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| Bionika | May 29 2010, 04:44 PM Post #1 |
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I've achieved the first part of the adventure : writing. Tomorrow or the day after tomorrow (it will depend of my sleepiness tonight for doing reread and chapter cutting), I'll do the second part : posting. But I know that I will need your help because sometimes my dictionnary didn't give me satisfactory translation and I know that what I have written isn't good. For instance : when you are on first floor and the lift isn't , how do you say/describe the action for have the lift coming? The French expression is "appeler l'ascenceur" but I don't think that the word to word translation : "call the lift" is correct. I know too , that despite WORD automatic correcting, it will remain mistakes (especially grammar mistakes). Perhaps you could use this thread or e-mail me to point them out and I will edit the chapter poster and correct it in order to write not too much nonsenses and be understandable. Thank a lot in advance Bionika |
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| OJFan | May 29 2010, 04:51 PM Post #2 |
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Hmm... Well, If I was at the first floor and the elevator wasn't (I'd call the lift an elevator), then I'd probably either say something like "called for the elevator" or, "pressed the button and waited for the elevator". It would depend on the context - and are you narrating or is a person speaking? |
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| bionic4ever | May 30 2010, 12:08 PM Post #3 |
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I TALK TOO MUCH! LOL!
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"Pressed the elevator's call button" also works. |
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| messyhead | May 30 2010, 01:09 PM Post #4 |
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Yeah, that's nice and concise - you could simplify it a bit more by saying "Pressed the elevator call button". (Getting rid of the possessive.) |
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| OJFan | May 30 2010, 01:43 PM Post #5 |
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Good point. |
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| Bionika | May 30 2010, 03:10 PM Post #6 |
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Thank a lot for your help OJFan, Beth and Messyhead. My dictionnary just said that lift is the British word and elevator is the American one . For myself, I don't make the difference!!! But I think that I will use elevator because most of readers must be American one. (I discovered these difference of words between British and American people also when I wrote the LBL about Christmas holidays...or vacations. I went from one to the other because it was helpful in order not to repeat the same word ). In my story, it's not narrative, Jaime asks Peggy to "press the elevator call button". So, now, I'll go back to my text and make the corrections. I've also discovered that I have made a big mistake in chronology too and I'll have to change some dates. Bye Bionika |
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| OJFan | May 30 2010, 06:45 PM Post #7 |
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I think the phrase is perfect. Don't worry too much about getting it all perfect - I'm so impressed with your linguistic skills! |
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| Bionika | May 31 2010, 03:31 PM Post #8 |
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Hello Well, all the corrections have been made...it's time to post now You may found that a little stupid but I'm at the same time a bit moved and worried : - worried about the posting : before writing in WORD session I made a test of "copy and paste" with one sentence and it was perfect but now I's not one sentence I'm going to copy ...if it doesn't work?;;;; - worried about the text : will I be understandable? Won't it will be too descriptive, boring, will readers like the story... - worried about the chapters : won't they be too long, too short? Have I cut them at the right moment... (a smilie with somebody bitting his mails his missing for these three cases!) I don't waste anymore time, I take the plunge. Thank for your help Bionika |
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| Bionika | May 31 2010, 03:36 PM Post #9 |
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Just one additional thing to say (I should have quote this before writing the post above). I think that some other members have more skills than me (like Elise for instance). When I write "big" posts, I try to pay attention to vocabulary and grammar. Moreover, I write with the help of dictionnary to help me and I write slowly (for instance I began the story mid of March and I wrote nearly everyday during half an hour to an hour...and I'm ready to post only now : at beginning of june!). I also do reread. In fact, chatting with you, reading your stories and writing mine has made me making lot's of progress. Thank also to you for that. Bionika |
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| messyhead | May 31 2010, 06:25 PM Post #10 |
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Bionika I take FOREVER to write my stories and English is my first language. You do so well! (And I'm glad you enjoy your time on this board. It's great having you here.) |
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| OJFan | Jun 1 2010, 06:43 AM Post #11 |
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I've been working over a year on this latest one, albeit not non-stop. I admire your tenacity! |
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| Bionika | Jun 1 2010, 03:39 PM Post #12 |
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Thank Messyhead You post is just an exemple of my sentence about learning with you in my previous post : I knew "forever" in the meaning "bionic for ever" but thank to you I discover the meaning of phrase "to take forever". That's a relief to know that for most of writers , it take a long time too. Yes, I enjoy a lot this board. I feel confident. I've registered also in "Official Bionic Woman" site (it's required if you want to have access to video player or see the pictures but I don't feel confident and I think that I've posted in only one or two time). Bionika |
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| Bionika | Jun 1 2010, 03:48 PM Post #13 |
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Thank too, OJFan Remember, you had made me make the first plunge with the LBL In fact, when I begin to write, it's like a drug : I would like to have the story to progress and nearly "need" to write some sentences each day!! Bionika |
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| bionic4ever | Jun 1 2010, 04:13 PM Post #14 |
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I TALK TOO MUCH! LOL!
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That's exactly how I feel!
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| OJFan | Jun 1 2010, 06:57 PM Post #15 |
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Oh, thanks! I was inspired myself by a few members when I first joined! Yes, it IS like a drug - I was writing non-stop for awhile
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