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BYSONE IS CLOSED???? :gasp:

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why is everything closed today ? first don's site and now this one
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i had finish reading a story...

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3981 and bysone?! I can't handle this :dramaqueen:


Poor Don though, no one deserves feeling like their privacy is being violated. Hope she stays strong.
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Yes, http://Bysone.net is currently down. We're working on getting it back up as soon as we can, so thank you for your patience!


oh,what a relief :toj:



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Yes, http://Bysone.net is currently down. We're working on getting it back up as soon as we can, so thank you for your patience!


oh,what a relief :toj:



Yeah if both bysone and 3981 had closed...wow. no.
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great now all my sources of good fic is gone.. what am I gonna do with life.
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A minute of silence for the two fallen fanfic websites

:drunk:

I'm not ready for this sad news, I haven't even finished reading the latest update of tree tattooed taeyeon dammit!!! and...and what about broken strings?? :bigcry: :bigcry:

Felt even worse for Don though, whoever decided to ruin her privacy is an arse....not cool dude, not cool at all

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Just throwing out a recommendation.
'Stars', I forget the name of the author but its one of the most popular completed fics on ssf.
its a really romantic and later angsty Yulsic story, it bought alot of tears to my eyes and id definitely recommend.

yep this is a pretty good fic, I got both pdf but can't remember where I retrieved them from (most probably $sf though, but I can't seem to find the story again) :ermm:

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i'm so Posted Image .


i follow more than 30 ffs and no one is updated...is even possible??


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^ :gasp: 30 fanfics???

I'm following way less than that, and I keep on forgetting most of the titles and what they are about ^o)
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May 28 2013, 07:00 PM
^ :gasp: 30 fanfics???

I'm following way less than that, and I keep on forgetting most of the titles and what they are about ^o)
yes,30 :D

i save them and i have a good memory i suppose. most of them are on-going anyway ;)
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I have them on bookmarks but since I bookmarked plenty of things (lol), so the links are pretty much invisible in the sea of other bookmarks.

any recommendations btw?
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what happened to 3981? It says it's private...

I even made an account on w0rdpress for you Don :fml:
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I have them on bookmarks but since I bookmarked plenty of things (lol), so the links are pretty much invisible in the sea of other bookmarks.

any recommendations btw?
sorry for the late reply,i was having dinner.

i already recommend every ffs i follow :D

but here the list:

Ride Out
HTAL
When The Lines Overlap
Invisible
Crooked Heart
Memory Of Glass
Written On My Heart
Keep Breathing
Let Me Love You
Going The Distance
Rainbow Colored Unicorn
CMI
Black Swan
Unstoppable Force Meets Immovable Object
Who Gets The Girl?
Darkness
Desperate Ex-Wives*
The Wishing Well*
The Sea And You
Unexspected*
Forgotten Rose
That Was Then, This Is Now

All The ffs of @uratus (Artie I sense your eyes on me...LOL joking)
HOM
SHOCH
ASLS
ANW

*are probably abandoned or in hiatus :'( others are probaly in hiatus or abandoned as well,but there's still hope :toj:

but you already know them all,right?? actually there are some others,but they aren't that great...



:kiss: Bye Bye
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Thank you very much for explaining. I think I see what you mean about the awkwardness, and yes, it does flow smoother with your rewording. However, I think you’re nit-picking a little on the description of the guns/bullets— by “small, slow bullets” I think he means they’re RELATIVELY slow compared to others, as in, “just under the speed of sound”. As for putting in "Ruger Mark II Amphibians" and the "60-grain bullets", I don’t know about you, but I kind of like detail. Also judging from his responses to comments, he does know quite a bit about firearms—it’s not like he’s just cramming in random names of guns. Compared to other authors of the action/spy genre, I’d say he’s doing fine in the weapons department. I agree that his metaphors need some work; “finger thwacks on ripe melons” gives me a good picture of what it should sound like, but it also brings up images of a supermarket fruit display. I’m personally fine with a bit of onomatopoeia, so I don’t mind "pfffbbt’s”. Although yes, it should be "pfffbbts". ^o)

