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Topic Started: Mar 25 2013, 08:30 PM (44 Views)
Chris Lawler
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Hey folks, if I could get some feedback on my latest RP, it's been a while since I've done this and I should've done it for last weeks, but didn't, but if you could give it a read and PM me a little feedback would be WONDERFUL! Thanks guys :D.... Feed. Me. Feedback. :unsure:
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Alexia Brandt
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A purely personal thing, but I really don't like center oriented RPs; it throws off paragraph formatting and I have a difficult time knowing what's going on. That being said this is a subjective thing and what it all boils down to is what works for you as a writer. Whatever makes it easier for you to tell your story, run with it.

I think my only criticism is that I'm having a bit of difficulty seeing your character. I suspect part of this is that you're giving nuance to his character in your CD sections that are fed from background work that we haven't really seen yet, so I'm not going to put too much emphasis on that.

I did want to say I liked the reveal about Nancy leaving Chris (and I JUST realized there's some unfortunate undertones to those two names), it added a really nice layer to your first promo. I'm curious about who's been calling, as well as maybe some more information on what led to the separation in the first place.

Good luck in your match against Abel!
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