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Heavenly Host Laboratories; A fanfiction I'm currently writing
Topic Started: April 2, 2015, 1:36 pm (213 Views)
Emi Urabe
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Mentally Disturbed
Hello all!! Over on dA I've started writing a Corpse Party fanfic which is a cross between Corpse Party and Portal; more specifically bringing the Corpse Party characters into a setting resembling that of Portal. As of now I only have the prologue written, which should be linked down below, but I do have every intention of continuing to write this. Even so, I am curious as to what other Corpse Party fans think of what I have written. Constructive criticism is very welcome!!!

Corpse Party: Heavenly Host Laboratories Prologue
Without further ado, allow me to explain,
There's a little something causing that tick in my brain.
I can't take all the hurt,
Can't take all the pain.
Watching you mope around as if there's nothing to gain.
If I had a choice I would choose to fight.
Break free of my restraints and restore your light.
I'd erase the dark and defeat the night.
But that dream's impossible and out of sight. ~Bleeding Misery, sung by Nekomura Iroha, VY2 Yuma, and Hatsune Miku
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Shigitou burikaa
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give me a reason to care once more. new mod for the grt. -in sachiko I trust-

I... Just... Loved it all. Please keep going!
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~ポケウォーズ9000™
i am servent to no one.
I'm married to nana!
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Emi Urabe
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Thanks!! I'm glad that you like it! I'm currently working on Chapter 1, actually.
Without further ado, allow me to explain,
There's a little something causing that tick in my brain.
I can't take all the hurt,
Can't take all the pain.
Watching you mope around as if there's nothing to gain.
If I had a choice I would choose to fight.
Break free of my restraints and restore your light.
I'd erase the dark and defeat the night.
But that dream's impossible and out of sight. ~Bleeding Misery, sung by Nekomura Iroha, VY2 Yuma, and Hatsune Miku
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Shigitou burikaa
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give me a reason to care once more. new mod for the grt. -in sachiko I trust-

Emi Urabe
April 2, 2015, 6:48 pm
Thanks!! I'm glad that you like it! I'm currently working on Chapter 1, actually.
Awesome to hear.
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Posted Imageste teraz mojej obete. Vitajte v mojom herňa, zvieratko. Ja som teraz mučiť vás.Posted Image
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~ポケウォーズ9000™
i am servent to no one.
I'm married to nana!
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Yoshie Shinozaki
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Hey cool prologue, I really enjoyed the introspective narrative to the story, it was enlightnening.
Looking forward to chapter one, keep up the good work.(I honestly have one question, but I'll ask another time)
"I Return This Nightmare. I Will Find You. Sleepless, Cloaked In Despair. I'm Behind You. Man Has Made Me Oh So Strong. Blurring Lines Of Right And Wrong. Far Too Late For Frail Amends. Now It's Come To Sweet Revenge. Desperate Hands That Lose Control. Have No Mercy On Your Soul."- Here Comes Revenge By Metallica.
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Emi Urabe
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Thanks! But what is your question? I don't mind answering it.
Without further ado, allow me to explain,
There's a little something causing that tick in my brain.
I can't take all the hurt,
Can't take all the pain.
Watching you mope around as if there's nothing to gain.
If I had a choice I would choose to fight.
Break free of my restraints and restore your light.
I'd erase the dark and defeat the night.
But that dream's impossible and out of sight. ~Bleeding Misery, sung by Nekomura Iroha, VY2 Yuma, and Hatsune Miku
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