I understand what you're saying about the errors, but I still find mistakes in syntax for the other two rather jarring, whereas I don’t tend to notice his mistakes as much. I honestly don’t know why. Maybe I have lower standards? :P Do you know any fics that have well-written prose AND good content? And thank you, I'll be waiting for your recommendations :D
Oh, don't get me wrong, I love accurate detail in fics, but I don't like it when it's just shoved in there for the sake of being there, y'know? I like it when detail makes sense in the context, rather than the author planting it in the middle of a sentence just to be like "look how much cool stuff I know!". It doesn't add anything to the narrative and it detracts from the flow because suddenly you're like, "oh, where did this weirdly specific example come from"? Am I making sense?;;

Another thing that's awkward about the infodumps - he says that Ruger Mark II Amphibians "pfffbbt". Do they? I don't know, I've no idea what one is until this very moment. The whole point of a metaphor is to use a completely different thing to describe the current thing, like... What he's essentially saying is, "The Ruger Mark II Amphibians that the assassins were using made the signature pfffbbt sound of a Ruger Mark II Amphibian". Well, of course it will. It sounds like a Ruger Mark II Amphibian because it IS a Ruger Mark II Amphibian, so you're effectively just repeating yourself.

For you, it might be nit-picking, but it was glaringly obvious to me and it really stood out as an astoundingly inaccurate adjective. Like, bullets aren't slow. At all. In the slightest. Describing them as slow is just flat-out wrong, and describing them as "relatively slow" feels too cumbersome and weighty in the sentence. Sure, you can use contextual clues to figure out he means relatively slow without him having to say it, but why would you do that? Why would you choose a word that's deliberately wrong and unfitting when you can just use another one that's both correct and more applicable?

And I don't think I have any good examples on me right now. I'm trying to finish up a few psych essays.
Hey all, Auratus here.

Bullets CAN be slow. But it's a relative thing. I would have thought that obvious, but a lot of people have jack-all experience with firearms, I suppose. It's mainly just physics. The whole point of silenced firearms is to be silent. Several factors determine the 'silence' of a firearm. Screwing a silencer on a pistol does NOT make it silent, only relatively quieter than that same pistol without the silencer. The can, which is what a silencer IS, is a metal shell lined with spaced baffles through the internal volume, with a small axial hole which the bullet passes through. The internal space between the baffles allows the propellant to expand and then exit at a lower velocity and volume. Without a silencer the unburned propellant (of which there is always some) would burn outside of the gun, giving both a muzzle flash AND the sound of a firecracker, since the propellant burns with a faster wavefront than the speed of sound. So it's a BANG unless contained.

None of which helps the bullet to be silent IF it goes faster than the speed of sound. At sea level and room temperature, this is around 1100 feet, or 340 meters per second. A .22LR, which is what the Ruger Mark II Amphibian normally shoots, is a small, light bullet moving about 1200 (40gn) to 1400 (30gn) feet per second. No pistol, no matter how silent, will be unheard if the bullet leaving it is moving faster than the speed of sound. That bullet makes a VERY audible supersonic crack. So in this case the assassins use a 60gn bullet, which is way heavy for a .22LR which puts the velocity under the speed of sound. (You want SOME margin since the speed of sound varies with atmospheric pressure and temperature)

BUT, the final consideration of ANY killing weapon is terminal performance. A .22LR is a small diameter bullet, and moving at less than the speed of sound makes it marginal on something the size of human at any range. Which is why these are close range shots. And it means careful shot placement. Face, skull, the central nervous system, are the obvious targets. With the blast contained by the water filled can (which is why it's called an Amphibian) the loudest sound to the execution is the impact of the bullet onto the skull. It is AMAZINGLY just like thumping a watermelon with your finger. Hollow sounding. The bullet does NOT exit either, just zips around in there like a caged rat.

Any subsonic (less than the speed of sound) is relatively slow in the realm of firearms. That's what I meant. Slower than the speed of sound, floating in an arc.

Hope that clears up any puzzlement. Feel free to ask me directly if you have any firearms related questions. Yes, I have shot and shoot most of the guns I write about.

Have a great day.

