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Trapped in anime; アニメの中に閉じ込め Anime no naka ni tojikome
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Topic Started: May 15, 2014, 6:30 pm (3,894 Views)
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Souly
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May 20, 2014, 9:01 pm
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♪ Piece of Garbage ♪
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Oh no. I think I like this Tony.
I enjoyed it! I laughed a little as well. I look forward to the upcoming chapters--
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Ah? Ah? What's wrong with a little f i l t h in your life?
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Shigitou burikaa
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May 24, 2014, 10:51 am
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give me a reason to care once more. new mod for the grt. -in sachiko I trust-
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ITS FINALLY Spoiler: click to toggle Trapped in Anime: prologue!
It was a nice, sunny, Tuesday afternoon and there was an Anime convention going on. A group of friends decided to meet up at the entrance way and their names are: Andrew, tony, Jessica, Ashton, Kyle, Sierra and Hanna. Each of the friends cosplays as their favorite anime characters. The first member at the convention was Sierra and she dressed up as a female version of Sebastian Phantomhive from Black Butler. Sierra waited 5 minutes at the entrance way until the rest of her friends came, each of them arrived one minute after another. The second member to arrive was Andrew; whom cosplayed as Italy from Hetalia. The third member was Jessica who carried a sword and dyed her brown hair, to a vivid orange color that resembled Ichigo from Bleach. The forth member was tony, who wore a black and white tuxedo to supposedly resemble monokuma from Danganronpa. The fifth member was Hanna and she dressed up as Erza Skarlet from fairy Tail. The sixth member was Ashton and he cosplayed as Alucard from Hellsing. "Well, hello everyone." Sierra greeted " I see that we all cosplayed as characters from different animes" Sierra concluded. "Yeah, can't say that I'm not surprised" Jessica said. "Hmm, there sure are a lot of people here!" Ashton said. "HA! More like weaboo trash! The only reason I'm here is just to see all of my fans." Tony said with pride. "Fans? What fans? The ones that 'love' your voice acting on tumblr? Those aren't fans, those are people who lie and say that, just to make you feel happy." Ashton argued. "Ah, tony, omg is it really you!? Can I please have your autograph?!" A girl suddenly comes from no where and asks tony. "Oh sure" tony said, then gave the girl the autograph, then she skipped happily away. "Hmm, no fans, huh ashton?" Said tony sarcastically. "Uhhh! Shut up!" Ashton yelled with agitation. "Say aren't we missing someone? I mean there were seven of us invited, right?" Andrew asked. "Yes, we are missing someone. We are missing Kyle". Hanna said. "Kyle, you mean that damn corpse party fan? Forget about him, all he will do is just talk about corpse party." Tony ignorantly said. "Oh, speak of the devil." Ashton shouted. "Hello Everyone!" Kyle blurted happily. Kyle was the only one of the seven friends who didn't cosplay as anyone, though he did wear a blue plait shirt, bleach pants, a shotgun on his back, and a necklace that had a black ball and was surrounded by a blue aura. Kyle carried two items, one was a minecraft torch and the other was a sachiko charm, to resemble corpse party. "Well, well, well. The corpse party fan. Tell me, when are you going to stop liking such a peice of crap?!" Tony asked Kyle. " hmm, tony you've got some serious balls for calling corpse party a peice of crap. And speaking of which, I thought you would wear an attack on Titan shirt. Weaboo!" Kyle said. "AH! Weaboo! Who are you calling a weaboo?!" Tony yelled. "The same person who dressed to look like Monokuma." Kyle explained. "Trottel, at least I dressed with style, you don't even match." Tony said. " errr, don't you da------" Kyle said then paused. "Guys, stop your bickering and let's go." Hanna said as everyone entered the convention. "oh, ok" Kyle agreed Then he, tony and Hanna joined the others in the large building. When they got inside, Ashton asked: "so Kyle, who are you suppose to be? Ao Oni?" "Well, I didn't cosplay as anyone or anything. I basically dressed similar to the looks of my minecraft skin." Kyle explained. Oh... I'm just gonna say that you are Ao Oni." Ashton said with a sinister( trollface-like) grin. The Anime con was full of Japanese stuff, from hatsune miku dolls, to japanese soda. There were