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Ferneyes: Leafclan Warrior; 17 moons, Warrior
Topic Started: Nov 2 2012, 06:24 PM (70 Views)
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Character Name: Ferneyes
Furcadia Name: Ferneyes
Rank: Warrior
Age: 17 moons.
Family: None, all have been killed by twoleg poison.
Short description of appearance: Cream and brown she-cat tabby with pale green eyes.
Detailed description of appearance. Ferneyes has cream fur with brown tabby stripes(they have slightly different shades). Her eyes are pale green and have a faint golden tinge to them. She also has a small scar on her back, which is quite hard to see under her fur.
Personality: Ferneyes is alert, serious and obedient. She may appear strict to other cats but she is a warm, soft cat at heart. She is able to keep her anger in at times, but a fixed glare is an easy sign for others to keep away. She often gets very quiet, especially when it comes to twolegs and poison, since it reminds her of the family she would never get back.
History:
0 moons= Ferneyes is born as Fernkit to her mother, her eyes greener at the time.
4 moons= Fernkit climbs up a tree and was stuck there for the entire day. She was punished by eating after the other kits.
6 moons= Is named apprentice: Fernpaw. Parents were found killed by twoleg poison a few weeks later. Mentored by _______(Unknown).
10 moons= She was attacked by an enemy cat and got the scar on her back.
14 moons= Littermates were found killed by poison.
17 moons= Ferneyes is made warrior and given her warrior name.
Edited by Ferneyes, Nov 18 2012, 12:21 PM.
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I apologize for the long wait! Everything looks fine to me, except at the very end:

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14 moons= Littermates were found killed by poison. She ends up killing a hare for no reason and is punished by waiting another two moons to get her warrior name.
17 moons= Ferneyes is made warrior and given her warrior name.


14 + 2 = 16, not 17. Not only that, she wouldn't have been punished for killing a hare 'for no reason'; it would have just gone to the fresh-kill pile. There was no 'crime' committed there, so either come up with something else or remove it, please.
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