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I have them on bookmarks but since I bookmarked plenty of things (lol), so the links are pretty much invisible in the sea of other bookmarks.

any recommendations btw?
sorry for the late reply,i was having dinner.

i already recommend every ffs i follow

but here the list:


whoa, that's what I called a list!! hahaahha

thanks for recommending all of them, though I only asked for a few :P . I do follow some of the fics from your list, but I'm kinda scared to start reading a new on going tbh, I dont wanna be disappointed anymore :dramaqueen: (ride it out, desperate ex wives :bigcry: )

but of course, boredom always gets me and I probably will start reading a new on going soon :rofl:

thanks so much anon, you da best :hug:
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I have them on bookmarks but since I bookmarked plenty of things (lol), so the links are pretty much invisible in the sea of other bookmarks.

any recommendations btw?
sorry for the late reply,i was having dinner.

i already recommend every ffs i follow

but here the list:


whoa, that's what I called a list!! hahaahha

thanks for recommending all of them, though I only asked for a few . I do follow some of the fics from your list, but I'm kinda scared to start reading a new on going tbh, I dont wanna be disappointed anymore :dramaqueen: (ride it out, desperate ex wives )

but of course, boredom always gets me and I probably will start reading a new on going soon

thanks so much anon, you da best :hug:
Ahahaha i wrote them all for safety.
Most of the ffs have lack of updates,cause in this period of time there are the exams,so is quite normal. When the exams will be over, a lot of ffs will be updated,i'm sure of it. :fab:
Have faith sister :wine:
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on goings require too much investment on my part.

one shots 5ever :gaypimp:
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No offence, Auratus (no need to censor, since you're already here), but I already knew most of those things from casual research; granted, not to those specifics, so I can thank you for expanding my knowledge on something I'm only briefly aware of.

However, I don't feel like that's my issue with what was said. As I previously stated, I understand that speed is all a matter of relativity, but the fact is, if you're using an ill-fitting word that requires contextual clues and that stands out as ill-fitting, perhaps you'd be better of substituting that word with another, more appropriate, one, just for the sake of clarity.

That was my problem with the usage of the word.
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No offence, Auratus (no need to censor, since you're already here), but I already knew most of those things from casual research; granted, not to those specifics, so I can thank you for expanding my knowledge on something I'm only briefly aware of.

However, I don't feel like that's my issue with what was said. As I previously stated, I understand that speed is all a matter of relativity, but the fact is, if you're using an ill-fitting word that requires contextual clues and that stands out as ill-fitting, perhaps you'd be better of substituting that word with another, more appropriate, one, just for the sake of clarity.

That was my problem with the usage of the word.
Per your suggestion, I've amended the passage to remove the offending word, 'slow'. I hope it meets your approval.

And by way of explanation, what I write in fanfic rarely gets the same editing time as what I write for work. It's much more stream of consciousness, which might explain the piecemeal sentence construction. It's... fanfic. Though I do think I've improved in the three years I've been writing fanfic. I still make quite a few errors and greatly appreciate when my commenters catch them and point them out to me for correction. After all, 90% of finished writing happens during the edits.

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Death came for the man inside the house, in multiple shapes, all darkly dressed, whispering with foreign accents. The three guards at the front of the house died before they knew it with the simultaneous impact of small bullets into their skulls, the .22 caliber 60-grain bullets traversed the short distance just under the speed of sound, the sound of their impacts like finger thwacks on ripe melons. Bodies crumpled, the thud of meat on ground louder than the burbling pfffbbts of the water-suppressed Ruger Mark II Amphibians. The guards' unremarked collapse was the signal for other silent assassins, marksmen with heavier caliber suppressed rifles. They took shots at the two guards on the roof line. Still more riflemen hit the two men who walked the back lawn.

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I feel like I've stepped beyond my station, here. :rofl:

It's somewhat better, I suppose, although I think you should stick to your original; your style might feel inconsistent if you're only editing piecemeal with the smaller things I say.

(While you're here: I do actually really like that first sentence. Very vivid picture and sets the scene extremely well.)
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I feel like I've stepped beyond my station, here. :rofl:

It's somewhat better, I suppose, although I think you should stick to your original; your style might feel inconsistent if you're only editing piecemeal with the smaller things I say.

(While you're here: I do actually really like that first sentence. Very vivid picture and sets the scene extremely well.)
Oh, I hardly think many boundaries exist out here on the internet. Everything is a free-for-all and being sensitive doesn't improve the writing, which is the entire point of the exercise.