groups of fans and they would go on and on about their favorite anime characters, the most common grouping was with hetalia. Sadly, there weren't enough Danganronpa fans for tony to be around with, so he decided to join with the Attack on Titan fans. Although they were complete a-holes and kept on dissing tony, left and right. "Hehe, I laugh at how your own fan-base kicks you out. Go back to liking Danganro- oh wait, that's right! There is no fan-base for that! Looks like you goofed up again, tony. XD" Kyle said with unknown arrogance. "Hey Kyle, where's your fan-base?" Tony said with frustration. "Tony, my fan-base is over there. *points left*" Kyle said calmly. "AH-Wah?" Tony looked at the direction that Kyle was pointing and could not believe his eyes. A corpse party fan-base was there. "Yeah, I went over there and had a nice conversation with them and they even gave me this" Kyle said then pulled out a silver amulet made of 100% silver. The amulet was labeled "property of heavenly host." "So, you were accepted into their fan-base, and I wasn't accepted into mine?" Tony asked while devastated. "Uh-huh, You are Correct and your prize is. . . Nothing!" Kyle happily said. "*sigh* shut up, kyle." Tony said then walked away. "Hey Kyle, what's that paper doll in your pocket?" Sierra asked. "Oh this, this is a 'Sachiko ever after' charm from corpse party. It is said that if done correctly, we will become friends forever, but if done incorrectly, there will be a penalty. Why do you want to perform it?" "Yes" Kyle said then Sierra agreed. "I'll ask the others if they would like to join in" Sierra said then left to Andrew. " hey Andrew, do you want to perform a charm?" Sierra asked. "Eh, sure I guess." Andrew answered. "Good, now go and meet up with Kyle, I believe I saw him go into the basement of the entire building. I will go and ask the others." Sierra instructed and then went on her way, while Andrew went towards the basement. He arrived at the door. "I guess this is it?" He opened the door and walked down the stairs, when he got to the bottom, he saw Kyle with his eyes closed. "Uhm. . . Kyle. . . " Andrew asked "hmm? What do you want, Andrew?" Kyle asked. "Uhm, Sierra sent me here to do a charm, is that true?" Andrew explained. "That is correct, but where are the others?" Kyle said. "Sierra went to find them." Andrew said. Not even an hour, nor a minute after, the others came walking down to join Kyle and Andrew for the charm. "I'm glad you all came to join me. Though I am appalled that you came, tony" Kyle welcomed. "Yeah well, I didn't want to be left out and alone. Plus it's just a stupid paper charm. I think I can handle a few minutes of my time." Tony said. "Well then, are you ready for this?" Kyle asked. "Yes" shouted everyone. "Alright then, I will go over the steps to do this, first you grab the charm, then we say 'Sachiko- we beg of you' seven times, then after a count of three, we rip the charm apart. You guys got that?" Kyle explained as everyone shook their heads 'yes'. "Ok, now start!... . . . Alright, did everyone finish?" Kyle asked as everyone once again shook their heads 'yes'. " great now grab the charm and on the count of three, we rip.... 1... 2 ... 3!" Kyle said, but when the first tear was heard, the charm blew up, sending everyone flying backwards and hitting the wall. Everyone was knocked unconscious and at that moment, their bodies began to fade away into an upcoming tragedy PROLOGUE END FINISHED!
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ste teraz mojej obete. Vitajte v mojom herňa, zvieratko. Ja som teraz mučiť vás. . ~ポケウォーズ9000™ i am servent to no one.
I'm married to nana!
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Shigitou burikaa
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May 25, 2014, 9:49 am
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give me a reason to care once more. new mod for the grt. -in sachiko I trust-
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Next: chapter 1. HETALIA
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ste teraz mojej obete. Vitajte v mojom herňa, zvieratko. Ja som teraz mučiť vás. . ~ポケウォーズ9000™ i am servent to no one.
I'm married to nana!
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Yoshie Shinozaki
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May 25, 2014, 10:13 am
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The First Victim
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Awesome, I'm looking forward to it. (Though I'm unfamiliar with most of the anime they're being thrown into except for Helsing, Bleach somewhat and Black Butler so I think this will be a good way to get into the rest of the shows) Once again, looking forward to chapter one.
