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| Chris | Oct 13 2012, 07:24 PM Post #1 |
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Most people climb to the top, While others fall into a bottomless abyss, Surrounded by darkness and pain, Nothing to gain. The darkness tends to choke me, Trying to kill me, ‘Til I breathe my last breath, With the last heave of my chest, With my heart beat put to the test, I will finally rest. I feel chained down by life, Only to be calmed by a knife. I wanna be freed by death, But I don’t wanna leave the rest. I cannot always see past the darkness, I feel restless. I don’t always see black and white. I have a life, I don’t need a knife. I have friends, This isn’t a dead end. I have food, Which is good. I have shelter, It can be better. I have a future, I’m not a loser. I have hope, And that’s all I need to cope. I will be here tomorrow, Hopefully with less sorrow. One day I can say, “I survived,” Feeling like I’ve just been revived. It will feel like I’ve been given a new birth, Having more self-worth. I will feel like I can fly, And I won’t have to say my last good-bye. |
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| Kelso45 | Oct 13 2012, 07:42 PM Post #2 |
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Gone.
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Love <3 |
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| Mr. Music | Oct 13 2012, 08:03 PM Post #3 |
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Chris, that is absolutely amazing. You need to keep writing, there is talent flowing through those words. Honestly, it is one of most beautiful poems I have read in a long time. |
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| Chris | Oct 13 2012, 09:56 PM Post #4 |
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Thanks! It means a lot. |
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| Kittie | Oct 13 2012, 11:38 PM Post #5 |
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This is a GREAT poem, and a good way to let out your feelings! I used to write all the time and now I look back and think "Why was I so sad and angry?" |
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| MagicalPandas | Oct 14 2012, 12:27 AM Post #6 |
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That Is Ahmazing (: |
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| ELiiNaS | Oct 14 2012, 01:49 AM Post #7 |
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Duty. Honour. Respect.
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amazing! i agree keep writing.(if you want) |
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| Chris | Oct 14 2012, 02:58 AM Post #8 |
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I usually don't write, but you people are inspiring me to write. I think I might start writing more often! |
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| Chris | Oct 14 2012, 03:01 AM Post #9 |
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I need a title for this poem! Anyone have a good one? |
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| Jstarr | Oct 14 2012, 11:06 PM Post #10 |
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This is a stellar piece ! As for a title.... Try " Fighting fo Hope" or something along those lines. Great Job!!! <3 |
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