I take any offered corrections gladly and if it will improve the readability of what are very quickly written pages, I'm all for it. I could wish for a greater number of critical comments than just blurbs of praise. Write 4000+ pages of fics very quickly and a lot goes needing a second pass and polish but spending that time comes hard when I'd rather be writing new content. It's always been a rough and tumble sort of thing and betas are never fast enough to keep up.
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Oh, I hardly think many boundaries exist out here on the internet. Everything is a free-for-all and being sensitive doesn't improve the writing, which is the entire point of the exercise.

I take any offered corrections gladly and if it will improve the readability of what are very quickly written pages, I'm all for it. I could wish for a greater number of critical comments than just blurbs of praise. Write 4000+ pages of fics very quickly and a lot goes needing a second pass and polish but spending that time comes hard when I'd rather be writing new content. It's always been a rough and tumble sort of thing and betas are never fast enough to keep up.
Out of curiosity, why don't you register? I feel like we'd clog up the fanfic thread if we talked at length about your fic and corrections and stuff, and perhaps if you explained your style to me, I'd understand more where you're trying to go with it and it might change my opinion of your methods as a whole.

But, anyway. I feel like we may just have fundamental differences in our perception of what should go into writing, so even if I offer corrections, it may not read correctly to other people. I would, personally, write that paragraph something like this;

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Death came for the man inside the house, in multiple shapes, all darkly dressed, whispering with foreign accents. The three guards at the front of the house died before they knew it, bullets gliding across short distances and drilling simultaneously into each of their skulls, the sound of the impacts like finger thwacks on ripe melons. Bodies crumpled, the thud of meat on ground louder than the burbling pfffbbts of the weapons used to topple them: water-suppressed Ruger Mark II Amphibians, chosen for their specialty in stealth and subterfuge. The guards' silent collapse was the signal for other assassins to take their shots at two other guards on the roofline, marksmen with heavier caliber equipment. Still more riflemen hit the two men who walked the back lawn.


That's just me, though. My opinion might clearly not be shared, and for good reason. I'm no expert.

I understand somewhat why you add in the detail, because I think you're expecting a certain level of expertise in firearms that would mean the reader would be able to see the image more clearly when given specifics like that (i.e. they'll be able to comprehend the speed/impact/sound of the bullets more vividly), but to the average person who knows very little of the intricacies of arsenal, ".22 caliber 60-grain bullets" means nothing. It's just a bunch of technical terms that seem unceremoniously dumped in the middle of a sentence, and wouldn't add any depth to the description.

i really do like that first sentence lol :unsure:
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Does anyone have an update on Donkatsu's situation? I don't know what her twitter is :boohoo:
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Does anyone have an update on Donkatsu's situation? I don't know what her twitter is :boohoo:
donk's situation. 3981 is reopening tomorrow. :)
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Does anyone have an update on Donkatsu's situation? I don't know what her twitter is :boohoo:
her blog is still password protected right ? what a shame i really enjoy her fics.
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Does anyone have an update on Donkatsu's situation? I don't know what her twitter is :boohoo:
donk's situation. 3981 is reopening tomorrow. :)
oh god that last line was heart breaking :'(
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Does anyone have an update on Donkatsu's situation? I don't know what her twitter is :boohoo:
donk's situation. 3981 is reopening tomorrow. :)
oh god that last line was heart breaking :'(
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sorry,but what happened to her?? :blink:
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Oh what the bitch! The last time I read Fallen Arches...Yulti were getting at it...is Taeny back together now? OTL

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What did the troll do to Donkatsu?
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What did the troll do to Donkatsu?
revealed her username on ssf and uploaded fics that donk wasn't finished editing yet/took down
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Oh what the bitch! The last time I read Fallen Arches...Yulti were getting at it...is Taeny back together now? OTL

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Da Oh the drama I felt like all this happened because:

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3981 is back up. the only changes are to the download section and donkatsu's heart :dramaqueen:
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Oh what the bitch! The last time I read Fallen Arches...Yulti were getting at it...is Taeny back together now? OTL

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Da Oh the drama I felt like all this happened because:

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I really feel sorry for Don :( , she just wanted to write that's all. Fuckin trolls  :chainsaw:



and for on going anon, I will put my faith but not too much haha

(I have already put so much in Ride it out :'( and.......ES :bigcry: :bigcry: )
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