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do you like my book so far
yes,i like it 1 (16.7%)
i love it 1 (16.7%)
its ok 4 (66.7%)
i dont like it 0 (0%)
i hate it 0 (0%)
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my warrior cats book; vote
Topic Started: Jul 19 2012, 08:05 AM (178 Views)
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this is my warrior cat book, i will only post the proluge but as i finish a chapter ill post the chapter. vote on the pole if u like it. tell the truth,i dont care if u hate it. but please please please vote


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The wind wiped around the rocks as the cats gathered. One cat stepped up ‘’it is time, they have come. We must send a sign.’’ The other cats gasped and one gray cat stepped forward ‘they have finally come, how can you be sure’’ the large tabby cat on the rock bowed his head ‘’ my dreams were dark and my sleep disturbed until now, I know they have come at last.’’
He stepped off the rock. ‘’streamfeather, would you send the sign. You were closest to velvetstar’’ the old tabby walked away, heading down the mountain and disappeared.
The beautiful silver she-cat named streamfeather stood on the rock, her blue eyes shimmering in the sunlight ‘’I will send a sign to my sister velvetstar, warning her about what lays ahead. I have to go to wishing rock, I hope to have no trouble getting there. As she was about to leave a voice spoke’’ I don’t think you should go streamfeather, it’s a dangerous path to the wishing rock’’ streamfeather turned to him and hissed ‘’I will be fine crookedclaw just leave me alone.’’ She turned and headed down the slope but teeth fastened into her tail ‘’crookedclaw i-bluetail why are you trying to stop me.’’ Bluetail the elderly cat that had first spoken glared at her ‘’ you know how dangerous a path it is to wishing rock. Don’t go streamfeather,I know you want to see your sister, but it’s not worth it, stay here and let one of us go.’’ She ripped her tail free and turned around hissing ‘’ I want what’s best for the clans, I’m going right now and no one can stop me from going. I want to make sure my sisters ok, and warn her of the times ahead.’’ She left padding along the dusty trail wondering what dangers lay ahead.
When streamfeather had left bluetail gathered the cats together ‘’I hope she will make it, her will makes her stronger.’’
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Elaborate on details and separate into proper paragraphs. Otherwise, it's decent
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well i havnt checked over it. i always check over it after im done with atleast the first chapter. thanks for telling me. btw it doesnt have a lot of detail because its not supposed to,thats how i wrote it.
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It's good, more of a long story in a sense. Although there are a couple of things I picked up on, then again we all have own custom way of writing it is probably my OCD...
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thanks
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It's pretty cool, great job! But some advice: you should give it more of an air of mystery, perhaps a prophecy or a dream. You could also add that they're in Starclan or the Dark Forest, or there's a mysterious death or a little more of the prologue. Heck, the the possibilities are endless! Good job though.
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thanks,but there is going to be a phrophecy its just in the first chapter
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Okay, that's good. Do you know what it is yet?
PLEASE join Foreverclan, all new members will be either declined by hollyleaf102 or most likely accepted by hollyleaf102. Just go to Plot & Requests. DON'T go to the subforum, just click on Plot & Requests in the main menu. Thank you!

If you want Ruby, my eviillll cat mercinary, just give me a PM. She's the best assassin around, and I'll give her services for free, but of course, she herself will always require something in return. ;) Thanks!

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It seems to me that everyone else is writing stories along side of me. ^.^ Maybe I'll post mine soon too, in another topic.
Like Goldy, I picked up on some things, but I know for sure it's just my OCD. XD I like it so far, keep it up! :)
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