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| Mαri ♖ | Jul 8 2013, 06:55 PM Post #1 |
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PLEASE DO NOT ASK TO READ IT TO JUST TELL ME IF YOU LIKED IT OR NOT. I'M LOOKING FOR ADVICE FOR HOW TO WRITE MORE WORDS, SQUEEZE MORE IN THERE. IF YOU'RE JUST ASKING TO READ IT TO READ IT, DON'T BOTHER LOOKING AT WHAT'S BELOW AND LEAVE. So, in order to further improve my writing of one-sided scenes{roleplaying, basically} up into the low thousands, I've decided to put a challenge to myself, that being down below. I seem to get muse, and work better into fixating the emotions of that scene, when I have music playing. I started with a song, and immediately got to work, writing approximately one-hundred-and-thirty words in an about three-minute-and-something-below-thirty-seconds song. Then I put a little line there to mark my place, and moved on to another song, this one being around two minutes, and ranked ninety-three words, which is better than the first. It got higher and lower as I continued on, until I decided to end the scene. Eight-hundred-and-forty words is what I came out with, in about nineteen minutes -a few seconds off- worth of songs, which is six, with one replayed one time. I haven't done the math on that yet, so I don't know how good that is, but since I was making it up as I went on, I know I didn't put in a hundred words per minute, and probably a word every two or three seconds, if that sounds correct to all you math geniuses out there. So what I want is for some if you to read it, anyone who wants to, and critique it. Critique on the structure, the emotion, the impact it gave you, the sensory, anything you want, and everything you want. I also need tips on how to not get too attached to a piece, seeing as how every one thing I seem to write, I want to whip around and turn into a novel two seconds later. xDD And that's not good. Another thing I need is how all of you guys, all of you really fast, making-stuff-up-on-the-wind people, get your ideas for writing. I had intended to do a piece with a feline, seeing as how I'm doing this to benefit my roleplaying on here, but my mind seems to bounce back to "there's a time limit" and it set me off with something different. I tend to struggle with that, too. c; Like, I'll stop and restart a song twenty seconds before it finishes, because I know it's going to end, and my heart pumps faster, and all of that stuff. But enough of that. If you want to see the piece I'm talking about, just say so on here and I'll send it to you through pm, or you can message me, if you want to maintain a secrecy. c; And if it's okay with the critique, I might add a part below of what I've been given answers to and don't need any more -hence, giving way to different questions- and the person who gave it to me, or something like that. My goal is actually three thousand words per roleplaying post, so I think 840 is an okay start for my first time, though I would have liked to have hit a thousand. There won't really be a time limit, I just wanted to see how fast I can do it in, and get ideas in. For those of you who are wondering, I'm making really sad posts today to save up muse for these big posts:) Edited by Mαri ♖, Jul 12 2013, 05:18 PM.
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| Mαri ♖ | Jul 10 2013, 01:50 AM Post #2 |
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| ~Don't Blink~ | Jul 10 2013, 04:08 AM Post #3 |
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Could I see this piece? Id be interested in reading it and taking a look.
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| Magikarp | Jul 10 2013, 08:09 AM Post #4 |
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Can I see it? It sounds interesting. |
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| Delta | Jul 10 2013, 08:11 AM Post #5 |
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Sounds interesting. I'd be willing to take a look. |
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| Ash | Jul 10 2013, 09:33 AM Post #6 |
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| Heartbeat | Jul 10 2013, 11:06 AM Post #7 |
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pfft dawny ♥♥
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make-stuff-up-on-the-wind people //flips hair i supppose you mean me aha no. but i would love to read over your pieces c: |
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| Mαri ♖ | Jul 10 2013, 02:28 PM Post #8 |
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I'll get you all the first one c: As a note, please excuse any spelling mistakes. I haven't bothered to go back and correct any of them. And any marks looking like '||; are the dividers I was talking about, so don't mind them. |
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| Axolotled | Jul 12 2013, 04:51 PM Post #9 |
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I would love to read it! |
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Id be interested in reading it and taking a look.

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