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"I Return This Nightmare. I Will Find You. Sleepless, Cloaked In Despair. I'm Behind You. Man Has Made Me Oh So Strong. Blurring Lines Of Right And Wrong. Far Too Late For Frail Amends. Now It's Come To Sweet Revenge. Desperate Hands That Lose Control. Have No Mercy On Your Soul."- Here Comes Revenge By Metallica.
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Shigitou burikaa
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May 26, 2014, 10:31 am
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give me a reason to care once more. new mod for the grt. -in sachiko I trust-
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Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Up next is a more complicated section and I don't have time to write it down on paper, so p.m. Me if I made an error The reason why it's complicated is because, well, it wont make any sense unless i make the full story of corpse party first. I know that you guys would love to see my story of corpse party first, but I put it last because, "kinda like cp itself " the whole story revolves around what happened in tenjin. Like you won't get the 1st through 5th chapters because something bad was about to happen So let me know now, before I write the first chapter, what I should do. Opinions are always welcome!
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ste teraz mojej obete. Vitajte v mojom herňa, zvieratko. Ja som teraz mučiť vás. . ~ポケウォーズ9000™ i am servent to no one.
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Yoshie Shinozaki
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May 26, 2014, 10:47 am
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The First Victim
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All I can say is go with the direction you feel is the best for your story. If its easier for you to write about the Corpse Party setting first but you want to save it for the finale... Go for it. If it was my story, I'd move into the Hetalia setting first to help give it a proper buildup for the ending. Ultimately, it's your story arc and if it doesn't seem to make sense to others right away, the ending will tie up some loose ends. As a wise man once said... "Limiting yourself to please the audience is bulls***"
All in all, write what you feel is best for you and your story. I think everyone will enjoy the ride to the end regardless.(I know I will)
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"I Return This Nightmare. I Will Find You. Sleepless, Cloaked In Despair. I'm Behind You. Man Has Made Me Oh So Strong. Blurring Lines Of Right And Wrong. Far Too Late For Frail Amends. Now It's Come To Sweet Revenge. Desperate Hands That Lose Control. Have No Mercy On Your Soul."- Here Comes Revenge By Metallica.
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Cain Marder
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May 26, 2014, 11:46 am
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This was really good, as Yoshie said, I will look forward for the next part of it
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 " ... You welcome, I love you ... Ima gonna die now... Oh shit, here they come, I'm fuckin' dead, this car has no traction... NOO!! Don't kill me!! Anything but this! WHY I'M MAKIN' DONUTS?!?!"
" This keer !!!"
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Sammiya
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May 27, 2014, 6:31 pm
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U-um, some constructive criticism... Try to divide out your story into different paragraphs, please. It's hard to read when it's all bunched up like that, and it's easy to lose your place/skip lines.
I just tried to read it but couldn't because I kept on missing lines. What I was able to read before giving up due to the formatting was good so far, though!
A-an example using part of your prologue: - Quote:
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It was a nice, sunny, Tuesday afternoon and there was an Anime convention going on. A group of friends decided to meet up at the entrance way and their names are: Andrew, tony, Jessica, Ashton, Kyle, Sierra and Hanna. Each of the friends cosplays as their favorite anime characters. The first member at the convention was Sierra and she dressed up as a female version of Sebastian Phantomhive from Black Butler. Sierra waited 5 minutes at the entrance way until the rest of her friends came, each of them arrived one minute after another. The second member to arrive was Andrew; whom cosplayed as Italy from Hetalia. The third member was Jessica who carried a sword and dyed her brown hair, to a vivid orange color that resembled Ichigo from Bleach. The forth member was tony, who wore a black and white tuxedo to supposedly resemble monokuma from Danganronpa. The fifth member was Hanna and she dressed up as Erza Skarlet from fairy Tail. The sixth member was Ashton and he cosplayed as Alucard from Hellsing.
"Well, hello everyone." Sierra greeted " I see that we all cosplayed as characters from different animes" Sierra concluded.
"Yeah, can't say that I'm not surprised" Jessica said.
"Hmm, there sure are a lot of people here!" Ashton said.
"HA! More like weaboo trash! The only reason I'm here is just to see all of my fans." Tony said with pride."
