lot.

I have been schooled and I am taking it to heart. Not as fast with my story but getting there.
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Good chapter! It was much easier to read too.
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