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Shigitou burikaa
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May 27, 2014, 6:38 pm
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give me a reason to care once more. new mod for the grt. -in sachiko I trust-
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- Sammiya
- May 27, 2014, 6:31 pm
U-um, some constructive criticism... Try to divide out your story into different paragraphs, please. It's hard to read when it's all bunched up like that, and it's easy to lose your place/skip lines. I just tried to read it but couldn't because I kept on missing lines. What I was able to read before giving up due to the formatting was good so far, though! A-an example using part of your prologue: - Quote:
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It was a nice, sunny, Tuesday afternoon and there was an Anime convention going on. A group of friends decided to meet up at the entrance way and their names are: Andrew, tony, Jessica, Ashton, Kyle, Sierra and Hanna. Each of the friends cosplays as their favorite anime characters. The first member at the convention was Sierra and she dressed up as a female version of Sebastian Phantomhive from Black Butler. Sierra waited 5 minutes at the entrance way until the rest of her friends came, each of them arrived one minute after another. The second member to arrive was Andrew; whom cosplayed as Italy from Hetalia. The third member was Jessica who carried a sword and dyed her brown hair, to a vivid orange color that resembled Ichigo from Bleach. The forth member was tony, who wore a black and white tuxedo to supposedly resemble monokuma from Danganronpa. The fifth member was Hanna and she dressed up as Erza Skarlet from fairy Tail. The sixth member was Ashton and he cosplayed as Alucard from Hellsing.
"Well, hello everyone." Sierra greeted " I see that we all cosplayed as characters from different animes" Sierra concluded.
"Yeah, can't say that I'm not surprised" Jessica said.
"Hmm, there sure are a lot of people here!" Ashton said.
"HA! More like weaboo trash! The only reason I'm here is just to see all of my fans." Tony said with pride."
Oh, you see, that's what I was thinking of doing, but I was worried about what others may say so I didn't do it. But now that you bring it up, I say. Ok. I will see what I can do to the prologue to make it better
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ste teraz mojej obete. Vitajte v mojom herňa, zvieratko. Ja som teraz mučiť vás. . ~ポケウォーズ9000™ i am servent to no one.
I'm married to nana!
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Shigitou burikaa
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May 27, 2014, 6:52 pm
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give me a reason to care once more. new mod for the grt. -in sachiko I trust-
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- Sammiya
- May 27, 2014, 6:31 pm
U-um, some constructive criticism... Try to divide out your story into different paragraphs, please. It's hard to read when it's all bunched up like that, and it's easy to lose your place/skip lines. I just tried to read it but couldn't because I kept on missing lines. What I was able to read before giving up due to the formatting was good so far, though! A-an example using part of your prologue: - Quote:
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It was a nice, sunny, Tuesday afternoon and there was an Anime convention going on. A group of friends decided to meet up at the entrance way and their names are: Andrew, tony, Jessica, Ashton, Kyle, Sierra and Hanna. Each of the friends cosplays as their favorite anime characters. The first member at the convention was Sierra and she dressed up as a female version of Sebastian Phantomhive from Black Butler. Sierra waited 5 minutes at the entrance way until the rest of her friends came, each of them arrived one minute after another. The second member to arrive was Andrew; whom cosplayed as Italy from Hetalia. The third member was Jessica who carried a sword and dyed her brown hair, to a vivid orange color that resembled Ichigo from Bleach. The forth member was tony, who wore a black and white tuxedo to supposedly resemble monokuma from Danganronpa. The fifth member was Hanna and she dressed up as Erza Skarlet from fairy Tail. The sixth member was Ashton and he cosplayed as Alucard from Hellsing.
"Well, hello everyone." Sierra greeted " I see that we all cosplayed as characters from different animes" Sierra concluded.
"Yeah, can't say that I'm not surprised" Jessica said.
"Hmm, there sure are a lot of people here!" Ashton said.
"HA! More like weaboo trash! The only reason I'm here is just to see all of my fans." Tony said with pride."
There, view it now
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ste teraz mojej obete. Vitajte v mojom herňa, zvieratko. Ja som teraz mučiť vás. . ~ポケウォーズ9000™ i am servent to no one.
I'm married to nana!
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